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Birthday Candles

December 28, 2011
By marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift


The three decker cake stood before me on the table
All thirteen candles lit and waiting,

The wax melting and fading,
And the base plunged into the goodness of vanilla icing

As the spotlight birthday song continued to be sung.
Once it’s over, the candles seem to get brighter,

Smiles seem to get wider,
And the balloons seem to get lighter

As I stare at the round, sugary cake.
I can feel everybody’s eyes on me,
Beckoning my wish to come and blow out the candles,

So that the mocking cake can be devoured.
I can’t think of my wish or how to put it in words;
I feel pressured with all the family’s and camera’s eyes

Poised on me with expectance.
The icing covered cake sweats on the table,

And within seconds I make up my mind
I take a deep breath and blow 12 flaming candles out

And on the 13th I whisper softly,
'I blew out my birthday candles

And wished for you.'


The author's comments:
Dedication:





To Noah,
I will always be wishing for you.

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on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:33 pm
smichelle SILVER, Pewee Valley, Kentucky
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i love this, i feel like we are there with you at this party. I really did not see the end coming though, Maybe a few subtiles hints would've been a little betteer. But it's an amazing poem.

on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:27 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

Thaaank you :D i'm really glad my poem can make people feel like that. :) and yay! thats what i aim for! For people to be able to relate. I wish on 11:11s too :P I think your wish will come true someday. =) and thanks!!

on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:26 pm
Choosing2Live4Christ PLATINUM, Wausaukee, Wisconsin
28 articles 13 photos 66 comments
you're welcome! I get that a lot :-)

on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:23 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you thank you thank you! =)

on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:23 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

:D thanks!

on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:22 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

You and i both know that you're not a little boy and < 3 thank you =) , Mr. Guy I Wished For ;)

on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:21 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! =) i like your screen name, btw!

Inksy SILVER said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 4:34 pm
Inksy SILVER, NSL, Utah
7 articles 0 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Three can keep a secret if two of them are dead"
~Benjamin Frankiln
"Love? Above all things I believe in love. Love is like oxygen. Love is a many splendored thing. Love lifts us up where we belong. All you need is love."
~Moulin Rouge

Aw, this is really cute (: The details are amazing. I'm literally sitting there with you, watching you blow out your candles (: And... I can totally relate to it. I've wished on countless shooting stars and 11:11's wishing for a certain person... sigh. ANYWAYS. You are an amazing writer, keep writing! (:

.king. SILVER said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 6:53 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
9 articles 4 photos 573 comments

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That was sweet, it felt like I was invited, l like the included details, I love it, nice share !

on Jan. 19 2012 at 11:34 pm
Destinee BRONZE, Oakville, Other
3 articles 0 photos 306 comments

Favorite Quote:
Blegh. - Abraham Lincoln

That was actually really good! I loved the ending. Totally unexpected. :)

N.k. said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 7:35 pm
Little boy here, just wanted to say that this poem was really, just indulging, it pulls u in and never lets u go. I love it and it really described the seen, -little boy

on Jan. 19 2012 at 7:11 pm
Choosing2Live4Christ PLATINUM, Wausaukee, Wisconsin
28 articles 13 photos 66 comments
I love the ending, it's so sweet! :)

on Jan. 19 2012 at 5:08 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! :D

on Jan. 19 2012 at 5:07 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

Thank you and here...*hands Sokon492 a cyber cake*

on Jan. 19 2012 at 5:07 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

o.O two comments, same person :p

on Jan. 18 2012 at 11:37 pm
AngelsLullaby GOLD, Neverland, Idaho
12 articles 7 photos 95 comments

Favorite Quote:
Music is a higher revelation from wisdom and philosophy. ~Ludwig Von Beethoven

I loved the imagery in this poem. And the ending was so sweet. 5/5 stars

on Jan. 18 2012 at 8:55 pm
Sokon492 SILVER, San Jacinto, California
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Favorite Quote:
i dont have one.

its a good poem........... now i want cake

on Jan. 18 2012 at 8:54 pm
Sokon492 SILVER, San Jacinto, California
5 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
i dont have one.

its pretty good ..... now i want cake

on Jan. 18 2012 at 4:59 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! =)

-Kal- GOLD said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 4:57 pm
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
14 articles 0 photos 244 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Faith sees the invisible, believes the incredible, and recieves the impossible"
-Anonymous

That was so sweet :) Good job :)