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Birthday Candles

December 28, 2011
By marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift


The three decker cake stood before me on the table
All thirteen candles lit and waiting,

The wax melting and fading,
And the base plunged into the goodness of vanilla icing

As the spotlight birthday song continued to be sung.
Once it’s over, the candles seem to get brighter,

Smiles seem to get wider,
And the balloons seem to get lighter

As I stare at the round, sugary cake.
I can feel everybody’s eyes on me,
Beckoning my wish to come and blow out the candles,

So that the mocking cake can be devoured.
I can’t think of my wish or how to put it in words;
I feel pressured with all the family’s and camera’s eyes

Poised on me with expectance.
The icing covered cake sweats on the table,

And within seconds I make up my mind
I take a deep breath and blow 12 flaming candles out

And on the 13th I whisper softly,
'I blew out my birthday candles

And wished for you.'


The author's comments:
Dedication:





To Noah,
I will always be wishing for you.

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on Jan. 29 2012 at 3:25 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! =)

on Jan. 29 2012 at 3:24 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you =)

on Jan. 29 2012 at 3:23 pm
EmmettHerculeLaFave SILVER, Tucson, Arizona
8 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We have it in our power to begin the world over again." -Thomas Paine

Awesome poem. Very unique, I've never read anything in this particular mood, and its very refreshing. Totally well done.

on Jan. 28 2012 at 9:42 pm
denifelice SILVER, Flourtown, Pennsylvania
6 articles 15 photos 149 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are far, far better things ahead than any we leave behind." -C.S. Lewis

It was good, but I noticed that the word "seem" was slightly overused.

tealbird said...
on Jan. 28 2012 at 5:28 pm
This was beautiful. You did a wonderful job capturing emotion in your words.

on Jan. 28 2012 at 1:38 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! =)

on Jan. 28 2012 at 1:38 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you!

on Jan. 28 2012 at 1:31 pm
lucybrown SILVER, Blacksburg, Virginia
7 articles 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
The wastebasket is a writer's best friend. ~Isaac Bashevis Singer

First things first, but not necessarily in that order. ~ From Doctor Who

I loved the descriptions you used and the idea is great! This is a very sweet poem and I love the message that you get across. The ending was great also. I loved this. Great work:)

on Jan. 28 2012 at 1:30 pm
rockmafia-611 BRONZE, Oran, Other
3 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are multiple sides to all of us.Who we are and who we might be if we follow our dreams"
Miley Cyrus(Miles to go)

i love it good job.keep on

on Jan. 27 2012 at 8:36 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you =)

on Jan. 27 2012 at 8:36 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

Ohhh, thank you so much!! =) =) =)

on Jan. 27 2012 at 8:21 pm
Whitehouse503 SILVER, North Waterboro, Maine
7 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
"In the end you should always do the right thing, even if it's hard."

WOW, ahhhh-mazing! I don't think there was any better poem you could've written. This was one of the best poems I have EVER read! And I've read a lot! :)

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on Jan. 27 2012 at 8:12 pm
Aaka131 SILVER, Dunbar, Pennsylvania
7 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

This is great I love it:)

on Jan. 27 2012 at 6:54 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

aww, thank you soooo much, i really appreciate you taking the time to make a comment that long =) =)

on Jan. 27 2012 at 6:53 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! :)

on Jan. 27 2012 at 6:52 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you, and i will asap! =) i have to look at soo many peoples work lol...

on Jan. 27 2012 at 6:52 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks so much!

on Jan. 27 2012 at 6:52 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you =) im glad when people like it :)

on Jan. 27 2012 at 6:51 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thanks! :D

on Jan. 27 2012 at 6:50 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

thank you =)