Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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miiranda_18 said...
May 13, 2015 at 6:43 pm
Go check out mine!
angelique said...
May 12, 2015 at 3:17 pm
WOW. you really have skills you can right good poetry its easy to understand I just love it
baby-p said...
Apr. 29, 2015 at 12:22 pm
i have a native American side to me so when i feel things deeply n strong i get empathy chills idk how to explain it just that this poem was heart touching
MadisonHudson said...
Apr. 24, 2015 at 2:44 pm
This was amazing. You have definetley got some skills.
beAWESOMEstayAWESOME said...
Apr. 19, 2015 at 8:02 pm
So the father wants his son to try new things,explore the world around him, become someone successful,amazing,and special, but at the same time he doesn't want his son to leave him all alone. This honeslty made me feel like crying,but i loved. *thumbs up* Keep writing! :)
12yearold said...
Apr. 12, 2015 at 11:36 am
I'm so sorry that I have to say this but this could be because I'm very dumb. But I got that The dad has got the child trapped but is the rest of the poem him just trying to do this. Can someone fully explain the very deep meaning through of this very beautifully written emotional and raw poem. Don't get me wrong, I love this poem.
passion_poet19 said...
Apr. 10, 2015 at 1:49 pm
i see beyond this flow of the words they speak to me but i really like this poem. GOOD JOB.!!
A helping hand said...
Apr. 7, 2015 at 11:14 am
This is called imprisonment, seek a local child counselor.
VaquerodelEspacio replied...
Apr. 8, 2015 at 2:44 pm
You just made my day good sir!
Atlas_Woman said...
Apr. 2, 2015 at 12:16 pm
Quite lovely....
Jozzykay said...
Mar. 31, 2015 at 10:48 am
This is so emotional I love it!
SweetMonster365This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 30, 2015 at 11:13 pm
I love how you can get dragged into the poem
HeleneZ said...
Mar. 30, 2015 at 2:55 pm
CharleyHeelis said...
Mar. 25, 2015 at 5:59 pm
Pls check out my work... Fire or Ice by CharleyHeelis. ....thanks xx
SkylerEldredge replied...
Apr. 9, 2015 at 5:09 pm
I'll gladly check out your work if someone will PLEASE check out mine, I've been writing for six years and I'm just starting to put it out there like everyone's been telling me too... thanks guys
PianoKeys97 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 23, 2015 at 4:16 pm
Sad, complex, powerful, and beautiful all at once. I loved reading this. Every idea flowed so coherently. This was a very unique, well-developed, and well-written poem. And the end, "I saw my Father pull on a chain, then I knew that I was bound," what a twist. Keep writing!
beAWESOMEstayAWESOME said...
Mar. 18, 2015 at 6:05 pm
jossette said...
Mar. 17, 2015 at 3:32 pm
I love it, it captures my feelings so well
anna2000 said...
Mar. 11, 2015 at 2:53 pm
I have read through this poem so many times and it keeps getting better. Good Work!
Anonwriter1821 said...
Mar. 9, 2015 at 10:59 pm
Amazing I love it.
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