Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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CharleyHeelis said...
Mar. 25, 2015 at 5:59 pm
Pls check out my work... Fire or Ice by CharleyHeelis. ....thanks xx
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Apr. 9, 2015 at 5:09 pm
I'll gladly check out your work if someone will PLEASE check out mine, I've been writing for six years and I'm just starting to put it out there like everyone's been telling me too... thanks guys
PianoKeys97 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 23, 2015 at 4:16 pm
Sad, complex, powerful, and beautiful all at once. I loved reading this. Every idea flowed so coherently. This was a very unique, well-developed, and well-written poem. And the end, "I saw my Father pull on a chain, then I knew that I was bound," what a twist. Keep writing!
beAWESOMEstayAWESOME said...
Mar. 18, 2015 at 6:05 pm
jossette said...
Mar. 17, 2015 at 3:32 pm
I love it, it captures my feelings so well
anna2000 said...
Mar. 11, 2015 at 2:53 pm
I have read through this poem so many times and it keeps getting better. Good Work!
Anonwriter1821 said...
Mar. 9, 2015 at 10:59 pm
Amazing I love it.
MasheyDino_14 said...
Mar. 5, 2015 at 11:57 am
Pretty good. I LUV IT!
Kay_Cruz said...
Feb. 26, 2015 at 10:48 am
This remind me so much of myself
JabrielAndrews said...
Feb. 21, 2015 at 10:09 pm
this has purpose
Sonic-Boom said...
Feb. 21, 2015 at 10:05 pm
This poem makes me feel a little bit mor understood in the context of fatherly....conflicts
KrustyKrabPizza said...
Feb. 21, 2015 at 2:22 am
I simply think this is beautiful. It's short, which I love, but so powerful. I love the complexity of it. Amazing!
calistareese said...
Feb. 20, 2015 at 2:22 am
I have read this repeatedly for the last 10 minutes and I can't get over how raw and beautiful it is.
nelehjr This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 19, 2015 at 10:34 am
Beautiful yet sad...I wish I had more to offer comment wise...
SelfieSophie said...
Feb. 17, 2015 at 5:32 pm
Really amazing work here love the rhymes but what was the inspiration?
sheridan.leigh said...
Feb. 11, 2015 at 6:03 pm
I love this.
FinditKeepit said...
Feb. 10, 2015 at 12:07 pm
It's awesome, really and the word choice is marvelous. Keep writing such good stuff!
artfromtheheart55 said...
Jan. 25, 2015 at 7:55 pm
This spoke to me :)
beAWESOMEstayAWESOME replied...
Mar. 18, 2015 at 6:07 pm
LOl i know right.
sammyyyyyyyyyyyy said...
Jan. 23, 2015 at 5:24 pm
I really like your poem!
RedPanda said...
Jan. 23, 2015 at 10:21 am
amazing. this is fantastic!!! Keep writing, this is really good.
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