Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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This poem makes me feel a little bit mor understood in the context of fatherly....conflicts

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I simply think this is beautiful. It's short, which I love, but so powerful. I love the complexity of it. Amazing!

on Feb. 20 2015 at 2:22 am
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I have read this repeatedly for the last 10 minutes and I can't get over how raw and beautiful it is.

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Beautiful yet sad...I wish I had more to offer comment wise...

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on Feb. 17 2015 at 5:32 pm
Really amazing work here love the rhymes but what was the inspiration?

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I love this.

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on Feb. 10 2015 at 12:07 pm
It's awesome, really and the word choice is marvelous. Keep writing such good stuff!

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This spoke to me :)

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I really like your poem!

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amazing. this is fantastic!!! Keep writing, this is really good.

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Amazing! Keep writing!!

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This is fantastic, I really love the subtle rhyme that adds to the light hearted feeling of this poem. (:

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Very well done. I could clearly see it and I found the theme interesting. Good job and beautifuly done.

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I feel the emotions very clearly. I'm looking forward for your new works.


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