Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Apr. 19 2015 at 8:02 pm
beAWESOMEstayAWESOME BRONZE, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Work hard in silence and let your accomplishments make the noise."

So the father wants his son to try new things,explore the world around him, become someone successful,amazing,and special, but at the same time he doesn't want his son to leave him all alone. This honeslty made me feel like crying,but i loved. *thumbs up* Keep writing! :)

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on Apr. 12 2015 at 11:36 am
I'm so sorry that I have to say this but this could be because I'm very dumb. But I got that The dad has got the child trapped but is the rest of the poem him just trying to do this. Can someone fully explain the very deep meaning through of this very beautifully written emotional and raw poem. Don't get me wrong, I love this poem.

on Apr. 10 2015 at 1:49 pm
passion_poet19 GOLD, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Someday i would stop wondering where i went wrong and know where i went right"

i see beyond this flow of the words they speak to me but i really like this poem. GOOD JOB.!!

on Apr. 9 2015 at 5:09 pm
EvalynnHeather GOLD, Clemmons, North Carolina
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I'll gladly check out your work if someone will PLEASE check out mine, I've been writing for six years and I'm just starting to put it out there like everyone's been telling me too... thanks guys

on Apr. 8 2015 at 2:44 pm
VaquerodelEspacio, Vance, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
"Algunas personas me un vaquero del espacio"

You just made my day good sir!

on Apr. 7 2015 at 11:14 am
This is called imprisonment, seek a local child counselor.

on Apr. 2 2015 at 12:16 pm
Atlas_Woman GOLD, Texas City, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
To each his own seems to be our motto
and since this is the case
I wish the aliens would come attack us today.
Because only then would we unite as one world,
instead of being separated by our own
governments, prejudices, religions, and races.

Quite lovely....

on Mar. 31 2015 at 10:48 am
Jozzykay BRONZE, Iowa, Iowa
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This is so emotional I love it!

on Mar. 30 2015 at 11:13 pm
SweetMonster365 BRONZE, Columbia, South Carolina
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I love how you can get dragged into the poem

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on Mar. 30 2015 at 2:55 pm
HeleneZ, Delafield Wi, Wisconsin
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DEEP DUUUUUUUDE

on Mar. 25 2015 at 5:59 pm
CharleyHeelis BRONZE, Derby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
How can a bird that is born to fly, be put in a cage and expected to sing?

Pls check out my work... Fire or Ice by CharleyHeelis. ....thanks xx

on Mar. 23 2015 at 4:16 pm
PianoKeys97 PLATINUM, Medford, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"You can be the ripest, juiciest peach in the world, and there's still going to be somebody who hates peaches." -Dita Von Teese

Sad, complex, powerful, and beautiful all at once. I loved reading this. Every idea flowed so coherently. This was a very unique, well-developed, and well-written poem. And the end, "I saw my Father pull on a chain, then I knew that I was bound," what a twist. Keep writing!

on Mar. 18 2015 at 6:07 pm
beAWESOMEstayAWESOME BRONZE, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Work hard in silence and let your accomplishments make the noise."

LOl i know right.

on Mar. 18 2015 at 6:05 pm
beAWESOMEstayAWESOME BRONZE, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Work hard in silence and let your accomplishments make the noise."

THIS IS SO SAD. it SEEMS LIKE ITS ABOUT A BOY WHO DOESN'T WANT HIS SON TO LEAVE HIS SIDE, BUT GOOD WORK AND KEEP WRITING! :) *THUMBS UP* #TALENTED

on Mar. 17 2015 at 3:32 pm
Kiritokitsune SILVER, Danielson, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
Trying to think trying to breathe trying to figure it out, cause I built these walls to see them crumbling down, cause I lost it all who can save me now.

Black Veil Brides, Lost it All

I love it, it captures my feelings so well

on Mar. 11 2015 at 2:53 pm
anna2000 SILVER, Paragould, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity; and I'm not sure about the universe.


-Albert Einstein

I have read through this poem so many times and it keeps getting better. Good Work!

on Mar. 9 2015 at 10:59 pm
Anonwriter1821, North Plainfield, New Jersey
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Amazing I love it.

on Mar. 6 2015 at 9:58 am
AlexDeWriter SILVER, Flower Mound, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Wisdom is found only in truth. - Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

Wow this as beautiful

on Mar. 5 2015 at 11:57 am
MasheyDino_14, Lathrop, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Mickentomah"




~Mashey 2007- present

Pretty good. I LUV IT!

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on Feb. 26 2015 at 10:48 am
Kay_Cruz, Auburn, New York
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This remind me so much of myself




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