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Monster

September 11, 2009
By Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?


As I'm sitting here, in this box-shaped room, staring at my prey three feet away from me, I am anxious. This child, an innocent child, will die. She is nothing to me, nothing at all. When she wakes, only then will she notice my presence. She is sleeping calmly, probably dreaming sweet childish fantasies of blue skies and purple unicorns flying to see a magical princess. Little does she know that in a few short hours her rosey red complexion will fade away to meet a dull white color. Little does she know that the curls that surround her face will fade and cover a life-less dull face. Little does she know of her radiant blue eyes fading with the sunset. Unlike the sun, her eyes will never surface again.

~Little does she know of the monster I am~


The author's comments:
This was written for my creative writing class. Let's just say the teacher was a little worred.

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on Mar. 22 2011 at 9:19 pm
HollandC BRONZE, Fort Worth, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Slaves would be tyrants, were the choice theirs." Victor Hugo

Nicely done! Reminds me of John Gardner's "Grendel". Great book.

By the way, I recently wrote a piece entitled "A Fantasy," and I'm afraid people might not read it because the title is, admittedly, lacking. If anyone would be so kind as to read it, I'd deeply appreciate it.


on Mar. 16 2011 at 6:39 pm
Nate.mascari BRONZE, East Syracuse, New York
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yes finally someone cares for the girl!

on Mar. 15 2011 at 6:59 pm
Nate.mascari BRONZE, East Syracuse, New York
1 article 5 photos 3 comments
Poor little girl, why doesn't anyone care!

Bridgette17 said...
on Mar. 15 2011 at 9:20 am
I like the repeting of little does she know because it was very exciting and effective.

on Mar. 14 2011 at 4:08 pm
taylortexas BRONZE, Cleveland, Ohio
1 article 0 photos 7 comments
Short, but very effective. I really like this, and definitely think you could expand upon this.

on Feb. 28 2011 at 12:00 pm
queentabbiecat99 GOLD, Dardanelle, Arkansas
15 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
Things aren't always what they seem.

wow omg i love the writing it makes you think and shiver....

Yuelong GOLD said...
on Feb. 18 2011 at 4:26 pm
Yuelong GOLD, Bellevue, Washington
17 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
Win the Darwin award already!

O.M.G. this was so intense. please become a fantasy novelist! you'll be a best seller! i know it!

GeoffG BRONZE said...
on Feb. 1 2011 at 3:50 pm
GeoffG BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
1 article 0 photos 2 comments
Really great! Such innovation and originality. This short piece pushed boundaries!

lyssa28 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 29 2011 at 8:51 pm
lyssa28 BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
2 articles 0 photos 89 comments
this was awesome

on Jan. 23 2011 at 10:55 pm
_butters_ SILVER, Trinidad, Colorado
6 articles 18 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your life is an occassion, rise to it.
~Mr. Edward Magorium

haha I've had the teacher worried about me a couple times to ^.^ awesome read gave me chills

KAT.CH GOLD said...
on Jan. 11 2011 at 5:16 am
KAT.CH GOLD, Chennai, Other
12 articles 1 photo 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you can respect others you should respect yourself too

hmm.this is a good one

 


on Jan. 4 2011 at 7:39 pm
HollandC BRONZE, Fort Worth, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Slaves would be tyrants, were the choice theirs." Victor Hugo

Have you ever read John Gardner's "Grendel"? It was fantastic. I don't know if this paragraph was influenced by it, or if it's inspired by something else. Either way, I think you would really enjoy that book. Good work.

Jennay. said...
on Jan. 3 2011 at 10:16 am
Jennay., Spotsylvania, Virginia
0 articles 0 photos 14 comments
If I was your teacher, I’d be worried to. But instead, the imagery just took a hold of me and I was more into the deepness of the article then the outside core. Everyone thinks of death whether they admit it or not because everyone does die one day. Some die in early age, god forbid, and some do not. My nephew is the sweetest most playful child there is and is very important in my life and to think that he will die one day, is heart breaking. All I think about is, an innocent child, just like you said, is going to die but yet he/she, you would think, would never even harm a fly. So why should someone like a dear child die? It all leads back to, everyone dies. You just have to hope that that child rest in peace just like in his/hers dreams of those blue skies and purple unicorns. That yall will meet again in another world. Anyways though, I like how this article was straight to the point but with so much characterization. Greatttt!

on Dec. 16 2010 at 7:16 pm
elvestsmaster, Starke, Florida
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nice, defintly worthy of something more indepth

on Dec. 1 2010 at 5:50 pm
Sadia123456 BRONZE, New York, New York
3 articles 0 photos 15 comments
Bad Bad B ad just jooking hoy

BrettJolene said...
on Nov. 24 2010 at 11:26 pm
BrettJolene, Unda Da Stars, California
0 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
only enemies speak the truth. friends lie endlessly, caught in the web of duty ---Stephen King

i really like this...and id really like to see more from this little paragrph X)

Lay18 PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 24 2010 at 4:06 pm
Lay18 PLATINUM, Portsmouth, Virginia
30 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live and Learn

WOW!!!!!! YOU'RE A GREAT WRITER. CAN YOU CHECK OUT SOME OF MY WORK?

on Nov. 21 2010 at 5:43 pm
princessfidget BRONZE, Natrona Heights, Pennsylvania
2 articles 1 photo 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life wouldn't be life if it didn't suck."
-One of my friends from FF

Oh! Oh! Oh! Is it a VAMPIRE!? I love them! I hope it is! Poor child but lucky monster!

Worrier GOLD said...
on Nov. 2 2010 at 11:08 am
Worrier GOLD, Spring Valley, Wisconsin
17 articles 0 photos 4 comments
I love how mysterious you made it

on Nov. 2 2010 at 9:57 am
WolfConspiracy BRONZE, McHenry, Illinois
1 article 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
I knew it was no use, some people never will forgive you. Its too much fun hatng you instead

WoW! Amazing work.