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Attention MAG

June 29, 2009
By Sally Fritsche BRONZE, Columbia, Missouri
Sally Fritsche BRONZE, Columbia, Missouri
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When she arrived,
her friends flocked around her,
a cloud of makeup and safety-pin piercings
she showed her wrists
her hair dyed shades of tragic,
eyes circled dark.
Wore her diagnosis like an ID key card,
opening all the doors,
getting her into the right crowds.
And we rolled our eyes
at the self-absorption,
poked fun at the melodrama.
How absurd, we said, shaking our heads,
miming razors across skin,
And I held firmly to the edges of my sleeves,
smiling, terrified,
trying to hide the Band-Aids.

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thinkoutloud said...
on Jul. 14 2009 at 11:12 pm
this hit really close to home

i really apprieciate you telling it

torayy said...
on Jul. 14 2009 at 3:30 am
amazing.....its morbid and emotional and real....keep writing....

LilJ<3 GOLD said...
on Jul. 13 2009 at 9:02 pm
LilJ<3 GOLD, Gloucester, Virginia
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pretty great poem. i think u brought up an issue that is more common than most people realize. I commend u for havihg the courage to write this piece. I love how the poem was molded and how it came together at the end. GREAT JOB.

on Jul. 11 2009 at 8:02 pm
montreal132 SILVER, Rush, New York
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You really expressed how some people act. I have a friend like her. If this is how you feel, you might want to read the book "Burn" by Suzanne Phillips. The protagonist is a lot like the person who doesnt fit in.

on Jul. 8 2009 at 8:35 am
Only,I PLATINUM, Taylorville, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
This too shall pass.

I agree with what everyone else has said. You've done and amazing job, keep it up:)

on Jul. 7 2009 at 11:17 pm
xXFadedFlowerXx GOLD, Roy, Utah
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All I can say is Wow, this is an amazing poem

on Jul. 6 2009 at 4:31 am
I enjoy the type of poem where you don't find out the true meaning of the poem until the very end. Irony if I do say so myself is displayed very well here; keep up the good work.

If this piece is written out of self experience, I understand the emotion in all of this.

milsivich said...
on Jul. 5 2009 at 7:34 pm
I love you!

eLiZaBeTh<3 said...
on Jul. 4 2009 at 3:04 am
Oh, this poem is just amazing! I love poems that end ironically, it communicates the real message that the author wants to send out, great job!

E.Lee GOLD said...
on Jun. 30 2009 at 8:13 pm
E.Lee GOLD, Akron, Ohio
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keep writing! its good

on Jun. 30 2009 at 3:36 pm
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's a mountain on a beach"-Unknown
"Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It's remarkable how often those two traits coincide."-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

Gave it a five. The mood it creates and the fact that even knowing she does it, she does it not for attention- the main character. I think it shows opposite reasons of why it's done and well.. I like the way you word with the twisted ending. Nice.

aznchickie said...
on Jun. 30 2009 at 5:37 am
aznchickie, Escondido, California
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I love it. It says so much. I hope you keep writing. It's a pretty awesome piece

on Jun. 29 2009 at 7:30 pm
caydence2013 BRONZE, Palestine, Texas
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