Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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AllyssaWrites said...
Jan. 12, 2015 at 9:48 am
This is fantastic, I really love the subtle rhyme that adds to the light hearted feeling of this poem. (:
dglee917 said...
Jan. 7, 2015 at 12:26 am
I honestly don't get it
JoieRenee said...
Jan. 5, 2015 at 10:15 am
Truly amazing!
BlossomM. said...
Jan. 1, 2015 at 8:01 pm
Very well done. I could clearly see it and I found the theme interesting. Good job and beautifuly done.
DietCokeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 28, 2014 at 4:50 pm
This is beautiful.
AlexDeWriter replied...
Mar. 6, 2015 at 9:58 am
Wow this as beautiful
-L.k.R- said...
Dec. 24, 2014 at 11:15 am
I feel the emotions very clearly. I'm looking forward for your new works.
Jacob G. said...
Dec. 21, 2014 at 7:41 pm
Absolutely Beautiful.
Inmind said...
Dec. 19, 2014 at 8:43 am
I like this
SweetCaroline14 said...
Dec. 10, 2014 at 5:12 pm
Beautifull. I look forward to more of your work.  
corrections123 replied...
Jan. 5, 2015 at 1:40 pm
Beautiful has one l
Brian110 said...
Dec. 10, 2014 at 8:07 am
You know, This poem has got to be the best poem this website has ever seen. When ever I read poems this poem always is "today's top voted poem" and I can se for my self the reason. 
KaylieJ said...
Dec. 9, 2014 at 7:05 pm
Obviously I can't be sure, since I'm not the writer of this poem, but I feel like he used the lack of capitalization as emphasis on the way his father belittles him. I mean, clearly it was not laziness; he capitalized other words like "Son" multiple times throughout. So there must have been a reason for capitalizing in the way that he did.
Ashley K. replied...
Dec. 9, 2014 at 7:23 pm
I think you're right here. Father and sea were both capitalized,while "I" was not. This was probably to elaborate on how he was viewed as the least important, and smallest entity in the poem. 
Jackson1997 said...
Dec. 9, 2014 at 3:22 pm
This poem is sub-par
Dylan R. said...
Dec. 5, 2014 at 1:30 pm
it was good story
Brainiac said...
Dec. 4, 2014 at 9:39 pm
I really enjoyed reading your poem! Your word choice and phrasing were excellent. One reccomendation would be to capitolize the "I's"- I found this editing error to be slightly distracting, and it took away from your otherwise awesome poem! 
Kookie_monster29 said...
Nov. 24, 2014 at 11:19 am
That was so pretty!
RedHadan This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 21, 2014 at 4:49 pm
This was beatifull
WindRunner said...
Nov. 18, 2014 at 12:58 pm
I got angry as I read the end of the poem. They say freedom is life. No one should be restricted like that!
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