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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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Hells_Will said...
today at 1:45 pm:
this is amazing!!!!!!! i love it!! i know how it feels to be held back by your parents but its my mom not my dad i dont really know my dad but thats why i love it sssooo much!!!! (sorry about my bad gramer!!)
 
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beanpole said...
yesterday at 2:44 pm:
wow you did a great job!
 
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kyndreyah said...
Apr. 11 at 2:53 pm:
You're a rude person. 
 
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thenightowlwriterThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 10 at 4:40 pm:
Sad but beautiful, as poetry usually is.
 
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C.S.Thompson said...
Apr. 9 at 9:23 pm:
This was a very cool piece to read. I enjoyed the use of imagery. It was little sad, the ending but that's alright because it was symbolic. Nice work.
 
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juliamolly said...
Apr. 7 at 9:42 pm:
Wow. I thought this was beautifuly written and the flow was really spectacular. That said, I think if you elongated this more you would have much more room for an emotional connection with the audience. (Me being very close with my father) Love this piece though and happy writing! 
 
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thatoneguythathateschoolThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 7 at 2:39 pm:
Like really this is just horrible i threw up a little in my mouth 
 
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thatoneguythathateschoolThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 7 at 2:29 pm:
This is horrible
 
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MilindaMiller said...
Apr. 5 at 11:59 am:
This is beautiful, I loved it!
 
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Kathryn S. said...
Apr. 2 at 1:24 pm:
Your word choice was amazing! Some of the rhyme was a little funky but it still worked really well.
 
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Jordan M. said...
Apr. 2 at 8:45 am:
good poem, keep it up!
 
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Daelyn said...
Apr. 2 at 8:42 am:
This piece was amazing! I loved it! 
 
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Juneza-Ann B. said...
Mar. 20 at 9:59 pm:
I like your poem it speaks in volumes and I know it is hard to find the right words to speak to your readers. Well done!
 
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BrookeCherith said...
Mar. 20 at 3:53 pm:
I could read this a thousand times and I don't think that I would be tired of it!  Well done!
 
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LilithNyx said...
Mar. 16 at 10:39 pm:
That was beautiful!
 
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LifeLeaderThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 10 at 8:52 pm:
Your poem is so amazing and I've read it over so many times! I can't believe that your poem has been able to maintain the one with the most comments for so many weeks! That is truly amazing!
 
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ChristianSThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 2 at 10:08 pm:
Absolutly excellent! Love this peice! Well done!
 
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BTubz said...
Feb. 27 at 7:47 pm:
Poem was well done, but what really stands out to me is the title. So. Good.
 
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kenzierenee36 said...
Feb. 24 at 1:40 pm:
That last line though.... Ugh... Loved it... I wouldn't change a thing...
 
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OldGreg said...
Feb. 18 at 12:44 pm:
Am I allowed to bo confused? Because I am.
 
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