Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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E.Inis said...
May 21, 2016 at 2:55 pm
Though I love my dad and have a great relationship with him, I appreciate this piece because I think it captures the power of this sort of relationship-even the bad ones.
Experiences_happen said...
May 9, 2016 at 2:48 pm
fahters arent worth any persons time. At least mine doesnt deserve My time
Edawg1 said...
Apr. 29, 2016 at 2:10 pm
you'll have to wait for me to type mine because i have work to do.
Edawg1 said...
Apr. 29, 2016 at 1:36 pm
very good! your good at poetry i see. you know if you would have gone any deeper then there would've been no words to describe poetry that deep. read mine and see. okay?
JamesHenderson said...
Apr. 29, 2016 at 10:59 am
This is the best poem I seen
astridianmayfly said...
Apr. 27, 2016 at 1:21 pm
I adore this
arteatsu said...
Apr. 13, 2016 at 9:40 am
This is truly great.
TheOneandOnlyDL said...
Mar. 31, 2016 at 9:07 pm
This scared me a little bit but in the way poetry should. Love it!
Aaliyah02 said...
Mar. 31, 2016 at 7:08 pm
At first I was like huh? then I was like hmmmm then I said Ohhhhh lol nice work
genessa.carney said...
Mar. 22, 2016 at 2:24 pm
Very good at hide the true meaning
Maddsloves said...
Mar. 21, 2016 at 12:06 pm
This took me a minute, but then I understood. Very deep.
Stephanieluvsyou said...
Mar. 17, 2016 at 5:50 pm
This is amazing!!!
ambivalent This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 16, 2016 at 7:53 pm
whoa ... love this
kandace_c1 said...
Mar. 2, 2016 at 10:16 am
this captures the feelings of many teens and their dreams and that they are on a chain and cant get off of it
Angdileo said...
Feb. 23, 2016 at 4:56 pm
This is an inspirational poem and amazing to know it was written by a teen. I hope Carl continues to write poetry as he grows older.
LionGrace said...
Jan. 20, 2016 at 8:11 pm
From the child's eye, and yet serene. wonderful, loved it.
ZJcancel said...
Jan. 11, 2016 at 1:15 pm
omg i feel like im on a chain i hate it and i wont ever be off
goat_lover_2.0 replied...
Apr. 7, 2016 at 2:57 am
cut the chain and fly high in the sky like katy perry's fireworks.
Mahalabelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 17, 2015 at 10:51 am
It almost seems as if he were a slave asking for freedom. Amazing job.
Dream_Bar22This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 14, 2015 at 8:20 am
This is so perfect. You did an amazing job.
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