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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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Blair T. said...
Feb. 18, 2013 at 11:29 pm:
Very good use of figurative language!
 
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Razzie said...
Feb. 18, 2013 at 9:59 am:
Does anyone know how long it usualy takes for your submissions to be read?  
 
sweetangel4lifeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 27, 2013 at 9:47 am :
it normally varies from a couple days to even weeks. i had been waiting for one particular poem for maybe 2 and a half weeks! lol good luck and keep writng :)
 
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dontspeak.sing said...
Feb. 14, 2013 at 3:59 pm:
The piece was good, but I found it a little confusing. I like the idea of it though.
 
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Aeryka said...
Feb. 13, 2013 at 10:59 am:
Aw so cute I like it
 
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TheSkyOwesMeRainThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 9, 2013 at 6:44 pm:
Nice job! 
 
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JennaLayne said...
Feb. 6, 2013 at 6:32 pm:
This shows an underbelly or the unseen of parenting. One of the main goals of poetry!
 
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anshikanagarThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 4, 2013 at 10:45 am:
it shows parenting in a different light. love it
 
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EtherealLibretto said...
Feb. 4, 2013 at 9:59 am:
A lot of kids feel trapped or bound by their parents expectations and I think you did a really great job capturing that in the poem. I love the rhyming scheme and the images of the ocean.
 
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THATkidWHOSEpickedON This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 4, 2013 at 8:13 am:
It was better than my team winning SUPER BOWL!!!
BOOOOOOO-YAAAAA
 
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FlannelSkin This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 3, 2013 at 6:44 pm:
simple. cool beans man.
 
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Darylism said...
Feb. 3, 2013 at 1:38 pm:
TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/523952/The-Nature-of-Manufacturing/ can everyone rate and comment on this, i would really appreciate it, thanks:)
 
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katieRainbows said...
Feb. 1, 2013 at 4:54 pm:
This poem is great it shows us that we are bound to our parents and that when we want to grow we have a hard time doing so because they want us to meet there expectations even if we want to meet our own
 
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GeorgiaHall said...
Jan. 29, 2013 at 4:20 pm:
Lovely poem though
 
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GeorgiaHall said...
Jan. 29, 2013 at 4:10 pm:
YO ENGLISH NERDS< read my poem 'White'
 
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Lecksi_e said...
Jan. 28, 2013 at 2:17 pm:
I really like the rhyme scheme! Really shows the innocence!
 
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Darylism said...
Jan. 28, 2013 at 7:36 am:
wow, just amazing! TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/523009/Death-is-Bliss/ comment and rate plz
 
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MouseyAndCarr said...
Jan. 24, 2013 at 10:57 pm:
Really Pretty Poem:D
 
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Whompingwillow said...
Jan. 20, 2013 at 5:51 pm:
great poem ;)
 
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swivly said...
Jan. 20, 2013 at 5:03 am:
This is really sweet and unique =)
 
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