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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Mar. 13 2017 at 12:17 am
Haase BRONZE, Green Bay, Wisconsin
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This has so much power. It kind of gives me the chills

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that's ... wow

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on Feb. 28 2017 at 2:14 pm
Jessie20500, Greensboro, North Carolina
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amazing work

CoolK said...
on Feb. 15 2017 at 10:30 pm
CoolK, Center Valley, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"The best place to hide a penny is in a jar or pennies."

I think this poem is so good! You should keep writing!

on Jan. 10 2017 at 10:48 am
Travelergirl DIAMOND, Central, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Do not judge my story by the chapter you walked in on"- Unknown

This poem is so wonderful! It flowed and it has a good meaning to it. Keep on writing because you are amazing

on Dec. 8 2016 at 1:28 pm
YESSENIAG SILVER, Sacromento Ca, California
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I like when you said "i ask my father if i could fly, and he said, sure, son - go try. hahaha good.

on Dec. 6 2016 at 3:21 pm
caroleeena BRONZE, Alta Loma, California
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That took such a nice, sharp turn, amazing work.

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on Dec. 5 2016 at 7:45 am
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Favorite Quote:
'Be the best that you can be'

I really love tyhis it's pretty

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thelouisanaboy BRONZE, St.francisville, Louisiana
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you inspired me to right two poem look at them for me #feelyourpain

on Oct. 30 2016 at 11:12 am
victoria_kapusta PLATINUM, Ridgewood, New York
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I love the message of this poem !

on Oct. 26 2016 at 2:27 pm
lilsophz BRONZE, Jasper, Indiana
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This is so good @HeyItsMk

on Oct. 24 2016 at 10:16 am
jamiraaa BRONZE, Burlington , New Jersey
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this is such a beautiful poem

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on Oct. 19 2016 at 4:32 pm
Ellea SILVER, Touchet, Washington
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I absolutely love this poem, it is the type of poem that can mean different things for different people.

on Oct. 17 2016 at 8:40 am
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This is garbage.

on Sep. 28 2016 at 2:44 pm
Thetruthbehindme21 SILVER, Whitehall, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Young men's love lies not truly in their heart, but in their eyes. -Shakespeare

thats very good i like things like that i have a bunch of poems with my mom that i should post that are close to this.

on Sep. 15 2016 at 6:13 pm
KittyKat1201 SILVER, Hoschton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"Live life like you own it"

Wow this is great!

on Sep. 15 2016 at 10:56 am
I absolutely love this!!! Please continue to write poems you are great with your words

on Aug. 25 2016 at 1:36 pm
Cadenza101 BRONZE, Wilmington , North Carolina
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my husband and I loved this pice you wrote please keep writing