Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

Similar Articles


This article has 2125 comments.

Maliq BRONZE said...
on Jan. 16 at 3:18 pm
Maliq BRONZE, Sacramento, California
3 articles 0 photos 1 comment
it was fun to read and the twist at the end caught me off guard.

on Jan. 16 at 3:12 pm
yungnserg916 BRONZE, Sacramento, California
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments
very good details,the twist at the end was off guard but it was a fun read

on Jan. 16 at 2:56 pm
Phl.RamilJr BRONZE, Sacramento, California
3 articles 0 photos 4 comments
i like the twist in the end because it caught me off guard and i did not expect that.

on Jan. 16 at 2:03 pm
CaprisunBrisk BRONZE, Sacramento , California
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments
it was sad but honest. good job

i love this !

on Jan. 1 at 9:55 pm
lost_and_free GOLD, Rancho Mirage, California
18 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"'But man is not made for defeat... A man can be destroyed, but not defeated.'" - Ernest Hemingway (The Old Man and the Sea)

Beautiful. Sad and truthful. And soulful.

on Dec. 20 2017 at 3:32 pm
BookWerm SILVER, Orem, Utah
8 articles 4 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hello, boys." - Crowley, Supernatural

Everyone is saying they love the twist ending. I don't get what the twist is.

This is beautiful :)

em.. good, i like

Fantastic poem,very nice

rossy25 said...
on Nov. 28 2017 at 3:25 pm
rossy25, Baytown, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment
follow me on Instagram @_htx._Rebecca :)

on Nov. 23 2017 at 12:38 pm
kristenjwang SILVER, NY, New York
8 articles 0 photos 5 comments
ah, a fellow Staten Islander! This is beautiful!

on Nov. 22 2017 at 4:07 pm
gatsbygreen BRONZE, London, Other
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments
This is beautiful :)


on Nov. 12 2017 at 12:31 am
justarandom BRONZE, Auckland, Other
4 articles 0 photos 10 comments
this poem is amazing

on Oct. 31 2017 at 12:30 pm
KurdiG PLATINUM, Douglasville, Georgia
21 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Your work is extremely incredible.

on Oct. 24 2017 at 2:35 pm
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
should've known from the start, shawty always playin' wit my heart

i just have one thing to say and one thing only... shouldve known from the start

chancewalker said...
on Oct. 24 2017 at 2:34 pm
chancewalker, Littleton, Colorado
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment
shoulda known from the start

on Oct. 17 2017 at 2:39 pm
Siri.Writes BRONZE, Knapp, Wisconsin
1 article 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You may not be the Queen, but without the people, there is no Queen." -Siri.Writes

At first, I was confused, but this is absolutely marvelous. I envy you amazing literature skill.

on Oct. 15 2017 at 8:47 pm
Milo_J_Henry BRONZE, Greenville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments
Love the contrasting imagery in this! Very unique, keep up the good work.

MacMillan Books

Aspiring Writer? Take Our Online Course!