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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Sep. 22 at 4:26 pm
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~Ronald Weasley "Chamber of Secrets"

I really liked this. It is a really good poem that touches your heart

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Ooh, really amazing twist in the end!! Really love the vague meaning behind the poem.

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Great poem though, really makes you think.

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Keep writing the way you do, and you will inspire everyone around you.

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I did not expect that ending.