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Birthday Candles

December 28, 2011
By marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift


The three decker cake stood before me on the table
All thirteen candles lit and waiting,

The wax melting and fading,
And the base plunged into the goodness of vanilla icing

As the spotlight birthday song continued to be sung.
Once it’s over, the candles seem to get brighter,

Smiles seem to get wider,
And the balloons seem to get lighter

As I stare at the round, sugary cake.
I can feel everybody’s eyes on me,
Beckoning my wish to come and blow out the candles,

So that the mocking cake can be devoured.
I can’t think of my wish or how to put it in words;
I feel pressured with all the family’s and camera’s eyes

Poised on me with expectance.
The icing covered cake sweats on the table,

And within seconds I make up my mind
I take a deep breath and blow 12 flaming candles out

And on the 13th I whisper softly,
'I blew out my birthday candles

And wished for you.'


The author's comments:
Dedication:





To Noah,
I will always be wishing for you.

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on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:44 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

i'm glad you do

on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:44 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

aw, thanks =) and hmm....maybe one of your friends could host a secret birthday party for you! :D

on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:42 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you =) but i'm sure your poetry is just as good :) mine isnt amazing

on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:25 pm
Honeygirl16201 PLATINUM, Kittannning, Pennsylvania
23 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
''Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass. Its about learning to dance in the rain.''

i really like this poem it is so sweet. you .have an amazing talent

war_machine said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 5:37 pm
i likes it!

on Jan. 16 2012 at 5:35 pm
MarieLouiseA SILVER, Newmarket, Other
5 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing's Impossible, The world is your dream.
In your eyes, the sky's a different blue.

I love the tension build up throughout and how the ending is so simple, but elegant and poised almost as though it were the only thing this little girl was wishing for, the only thing that mattered to her. Its hard to come across good poets on websites like these but this is really good! Great piece and keep writing (:

Girly said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 5:28 pm
Girly, Wheeler, Texas
0 articles 8 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everyone sees who I appear to be but only a few know the real me, you only see what I choose to show there's so much behind my smile you just don't know.

I have never had a birthday party but you make me want to experience one. It sounds fun. I ask my parents they say who put such nonsense into your head.

on Jan. 16 2012 at 5:21 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot." -Eleanor Roosevelt

I really, really like this. Great flow and cool concept; it's even better knowing that your wish came true :)

on Jan. 16 2012 at 3:08 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

I hadnt either, until last summer :P ooo happy early birthday!! :D and thanks!

on Jan. 16 2012 at 3:07 pm
hedwigy13 PLATINUM, Piscataway, New Jersey
27 articles 2 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Only in the dictionary does success come before work." -unknown

really pretty. if half of the poetry I wrote were like this I'd be happy

on Jan. 16 2012 at 3:01 pm
Emma-Riley PLATINUM, No, Other
44 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Take my hand i give it to you, now you own me all i am, you said you would never leave me, i believe you, i believe..."
-Flyleaf

good job jane

on Jan. 15 2012 at 6:37 pm
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"These are the times that try men's souls." - Thomas Paine.

"You don't understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could've been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am." - On the Water Front

"This is my place of failure."

I've never wished for someone when blowing out the candles. xD I'll consider this when it's my bday in about 2 weeks! Well done! :D

on Jan. 15 2012 at 5:41 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you!! :D

on Jan. 15 2012 at 5:40 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

Actually, my wish already came true. =) and omg thank you so much!!

on Jan. 15 2012 at 5:35 pm
RainingInParis1992, London, New York
0 articles 0 photos 19 comments
I really liked it! It's great how you can write something so great and descriptive about something so ordinary like blowing out birthday candles :) Great work!

on Jan. 15 2012 at 5:31 pm
Writer_Jordan GOLD, Ellicott City, Maryland
15 articles 0 photos 183 comments

Favorite Quote:
All that is gold does not glitter,
Not all those who wander are lost;
The old that is strong does not wither,
Deep roots are not reached by the frost.
From the ashes a fire shall be woken,
A light from the shadows shall spring;
Renewed shall be blade that was broken,
The crownless again shall be king.

Now it's not going to come true, you can't tell us your wish! Joking aside, exceptional work! This is the kind of writing I hope to see in Teen Ink's magazine!

on Jan. 14 2012 at 10:12 pm
browneyez16 GOLD, Hephzibah, Georgia
10 articles 1 photo 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You may fail, but fall still fighting, don't give up whatever you do. Eyes front, head high, to the finish...see it through"



~See It Through by Edgar Albert Guest~

keep writing...we all could use more smiles these days ;)

on Jan. 13 2012 at 2:19 pm
praveen.Trichy PLATINUM, Thirchy, Other
25 articles 0 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
cruel leaders are replaced only to turn other leaders cruel

Nice.....I like this

on Jan. 12 2012 at 8:52 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown

YES????????!!!!!

Rivan SILVER said...
on Jan. 12 2012 at 7:33 pm
Rivan SILVER, Westfield, Other
8 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Clever as the devil and twice as pretty. -Holly Black

really awesome.