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Monster

September 11, 2009
By Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?


As I'm sitting here, in this box-shaped room, staring at my prey three feet away from me, I am anxious. This child, an innocent child, will die. She is nothing to me, nothing at all. When she wakes, only then will she notice my presence. She is sleeping calmly, probably dreaming sweet childish fantasies of blue skies and purple unicorns flying to see a magical princess. Little does she know that in a few short hours her rosey red complexion will fade away to meet a dull white color. Little does she know that the curls that surround her face will fade and cover a life-less dull face. Little does she know of her radiant blue eyes fading with the sunset. Unlike the sun, her eyes will never surface again.

~Little does she know of the monster I am~


The author's comments:
This was written for my creative writing class. Let's just say the teacher was a little worred.

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Meago GOLD said...
on Oct. 2 2009 at 3:04 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

I just sent in the second part of this poem. Keep your eyes open for it if you liked this one. =)

Thank you so much for your feedback!

Meago GOLD said...
on Oct. 2 2009 at 3:03 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

Thank you! =)

on Oct. 2 2009 at 2:35 pm
ExpressThruWriting SILVER, Green Forest, Arkansas
9 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One of these days you will meet the right man who will always treat you right.... Yea what a load of crap..." -author unknown

lol freaked out the teacher huh? i can see why but wow this was so good

on Oct. 2 2009 at 10:07 am
Bandgeek16 BRONZE, Grandview, Tennessee
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you think your too small to be effective, you've never been in a dark closet with a mosquito."

This is an amazing poem! It really makes you think. It's also cool that I just happen to know the author.

Meago GOLD said...
on Oct. 2 2009 at 10:02 am
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

I've got the second part written out but I haven't put it up yet. The second one is actually really gorey.

on Oct. 2 2009 at 2:23 am
Kitten111 SILVER, Watanobbi, Other
6 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
Knowledge is knowing that tomato is a fruit ..... wisdom is not putting it in fruit salad :P

LOL YAY for freaking out teachers!!!! your an awesome writer :)

on Oct. 1 2009 at 9:56 am
loved this artical but the monster was REALLY freakyy:))AWSOMEEE

Meago GOLD said...
on Sep. 30 2009 at 2:48 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

The monster is a crazy human who feeds on children. Kinda scary and wacko, I know. But, it writes good. =D

j-diddy said...
on Sep. 30 2009 at 1:33 pm
j-diddy, Littleton, Colorado
0 articles 0 photos 3 comments
wow realy freaky story! who is the monster thouggh? it was realy detailed i liked it alot

tnew69 said...
on Sep. 30 2009 at 1:26 pm
great story bt it was really weird. ur messed up

StEaMbOaT said...
on Sep. 30 2009 at 1:24 pm
it was very intense u rock

cakekid314 said...
on Sep. 30 2009 at 11:11 am
the story was great it was intense and i loved it

on Sep. 30 2009 at 8:14 am
CoryMcIntosh04 SILVER, Lawrenceville, Georgia
5 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You need about a dozen colors, large paper, some paintbrushes, an apron, and a large room to create your glamorous work of art? Well give me a paper and a pencil so I can create the same."

That was...intresting.

on Sep. 29 2009 at 3:08 pm
That was intense. I really got into the story and it freaked me out a little. Very good detail!

tatsu said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 2:11 pm
Your article disturbed me a little but it had great details and made a colorful picture in my head.

hiiii said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 1:33 pm
it was very good i loved it!

JessLyn said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 1:29 pm
This poem kinda freaks me out, but it is really true and cool. it has tons of details. honestly i didnt quite understand it but i re read it and liked it.

pencil123 said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 1:19 pm
this was a good descriptive paragrph that could become a book if you put a plot behind it. Where the monster?

Joel said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 1:16 pm
Your writing was really descriptive and flowed well. Nice plot twist.

on Sep. 29 2009 at 12:40 pm
arElana PLATINUM, Fair Lawn, New Jersey
24 articles 0 photos 94 comments
wow. im surprised that ur teacher didnt send you to a mental counsler. just kidding! i like the style and the detail, because you could have made that so long and i wouldnt get bored. ur a really good riter.