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November 12, 2008
By Kelly M., Mineola, NY, Mineola, NY

Anger bubbles up beneath my skin;
I grin,
then push my lips out
in frustration
when he turns
away.

My nose prickles hard on the inside
and I swallow hard,
willing the tears not to come,
but they do not heed.
The briny water wells up
on the cusp of my lashline,
threatening to fall
to give me away.
I feel the first drop slip over the edge and glide softly
down my cheek onto my lower lip,
which trembles.
Its saltiness coats the single word
on my tongue
that fidgets,
waiting to launch itself into the open air
in vain
like so many times before.
Listen.



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on Nov. 3 2011 at 10:57 pm
Ada Dolan-Zalaznick SILVER, New York, New York
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This is so pretty! This is going to sound stupid, but I love the way you use language in this piece.

on Nov. 3 2011 at 8:33 pm
lilovebug905598 BRONZE, Reynoldsburg, Ohio
2 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love, hears but not listen,and leaves before she is left."-wise girl

Too true. Good poem/song

bubbles.. said...
on Nov. 3 2011 at 7:31 am
bubbles.., Warren, Michigan
0 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont forget the bad. learn from it.

this is sooo good! love this!

 


Lexie96 GOLD said...
on Oct. 24 2011 at 6:04 am
Lexie96 GOLD, Havana, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
Now Cinderella don't you go to sleep, it's such a bitter form of refuge, oh don't you know the kingdom's under siege, and everbody needs you. - The Killers

Good piece, great description of emotion, can anyone here give me some feedback on my poem? Please?

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march27 said...
on Oct. 12 2011 at 9:28 pm
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on Oct. 12 2011 at 3:53 pm
Caban37104 BRONZE, Vineland, New Jersey
3 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
You all laugh at me because I'm different, yet I laugh at you because you're all the same.

Check out my page and let me know what you think..! =] Thanks alot

 

BTW, this piece is great, It was strong and kept my attention. Great job.. =]


SpyceChik GOLD said...
on Sep. 20 2011 at 9:57 am
SpyceChik GOLD, Accra, Other
14 articles 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
If it must be done, it must be done well.

the thought WOW! I really like this!I love the thought behind it- A work in progress, great! Keep this up and pls check out some of my work if you can.

on Aug. 29 2011 at 2:23 pm
StuieWLG SILVER, Dublin, Other
6 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
'I did not attend the funeral but i approved of it'-Mark Twain
'Every man must see to hope. For without hope, there is no man to see ' -Stuie Larner

very strong poem. I love your description of such frustration and relentlessness. Can I ask, when you wrote this who you had as the person not listening? :) 

on Aug. 29 2011 at 10:14 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
10 articles 0 photos 145 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

but she doesn't want to give away that she's hurt. :)

on Aug. 29 2011 at 10:12 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
10 articles 0 photos 145 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

she wants to be heard, to be listened to be, to be given a chance to speak...

I absolutely loved the way you described the whole scene! Keep writing. And check out my stuff too. :)


on Jul. 16 2011 at 5:13 pm
jdotalways SILVER, Williamsburg, Kentucky
8 articles 1 photo 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
tis better to have loved and lost then to have never loved at all.

so what is it about?

TAR11 SILVER said...
on Jul. 16 2011 at 5:02 pm
TAR11 SILVER, Allison Park, Pennsylvania
7 articles 0 photos 51 comments
Very relatable.  Please check out my poems "From the Hilltop" and Anonymous' Inferno"  Thanks! 

IamRevy BRONZE said...
on Jul. 16 2011 at 4:08 pm
IamRevy BRONZE, State Of Mind, Other
4 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Trying to please the world is a self-made curse"

Amazing write-up. Love the entire description of how reluctant she was to give out even a drop of tear but her emotions/body reaction disagreed beautiful. Check out my HEAD TO THE WEST PIECE HERE  piece TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/349259/Head-To-The-West/

 

MY LETTER TO JULIET PIECE! 

TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/349256/MY-LETTER-TO-JULIET/

 

MY MISSING RIB PIECE! 

TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/349126/My-Missing-Rib/


on Jul. 16 2011 at 3:56 pm
Laura_Oliver GOLD, Manchester, Connecticut
12 articles 2 photos 122 comments
I like how the meaning of the poem isn't blatant, more woven within the words. You are truly an artist.

lissa_ GOLD said...
on Jul. 16 2011 at 2:07 am
lissa_ GOLD, Salt Lake City, Utah
16 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you don't stand for something you'll fall for anything."- Suckerpunch
"The purpose of life is to be a better version of yourself."- Lucy Hale

I would normally try to understand it, but it's so suspenseful that I have to keep reading and I'm afraid that if I evaluate it- it'll ruin it. Nice job.(=

on Jun. 24 2011 at 10:48 am
OneInParticular1017, Greenwood, South Carolina
0 articles 0 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don’t you know? Hearts are breakable. And I think even when you heal, you’re never what you were before. -City of Fallen Angels
Either love me with vomit in my hair or don't love me at all. -Ryan O'Connell, Thought Catalog

Great poem. A flowing free verse is a difficult thing to write, but you did it perfectly. 

on Jun. 2 2011 at 4:38 pm
xximjustmexx PLATINUM, Oak Forest, Illinois
46 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
There's no god. There's no religion. There's only life, what you do with YOUR life, who YOU let affect YOUR life. Bad things happen to everyone, you just have to learn to deal with them.

I can relate. Very good poem.

on Jun. 2 2011 at 12:24 pm
DallasCox SILVER, Wallingford, Kentucky
9 articles 0 photos 5 comments
Amazing. This is a perfect example of how poetry is just photography through words. This captures this emotion and scene flawlessly. I love it.

on May. 11 2011 at 10:51 pm
A_way_Away BRONZE, Raanana, Other
1 article 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life: it goes on.

~Robert Frost

Wow, that was really great! Your choice of words was very interesting, and you described each thing in such detail, yet it was easy to pictire the overall scene. Very nice!