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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Feb. 11 2023 at 10:43 pm
EmptyBox SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Really nice poem. Also a poem that actually rhymes instead of a massive, structureless paragraph filled with mundane thoughts formatted in the style of a poem.

on Nov. 2 2022 at 10:21 pm
AngelsImagination GOLD, Leicester, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Eleanor Roosevelt - "Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. Today is a gift. That's why we call it 'The Present'"<br /> <br /> Emily Dickinson - "Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all."

I am inspired by this beautifully written poem. So much feelings/emotions was incorporated; making the words flow. I love the idea of the chain which symbolizes the protection of a father, and at the same time could also symbolize the limits of the child because of his/her fathers grasp. It could be interpreted in many ways which is interesting. This poem though was just in all, a masterpiece.

on Oct. 5 2022 at 10:49 am
glovermaddi PLATINUM, Summerset, South Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
“Destruction is a form of creation.”

DAAAAAAMN

on Sep. 21 2022 at 11:52 am
Snake_Skullz SILVER, Pella Ia, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"Not in doing what you like, but liking what you do is the secret of happiness" - J.M Barrie

Since 2008?? This is an amazing poem!

on Jun. 30 2022 at 7:11 pm
Ashila21 BRONZE, Chesterfield, Missouri
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This is a really interesting poem and could be interpreted in different ways. The last line sent shivers down my spine, and as a metaphor, a chain is a perfect way to describe the relationship of parent to child.

on Mar. 10 2022 at 11:00 am
poetofthedeepbluesea GOLD, Nashville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"One day you will tell the story of how you've overcome what you're going through now and it will become a part of someone else's survival guide."<br /> - Unknown

You must have a true talent for this poem to remain relevant for 14 years.

on Mar. 10 2022 at 10:59 am
poetofthedeepbluesea GOLD, Nashville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"One day you will tell the story of how you've overcome what you're going through now and it will become a part of someone else's survival guide."<br /> - Unknown

I keep coming back to this poem. I can't count how many times I've read it. This is a true work of art, something every writer wants to produce.

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on Jan. 28 2022 at 10:08 am
elfmaster, Clio, Michigan
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so sad and caring

on Jan. 27 2022 at 12:37 am
aalaazah1 PLATINUM, Colombo, Other
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Favorite Quote:
where words fail music speaks <br /> success is a journey, not a destination<br /> <br /> when you feel your best, everybody else can feel it too - ARIANA GRANDE<br /> <br /> If you are able to look yourself<br /> in the mirror every day<br /> with the decisions that you make,<br /> that's where power starts - SELENA GOMEZ<br /> <br /> Before you judge people judge yourself - ZAYN MALIK<br /> <br /> haters will say what they want, but their hate will <br /> never stop you from chasing your dream- JUSTIN BIEBER<br /> <br /> If you follow your dreams, <br /> it means you follow your heart.<br /> if you do follow your heart, <br /> I don't think you can go wrong- CELINE DION

It was amazing....

on Dec. 14 2021 at 9:32 am
GoPanthers1234, Davidson, North Carolina
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I liked the use of figurative language and how the dad made sure that his son couldn't drown.

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on Dec. 13 2021 at 11:12 pm
JulianHoops, Harrisburg, North Carolina
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I enjoy the fact that the father is trying to protect his son from drowning. On the other hand, I was hoping that the dad would allow his son to go deeper in water.

AP2207 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:45 pm
AP2207, Moorsville, North Carolina
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I like the figurative language this poem uses and how it is described. I also liked how you used symbolism through out it.

Brady123456 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:37 pm
Brady123456, Concord, North Carolina
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I like the way that the dad is shown to always protect his son. If the son failed at a new activity the chain would make sure they were safe. The chain sort of symbolizes the reach that a father has over their son and how they always want to protect their kids.

Brady123456 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:37 pm
Brady123456, Concord, North Carolina
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I like the way that the dad is shown to always protect his son. If the son failed at a new activity the chain would make sure they were safe. The chain sort of symbolizes the reach that a father has over their son and how they always want to protect their kids.

sbrooks123 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:36 pm
sbrooks123, Cornelius, North Carolina
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I like how personification was used in this poem.

LiamLingor said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 1:50 pm
LiamLingor, Huntersville, North Carolina
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I like how this poem uses symbolization to show how a dad protects a kid. They let the kid try to do things and in the event, they would've failed, the father has a chain that makes sure they are safe.

on Dec. 2 2021 at 12:50 pm
smaddie24 PLATINUM, Cityland, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
“Light shines brightest in the deepest dark!”<br /> -Jim Butcher

lol, this is still top discussed 13 years later.

on Nov. 18 2021 at 11:46 pm
McLaughlin_It SILVER, Vista, California
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Favorite Quote:
All my life they let me know<br /> How far I would not go<br /> But inside the beast still grows<br /> Waiting, chewing through the ropes<br /> Who are you to change this world?<br /> Silly boy<br /> No one needs to hear your words<br /> Let it go<br /> Carnivore, carnivore<br /> Won't you come digest me?<br /> Take away everything I am<br /> Bring it to an end

Can somebody explain, i'm confused

on Sep. 8 2021 at 11:18 am
lashhbug05 SILVER, Mumbai, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Cogito ergo sum

Wow this poem is beautiful

camc1_03 said...
on Jun. 11 2021 at 1:05 pm
camc1_03, Mount Olive, New Jersey
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I love the symbolism and descriptions used in the poem. It gives a really good and different perspective of somebody else's life and what it might be like to live as that person.