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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

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Luminary said...
on Jul. 12 2016 at 12:11 pm
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Woah! amazingly written :)

on Jun. 19 2016 at 10:50 am
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This poem is so meaningful. It is a beautiful piece! Please keep writing!!

on Jun. 12 2016 at 5:22 pm
just-a-little-human BRONZE, -, Other
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Such a good poem. I love the rhymes, you've seriously got some talent.

on May. 21 2016 at 2:55 pm
dont.cry.little.girl. SILVER, Ooltewah, Tennessee
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Though I love my dad and have a great relationship with him, I appreciate this piece because I think it captures the power of this sort of relationship-even the bad ones.

on May. 9 2016 at 2:48 pm
Experiences_happen BRONZE, Shawnee, Kansas
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"Faking a smile is so much easier than explaining why you're sad."

fahters arent worth any persons time. At least mine doesnt deserve My time

Edawg1 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 29 2016 at 2:10 pm
Edawg1 BRONZE, Clinton, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
To be you, is to be free

you'll have to wait for me to type mine because i have work to do.

Edawg1 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 29 2016 at 1:36 pm
Edawg1 BRONZE, Clinton, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
To be you, is to be free

very good! your good at poetry i see. you know if you would have gone any deeper then there would've been no words to describe poetry that deep. read mine and see. okay?

on Apr. 29 2016 at 10:59 am
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This is the best poem I seen

on Apr. 27 2016 at 1:21 pm
astridianmayfly BRONZE, Rye, New York
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I adore this

on Apr. 13 2016 at 9:40 am
Pursephone BRONZE, Port Washington, New York
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- Bob Marley

This is truly great.

on Apr. 7 2016 at 2:57 am
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cut the chain and fly high in the sky like katy perry's fireworks.

on Mar. 31 2016 at 9:07 pm
TheOneandOnlyDL BRONZE, Southfield, Michigan
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This scared me a little bit but in the way poetry should. Love it!

on Mar. 31 2016 at 7:08 pm
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" If you can dream it, you can do it"

At first I was like huh? then I was like hmmmm then I said Ohhhhh lol nice work

on Mar. 22 2016 at 2:24 pm
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"Your boat may get jostled, it may even drown; but if you believe, you'll sail forever." g.c.

Very good at hide the true meaning

on Mar. 21 2016 at 12:06 pm
Maddsloves SILVER, Lenexa, Kansas
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This took me a minute, but then I understood. Very deep.

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This is amazing!!!

on Mar. 16 2016 at 7:53 pm
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whoa ... love this

on Mar. 2 2016 at 10:16 am
kandace_c1 BRONZE, Parma, Ohio
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this captures the feelings of many teens and their dreams and that they are on a chain and cant get off of it

on Feb. 23 2016 at 4:56 pm
Angdileo BRONZE, Stoneham, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
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This is an inspirational poem and amazing to know it was written by a teen. I hope Carl continues to write poetry as he grows older.

LionGrace GOLD said...
on Jan. 20 2016 at 8:11 pm
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From the child's eye, and yet serene. wonderful, loved it.