Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Nov. 26 2015 at 9:12 pm
nelehjr DIAMOND, Lingle, Wyoming
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Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

Seems very sad... Congratulations on your success!

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on Nov. 24 2015 at 7:48 am
Kirika GOLD, Worcester, Massachusetts
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"Without music, life would be a mistake." - Friedrich Nietzsche

that was a really nice poem n.n that part when the child ask the father if they can fly, then the father says "sure" im just like "bruh, hes gonna flop and drown in the water" but then the son lands on the ground cause of the chain and were just like "when our parents don't let us dream" ^^;

on Nov. 19 2015 at 10:13 am
Whiskers7151 GOLD, West Valley, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
I don't have an attitude problem, you have a problem with my attitude, and that's not my problem.

This is a really powerful piece. Thank you for sharing it with us!

on Nov. 12 2015 at 3:44 pm
WanderingCoyote BRONZE, Liberty, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"I have no fear of losing my life - if I have to save a koala or a crocodile or a kangaroo or a snake, mate, I will save it." -Steve Irwin

I'm going to read this aloud for my writing club. You've got talent and the symbolism in this piece is astonishing.

on Nov. 10 2015 at 4:34 pm
InkCatcher GOLD, Lunenburg, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
" All who wander are not lost." J.R.R. Tolkien

I love the symbolic meaning in your words of pushing back on society and on the people that will hold on to chains pulling you back.

on Nov. 10 2015 at 1:06 pm
tayfreeman. GOLD, Chesapeake, Virginia
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This is so well written! I love how there is a little bit of rhyme but it is not childish or forced! I also love the message and imagery!

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on Nov. 6 2015 at 11:50 pm
waish SILVER, Ranchi, Other
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this is my one of the favorite poem so good love it and if you have a second please see my stuff thankyou TeenInk.com/poetry/song_lyrics/article/836213/Your-Smile/

on Nov. 6 2015 at 5:24 pm
M.G.Causly SILVER, Compton, California
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"Always," said Snape.

wow....thats really deep. the end when you said, "i saw my Father pull on a chain,then i knew that i was bound." just shows the lengths parents will go to snuff our dreams...wow...great job! it really spoke to me!

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on Nov. 6 2015 at 11:55 am
jala2018,
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This is real poetry, the words flow very beautifully and it has imagery. "I asked my father if I could swim, and he said I would drown". I think she's asking to be in the real world and her farther said she would drown because the world is a mean and dangerous place.

on Nov. 6 2015 at 11:53 am
alaylanorthern BRONZE, Rosedale, Louisiana
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I love this poem because I understand how she is feeling, and it has a deep meaning. I had to read it a couple of times, and then I finally understood it was amazing and meaningful. “So I walked out to the water, And cried out – how ’bout now!”

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on Nov. 6 2015 at 11:44 am
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The poem is a great lesson of being able to do what others say you cannot. The son asked his father if he could swim and says his reply was “I would drown. The Sea would imprison me – he said if my feet had left the ground”, but the son still goes out deep into the water and thrives, and I like that this poem foreshadows the lesson.

on Nov. 5 2015 at 4:51 pm
ItsTimeToBegin PLATINUM, Lexington, Massachusetts
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One of the things I love most is the tone. It's kind of casual, making it relatable, but it also seems to have this deeper meaning too about the hope and disappointment which comes with dreams.

on Nov. 4 2015 at 2:38 pm
alissagraves BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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This poem is so relatable. I love how you were basically saying no matter how hard someone can try to do what they wanted someone was always there preventing them from doing it. I’m a teenager, and often there are people that feel the need to hold me back, so I can relate. The poem says, “I asked my Father if I could fly, he said, sure, Son- go try. I jumped as high as I could. Still, I landed on the ground. I saw my Father pull on a chain, then I knew that I was pound.” I love this because it shows how the Father is preventing the son from doing what he wants.

on Nov. 4 2015 at 11:26 am
kristiannrenee_ BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"God gives his toughest battles to his strongest soldiers".

I like this poem because it says, “I asked my father if I could fly, and he said, sure, Son-go try.” I can relate to this because my dad is also my main protector. He encourages me to take chances, and if I don’t succeed his is still always right there to catch me.

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8/8 best r8 m8 even b8r b8!

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“don’t fall slave to the serpent’s tongue”

Woooow. Amazing. 10/10 best poem ever-IGN

on Oct. 21 2015 at 10:19 am
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amazing. rhythm and tempo are pleasant to the ears.

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Awesome, I like this, its good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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The article really drew me in. Amazing


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