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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Apr. 29 at 1:04 pm
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this poem is really good. I header that a poem is a copy of how you fell

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that was good confuzing the first time but better the second

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I loved it! I wonder how long it took you to write this? It was the best poetry I've ever heard!

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this is an AMAZING poem!! I love how it rhymes and there are so many possible meanings that readers can interpret from this. Good job!

on Jun. 14 2018 at 5:30 pm
Coby_Thinks GOLD, American Fork, Utah
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I really like this poem... I really really like the message. at least how I understand it, the father is protecting the son from what might hurt him while still encouraging him to grow... like a baby in the womb. idk if that's what you meant, but that's what I got and I really love it. thank you for writing this.

on May. 22 2018 at 10:44 am
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dislike this poem it is garbage and has nothing to do with wombs like wat.

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I love the way you write!! It has a wonderful rhyme scheme, and an interesting vibe to it. you have true potential. Well done. Keep writing.

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on Apr. 7 2018 at 9:26 pm
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It's a great poem with a great rhyme scheme, however, I don't understand whats going on in the poem. Did the father lie to him, did the father trick him?

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I am unsure of this poem, but i love it all the same.

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