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Monster

September 11, 2009
By Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?


As I'm sitting here, in this box-shaped room, staring at my prey three feet away from me, I am anxious. This child, an innocent child, will die. She is nothing to me, nothing at all. When she wakes, only then will she notice my presence. She is sleeping calmly, probably dreaming sweet childish fantasies of blue skies and purple unicorns flying to see a magical princess. Little does she know that in a few short hours her rosey red complexion will fade away to meet a dull white color. Little does she know that the curls that surround her face will fade and cover a life-less dull face. Little does she know of her radiant blue eyes fading with the sunset. Unlike the sun, her eyes will never surface again.

~Little does she know of the monster I am~


The author's comments:
This was written for my creative writing class. Let's just say the teacher was a little worred.

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Phil E. said...
on Oct. 10 2011 at 9:35 pm
good work putting a lot of MEANING in a small article

on Oct. 9 2011 at 7:36 am
Smile-And-Wave-Boys. SILVER, Rotherhithe, Other
8 articles 1 photo 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everyone wants to ride with you in the limo, but what you want is someone who will take the bus with you when the limo breaks down."
— Oprah Winfrey

Wow, short but really good! Could you comment on my work? Thanks :P

on Oct. 8 2011 at 2:18 pm
kelseyp96 BRONZE, Glendale, Arizona
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"heart can be broken but it still keeps a beatin' just the same" -Movie, Fried Green Tomatoes

fantastic i wish there where more to it

peacerocks said...
on Oct. 7 2011 at 10:22 am
This is just amazing! It is suspenceful and leaves me wanting more!!!!! Reply if you agree with me!

on Oct. 6 2011 at 9:35 am
Juhcub PLATINUM, Congers, New York
24 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind.”

It's just amazing! Great piece!

on Oct. 1 2011 at 8:03 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

This is really good! Its short and sweet, I like it! Would you mind commenting/rating my work? Thanks!

 


on Sep. 30 2011 at 6:29 pm
HateKnuckle SILVER, Peru, New York
9 articles 0 photos 96 comments
This is amazing. I wish I could throw a lot of swear words in to show my awe at how unbelievably good this is. I am copy pasting this, 5 starring it, and facebooking it.

on Sep. 30 2011 at 8:46 am
derickinc BRONZE, Rockford, Illinois
4 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I hate all of you." - Squidward Tentacles

What Lacer said!

Lacer GOLD said...
on Sep. 28 2011 at 8:01 pm
Lacer GOLD, Highland Village, Texas
19 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
The thing about philosophy is that it often runs dry when thought of so shallowly.

I LOVE crazy people :3 especially the homicidal ones. Why, my dear, those are the best kind.

on Sep. 28 2011 at 8:56 am
ninjacheesecakecinnamonroll SILVER, Bliss, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
rub some dirt in it

great!!! its pretty cool i kept thinking whats going on but i finally got it!!

crazycatlady said...
on Sep. 9 2011 at 10:12 am
I absolutly love scary stories. this was A.M.A.Z.I.N.G. THis waas crazycatlady bye!!!!!

on Sep. 5 2011 at 12:36 pm
tekno1990 SILVER, Bronx, New York
9 articles 2 photos 1 comment
That was great, You weren't afraid of what people would have thought about something so dark and scary. I thought this was very creative and the detail of the child was perfect. Great story

on Aug. 23 2011 at 3:33 pm
DarkPandaAngel GOLD, Camp Hill, Pennsylvania
14 articles 2 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"How dreadful" Cedric Diggory in A Very Potter Musical
"Ello puppet." Pirates of the Carribean

Thank you. I will. :)

DarkPandaAngel


on Aug. 23 2011 at 2:11 pm
Kayotic PLATINUM, Goodyear, Arizona
37 articles 9 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
You aren't having fun unless you're commiting sin~ Priest

Wow!I lov your work!These kinds of stories have always been my favorite kind!Keep it up!

on Aug. 15 2011 at 3:02 pm
DarkPandaAngel GOLD, Camp Hill, Pennsylvania
14 articles 2 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"How dreadful" Cedric Diggory in A Very Potter Musical
"Ello puppet." Pirates of the Carribean

I really like this story. You described everything very well. 

DarkPandaAngel


on Aug. 15 2011 at 12:45 pm
Fangstorm_The_Vampire GOLD, Tehachapi, California
15 articles 1 photo 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's a bird!
It's a midget!
NO. it's...... EDWARD ELRIC.

er teacher was wooried that she would become a mass murderer. But I like it too!

on Aug. 3 2011 at 10:13 pm
MonaLisaSmile GOLD, North Liberty, Indiana
19 articles 1 photo 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Reality is a lovely place, but I wouldn't want to live there. --Adam Young

This seriously gave me chills. No joke. Please add to this! K thanks. :)

Meago GOLD said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 8:31 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

Thank you all for your comments! They mean so much!! I've actually tried to add more, and it just won't go... lol!

on Jul. 24 2011 at 1:28 pm
4everyoung15 BRONZE, Moreno Valley, California
3 articles 2 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When life knocks you down on your knees, just remember you are in the perfect position for praying"- Unknown

And why was your teacher worried?! shes wack this is amazing! u should have a prequel!

 


on Jul. 18 2011 at 10:27 am
Arco_Sine BRONZE, Berwyn, Illinois
2 articles 0 photos 18 comments

I'm happy I was able to explain myself :-)