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Birthday Candles

December 28, 2011
By marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

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The three decker cake stood before me on the table
All thirteen candles lit and waiting,

The wax melting and fading,
And the base plunged into the goodness of vanilla icing

As the spotlight birthday song continued to be sung.
Once it’s over, the candles seem to get brighter,

Smiles seem to get wider,
And the balloons seem to get lighter

As I stare at the round, sugary cake.
I can feel everybody’s eyes on me,
Beckoning my wish to come and blow out the candles,

So that the mocking cake can be devoured.
I can’t think of my wish or how to put it in words;
I feel pressured with all the family’s and camera’s eyes

Poised on me with expectance.
The icing covered cake sweats on the table,

And within seconds I make up my mind
I take a deep breath and blow 12 flaming candles out

And on the 13th I whisper softly,
'I blew out my birthday candles

And wished for you.'

© Meghan T., Scottsdale, AZ

The author's comments:
Dedication:





To Noah,
I will always be wishing for you.
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marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:44 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

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i'm glad you do
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:44 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

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aw, thanks =) and hmm....maybe one of your friends could host a secret birthday party for you! :D
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:42 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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thank you =) but i'm sure your poetry is just as good :) mine isnt amazing
Honeygirl16201 PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:25 pm
Honeygirl16201 PLATINUM, Kittannning, Pennsylvania
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i really like this poem it is so sweet. you .have an amazing talent
war_machine said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 5:37 pm
i likes it!
MarieLouiseA SILVER said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 5:35 pm
MarieLouiseA SILVER, Newmarket, Other
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I love the tension build up throughout and how the ending is so simple, but elegant and poised almost as though it were the only thing this little girl was wishing for, the only thing that mattered to her. Its hard to come across good poets on websites like these but this is really good! Great piece and keep writing (:
Girly said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 5:28 pm
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I have never had a birthday party but you make me want to experience one. It sounds fun. I ask my parents they say who put such nonsense into your head.
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 5:21 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
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I really, really like this. Great flow and cool concept; it's even better knowing that your wish came true :)
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 3:08 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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I hadnt either, until last summer :P ooo happy early birthday!! :D and thanks!
hedwigy13 PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 3:07 pm
hedwigy13 PLATINUM, Piscataway, New Jersey
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really pretty. if half of the poetry I wrote were like this I'd be happy
Emma-Riley PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 3:01 pm
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good job jane
recurring_resilience SILVER said...
on Jan. 15 2012 at 6:37 pm
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
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I've never wished for someone when blowing out the candles. xD I'll consider this when it's my bday in about 2 weeks! Well done! :D
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 15 2012 at 5:41 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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thank you!! :D
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 15 2012 at 5:40 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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Actually, my wish already came true. =) and omg thank you so much!!
RainingInParis1992 said...
on Jan. 15 2012 at 5:35 pm
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I really liked it! It's great how you can write something so great and descriptive about something so ordinary like blowing out birthday candles :) Great work!
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on Jan. 15 2012 at 5:31 pm
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Now it's not going to come true, you can't tell us your wish! Joking aside, exceptional work! This is the kind of writing I hope to see in Teen Ink's magazine!
browneyez16 GOLD said...
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keep writing...we all could use more smiles these days ;)
praveen.Trichy PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 13 2012 at 2:19 pm
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Nice.....I like this
babyrex4 SILVER said...
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YES????????!!!!!
Rivan SILVER said...
on Jan. 12 2012 at 7:33 pm
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really awesome.