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Birthday Candles

December 28, 2011
By marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift


The three decker cake stood before me on the table
All thirteen candles lit and waiting,

The wax melting and fading,
And the base plunged into the goodness of vanilla icing

As the spotlight birthday song continued to be sung.
Once it’s over, the candles seem to get brighter,

Smiles seem to get wider,
And the balloons seem to get lighter

As I stare at the round, sugary cake.
I can feel everybody’s eyes on me,
Beckoning my wish to come and blow out the candles,

So that the mocking cake can be devoured.
I can’t think of my wish or how to put it in words;
I feel pressured with all the family’s and camera’s eyes

Poised on me with expectance.
The icing covered cake sweats on the table,

And within seconds I make up my mind
I take a deep breath and blow 12 flaming candles out

And on the 13th I whisper softly,
'I blew out my birthday candles

And wished for you.'


The author's comments:
Dedication:





To Noah,
I will always be wishing for you.

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on Feb. 3 2012 at 10:16 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

Due , this was amazing! I especially loved the last lines. They are so powerful! Keep up the fantastic-ness! 5 Stars :)

on Feb. 3 2012 at 9:57 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you :)

on Feb. 3 2012 at 9:56 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! :D

on Feb. 3 2012 at 9:52 pm
screenname55555555, D, Alabama
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I really enjoyed this. It's a cool and new perspective.

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on Feb. 3 2012 at 11:16 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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pretty poem! very well written. 5/5 from me

on Feb. 2 2012 at 6:23 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! :D

on Feb. 2 2012 at 6:00 pm
emru4534 SILVER, Flemington, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
How vain it is to sit down to write when you have not stood up to live.
-Henry David Thoreau

I really loved this...the ending was so cute!

on Feb. 2 2012 at 5:52 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

Thank you sooo much!! :D pleeease do read some more of my work-- i could really use the feedback! =) and nope, i dont mind :) i will read it asap...or right now :P

on Feb. 2 2012 at 5:46 pm
HopefullyTrue BRONZE, East New Market, Maryland
1 article 1 photo 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"one day your life will pass through your eyes. make it worth waching"- unknown

i really liked this poem. It was very well written and gives many details that helped me enjoy it. I cant wait to read more of your work. would you mind reading my poem live and die i would really apprishate it. Thanks for putting up so an awsome poem.

on Feb. 1 2012 at 6:47 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you sooo much!! :D i am really glad i inspired someone =)

on Feb. 1 2012 at 6:30 pm
seaofsorrows GOLD, Lynnwood, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Love. A four letter word, short but true. With no hope of being defined. But what's new?



-S. Jordan

I really enjoyed reading this! I had no idea where it was going at first and when I read the end I was pretty amazed by how you lead up to that. thanks for inspiring me.

on Feb. 1 2012 at 5:54 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! =)

on Feb. 1 2012 at 5:54 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you! :)

on Feb. 1 2012 at 5:54 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! :D and sure! i will asap =)

on Jan. 31 2012 at 6:51 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
~Jhonen Vasquez

Good poem, I especially like the ending, a little twist

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on Jan. 30 2012 at 8:38 pm
Skyeblu BRONZE, Lawton, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"You are you. Now, isn't that pleasant?"
-Dr.Seuss
"I was going to buy a copy of "The Power of Positive Thinking", and then I thought: What the hell good would that do?"
-Ronnie Shakes

Wonderful imagery! I could really picture the scene. It was a really good read:)

on Jan. 30 2012 at 4:59 pm
alexis0nicole_ BRONZE, Carmel, Indiana
4 articles 3 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is little to live for if you don't live for the little things.

I really like this! Can you rate and/or comment some of my work? thanks(: you are amazing! love this poem.

on Jan. 29 2012 at 3:27 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

I wrote it that way because i wanted it to be a surprise at the end that i wished for someone. I actually showed it to that person, and so all the describing the party made it totally unexpected that i'd wish for them in the end. =) but thanks!

on Jan. 29 2012 at 3:25 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks for commenting! :)

on Jan. 29 2012 at 3:25 pm
camille_1441 PLATINUM, Westerville, Ohio
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Good imagery, the poem is sweet but I think since the poem was about wishing for someone it might have been good to describe what you were feeling about wishing for that person rather then describing the party although you described it beautifully.