Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Calum said...
Jun. 3, 2015 at 6:49 pm
ageofsherloc said...
May 31, 2015 at 10:24 am
would anybody be willing to look at one of my submissions It's my first spoken word piece and I would like as much feedback as possible. Thanks!
DietCoke This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 18, 2015 at 8:06 pm
It was great! I hope if you have time you'd check this out:
Roe-Daniels said...
May 29, 2015 at 8:46 am
I comment on this piece maybe a year ago and it is still number one in the most discussed. That's a true sign of a good poem. Looking forward to reading more of your work Carl H
Maddie0035 said...
May 28, 2015 at 6:15 pm
Wow! This poem paints such a perfect picture of childhood!
Robert321 said...
May 22, 2015 at 11:40 pm
Last 2 lines are poetic gold. Perfect to relate to teens
UnknownSoul said...
May 17, 2015 at 6:11 pm
I love this poem. Good job!
TheBestOfWriting said...
May 15, 2015 at 5:14 pm
love this poem!
super.ballerina said...
May 15, 2015 at 9:04 am
There is a lot of symbolism in this piece. Really great work, Keep it up!
Euphy123 said...
May 13, 2015 at 10:30 pm
miiranda_18 said...
May 13, 2015 at 6:43 pm
Go check out mine!
angelique said...
May 12, 2015 at 3:17 pm
WOW. you really have skills you can right good poetry its easy to understand I just love it
baby-p said...
Apr. 29, 2015 at 12:22 pm
i have a native American side to me so when i feel things deeply n strong i get empathy chills idk how to explain it just that this poem was heart touching
MadisonHudson said...
Apr. 24, 2015 at 2:44 pm
This was amazing. You have definetley got some skills.
beAWESOMEstayAWESOME said...
Apr. 19, 2015 at 8:02 pm
So the father wants his son to try new things,explore the world around him, become someone successful,amazing,and special, but at the same time he doesn't want his son to leave him all alone. This honeslty made me feel like crying,but i loved. *thumbs up* Keep writing! :)
12yearold said...
Apr. 12, 2015 at 11:36 am
I'm so sorry that I have to say this but this could be because I'm very dumb. But I got that The dad has got the child trapped but is the rest of the poem him just trying to do this. Can someone fully explain the very deep meaning through of this very beautifully written emotional and raw poem. Don't get me wrong, I love this poem.
passion_poet19 said...
Apr. 10, 2015 at 1:49 pm
i see beyond this flow of the words they speak to me but i really like this poem. GOOD JOB.!!
A helping hand said...
Apr. 7, 2015 at 11:14 am
This is called imprisonment, seek a local child counselor.
VaquerodelEspacio replied...
Apr. 8, 2015 at 2:44 pm
You just made my day good sir!
Atlas_Woman said...
Apr. 2, 2015 at 12:16 pm
Quite lovely....
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