Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Jun. 14 at 5:30 pm
Christi_Line GOLD, American Fork, Utah
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I really like this poem... I really really like the message. at least how I understand it, the father is protecting the son from what might hurt him while still encouraging him to grow... like a baby in the womb. idk if that's what you meant, but that's what I got and I really love it. thank you for writing this.

on May. 22 at 10:44 am
GriffinW BRONZE, Coconut Creek, Florida
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dislike this poem it is garbage and has nothing to do with wombs like wat.

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on Apr. 7 at 9:26 pm
jah_jon, Las Vegas, Nevada
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It's a great poem with a great rhyme scheme, however, I don't understand whats going on in the poem. Did the father lie to him, did the father trick him?

on Apr. 3 at 11:40 am
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on Apr. 3 at 11:38 am
The_Fanged_Book_Worm GOLD, Norfolk, Nebraska
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“You have to write the book that wants to be written. And if the book will be too difficult for grown-ups, then you write it for children.”
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I am unsure of this poem, but i love it all the same.

on Mar. 26 at 9:26 pm
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Amazing! You defiantly have talent

on Mar. 9 at 10:48 am
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I can definitely relate

on Mar. 6 at 10:03 am
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on Mar. 1 at 1:23 pm
MaddieGrizz SILVER, Lake Isabella, California
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Even though I walk through the darkest valley I will fear no evil. Psalm 23:4, For I know the plans I have for you declares the Lord. Plans to prosper you, not harm you plans to give you hope and a future. Jeremiah 29:11

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on Mar. 1 at 1:22 pm
MaddieGrizz SILVER, Lake Isabella, California
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Even though I walk through the darkest valley I will fear no evil. Psalm 23:4, For I know the plans I have for you declares the Lord. Plans to prosper you, not harm you plans to give you hope and a future. Jeremiah 29:11

AMAZING POEM!!! The only thing that I would recommend is correcting some simple grammar.

on Feb. 24 at 8:05 pm
SmartPanda13 GOLD, Hebron, Kentucky
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I don't understand the message but it's a beautiful poem

on Feb. 23 at 10:51 am
tycasey32 SILVER, Monticello, Illinois
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Very great I can relate a lot to this poem but I don't get the title.

on Feb. 20 at 6:06 pm
AllTheSuperRacehorses SILVER, Haverford, Pennsylvania
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Oh my god. People who understand the chaining properties of not having a parent are beautiful and empathetic. People who understand the chaining properties of having a parent are beautiful, empathetic and wise.

on Feb. 16 at 12:08 pm
KurdiG PLATINUM, Douglasville, Georgia
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Marvelous poem with sad features.

on Feb. 8 at 2:23 pm
ahmontgomery GOLD, Eminence, Kentucky
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Great poem, but I don't get the title

it was sad but honest. good job




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