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Birthday Candles

December 28, 2011
By marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift


The three decker cake stood before me on the table
All thirteen candles lit and waiting,

The wax melting and fading,
And the base plunged into the goodness of vanilla icing

As the spotlight birthday song continued to be sung.
Once it’s over, the candles seem to get brighter,

Smiles seem to get wider,
And the balloons seem to get lighter

As I stare at the round, sugary cake.
I can feel everybody’s eyes on me,
Beckoning my wish to come and blow out the candles,

So that the mocking cake can be devoured.
I can’t think of my wish or how to put it in words;
I feel pressured with all the family’s and camera’s eyes

Poised on me with expectance.
The icing covered cake sweats on the table,

And within seconds I make up my mind
I take a deep breath and blow 12 flaming candles out

And on the 13th I whisper softly,
'I blew out my birthday candles

And wished for you.'


The author's comments:
Dedication:





To Noah,
I will always be wishing for you.

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on Feb. 18 2012 at 4:37 pm
Wired_To_Inspire PLATINUM, Coopersburg, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Your mind fights the battles, but your heart wins the war." -Liz Ruth

This is so good, and if I were you, I'd send it to a more elete group of workers.

on Feb. 18 2012 at 4:35 pm
didyou_notice_007 BRONZE, Wasilla, Alaska
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That was so nice!! I read it to my friend and I thought it was going to be just another normal poem but it wasn't and I liked it a lot!! I read it and then I read your 'Author Comment' and well I have no words for it! I loved it!!(:

on Feb. 18 2012 at 4:11 pm
Xilaphilaskra BRONZE, Ypsilanti, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
“I'm selfish, impatient and a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control and at times hard to handle. But if you can't handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don't deserve me at my best.”

Amazing i love the last stanza!

on Feb. 13 2012 at 3:45 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

Thanks so much!! =)

on Feb. 13 2012 at 3:44 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

Thank you! =) and sure! I will asap! :)

on Feb. 11 2012 at 3:24 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you! =)

on Feb. 11 2012 at 3:24 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

Thanks so much for your perspective--i never really thought of my poem that way! =) ;P

on Feb. 11 2012 at 3:05 pm
C.K.Snow SILVER, Morden, Other
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What a lovely article! I love the last lines the best!

on Feb. 11 2012 at 3:03 pm
zadiekatie23 PLATINUM, Rio Rancho, New Mexico
39 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." - Dr. Seuss

This really demonstrates the pressures of life and how the simplest things can be escape. Thanks! :)

on Feb. 11 2012 at 2:28 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! =)

on Feb. 9 2012 at 10:51 pm
AgentOrange789 GOLD, Friendswood, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"It's a saying they have, that a man has a false heart in his mouth for the world to see, another in his breast to show to his special friends and his family, and the real one, the true one, the secret one, which is never known to anyone except to himself alone, hidden only God knows where."
-James Clavell, "Shogun"

Very good! I like how it was all built up for the very last line. I would appreciate if you read my poem "Revelation of Infinity." Thanks.

on Feb. 9 2012 at 8:41 pm
This was amazing! i love how its kind of like a story too! i thought it would be just a little poem about birthday candles ( even though it kind of is!) But it was really great!

on Feb. 9 2012 at 6:19 pm
hanna.fofanna BRONZE, Wasilla, Alaska
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“The moon is a loyal companion. It never leaves. It’s always there, watching, steadfast, knowing us in our light and dark moments, changing forever just as we do. Every day it’s a different version of itself. Sometimes weak and wan, sometimes str

This was great:) Well done!

on Feb. 9 2012 at 5:15 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

Thank you! =) and oh....lol never really realized that, hehe...whoops...

on Feb. 6 2012 at 4:33 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Lovely work, the descriptions are wonderful, the occasional rhyme is great. The only issue I seem to see is that you tend to switch verb tenses, otherwise great

on Feb. 6 2012 at 4:21 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

*of not on

on Feb. 6 2012 at 4:20 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

**Please note: because of the new changes to the website as on 2/6/12, my poem's formatting is screwed up.

on Feb. 4 2012 at 6:05 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you :)

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on Feb. 4 2012 at 6:04 pm
Xrisi BRONZE, Wichta Falls, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
A #2 pencil and a dream can take you anywhere.-Joyce A. Myers
Clouds come floating into my life, no longer to carry rain or usher storm, but to add color to my sunset sky.-Rabindranath

ohh i like it

on Feb. 3 2012 at 10:29 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you so much! :D