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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Nov. 22 at 2:25 am
sarahshahzad BRONZE, Other, Other
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amazing..! love this so much...

on Nov. 17 at 11:06 pm
insanefoxgurl07, Fountain, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"If you're always trying to be normal, you will never know how amazing you can be."
~ Maya Angelou

Those last few lines- ouch. What a twist.
Great poem though, really makes you think.

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This was a very religious experience

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_-Dark_Shadow-_, Orlando, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Shoot for the stars, because if u miss, you'll land among the stars"

Bruh -_- really? Meh..being 15 is SOOOO weird to meh

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on Sep. 19 at 11:06 am
thiCCman, Tomah, Wisconsin
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Nah you gey but this poem was good at being bad

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GIBBYGIBBS6969696969, Tomah, Wisconsin
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You are a very talented writer. I hope you keep writing i really enjoy reading your pieces.

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Favorite Quote:
"Life's under no obligation to give us what we want."

Keep writing the way you do, and you will inspire everyone around you.

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Favorite Quote:
Broken crayons still colour.

I believe you're going to change the lives of a lot of people if you continue writing that way.

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Favorite Quote:
"Proper Preparation Prevents Poor Performance"

I did not expect that ending.

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on Apr. 29 at 1:04 pm
flash14 BRONZE, Cape Canaveral, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
never put of till tomorrow what you can do today

this poem is really good. I header that a poem is a copy of how you fell

on Feb. 26 at 10:24 am
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This was so deep, i would really love to see what you think about my work if you have time!

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that was good confuzing the first time but better the second

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lydiagerges BRONZE, Franklin, Wisconsin
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this is so amazing. it would mean so much to me if you could read my piece and give me honest feedback xoxo

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on Feb. 1 at 4:32 pm
apeeke BRONZE, Hammonton, New Jersey
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I loved it! I wonder how long it took you to write this? It was the best poetry I've ever heard!

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Favorite Quote:
"Atticus,he was real nice...."

"Most people are,sout,when you finally see them"

-To Kill A Mockingbird,HAPPER LEE

Amazing! love the ryhming and the theme everything!

on Dec. 17 2018 at 5:49 am
virginiatung BRONZE, Singapore, Other
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this is an AMAZING poem!! I love how it rhymes and there are so many possible meanings that readers can interpret from this. Good job!


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