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Birthday Candles

The three decker cake stood before me on the table
All thirteen candles lit and waiting,

The wax melting and fading,
And the base plunged into the goodness of vanilla icing

As the spotlight birthday song continued to be sung.
Once it’s over, the candles seem to get brighter,

Smiles seem to get wider,
And the balloons seem to get lighter

As I stare at the round, sugary cake.
I can feel everybody’s eyes on me,
Beckoning my wish to come and blow out the candles,

So that the mocking cake can be devoured.
I can’t think of my wish or how to put it in words;
I feel pressured with all the family’s and camera’s eyes

Poised on me with expectance.
The icing covered cake sweats on the table,

And within seconds I make up my mind
I take a deep breath and blow 12 flaming candles out

And on the 13th I whisper softly,
'I blew out my birthday candles

And wished for you.'



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zbarragan said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 9:17 pm:
You show your true emotions which is good because you connect yourself to the poem. Your diction and imagery is also good, overall good poem!
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 5:53 pm :
thank you thank you thank you! =) And yes, there is a lot more truth. Every word in this poem is true, it all actually happened, and there's a lot behind the scenes of why i said i'll always be wishing for the person in the dedication ^
 
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LyssaPoo said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 4:29 pm:
oh my goodness
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 4:54 pm :
is that good or bad?
 
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otherpoet said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 3:23 pm:
This is really sweet, you should be proud. It is intriguing, I really want to know more!
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 5:51 pm :
Well, now i suppose i'm proud. :P =) and if i post more poems dedicated to the same person that this one is, does that count as more? :) thanks for commenting!
 
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browneyez16 said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 7:35 pm:
very sweet...i really enjoyed reading it...made me smile
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 5:49 pm :
I'm glad i made someone smile =)
 
browneyez16 replied...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 10:12 pm :
keep writing...we all could use more smiles these days ;)
 
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NightGoddess17This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 9, 2012 at 2:25 pm:
this is amazing!!! the ending is so cute! great job!!!
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 5:48 pm :
thanks! (needed to write more...cant post comment under 10 characters...there we go)
 
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MercyChristine said...
Jan. 9, 2012 at 2:24 pm:
I liked your rhymes and the whole poem was really cute. Great job!
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 5:47 pm :
thank you =)
 
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Jadafunk said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 5:47 pm:
I LOVE IT GREAT JOB!!!
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 5:46 pm :
lol thanks!!
 
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cassia_b said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 1:59 pm:
absolutely lovely writing and language, love your word choice! great job and keep writing! :D
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 5:45 pm :
thank you!
 
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LoudDreamerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 1:25 pm:
Oh, wow this is cool! perfect timing too, since my family is celebrating three birthdays this month. I like your use of imagery, it really makes the reader feel like they are right beside the the birthday girl. Great job.
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 5:45 pm :
Wow, three birthdays? cool, lot of presents to buy :P and thanks! :D
 
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song-writer26This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 1:02 pm:
This is lovely :) I really enjoyed it!:D
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 5:42 pm :
thank you! =)
 
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