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Cotton Candy MAG

October 25, 2008
By freedomfighter97 BRONZE, Lake Ann, Michigan
freedomfighter97 BRONZE, Lake Ann, Michigan
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puffs of sweet fiberglass
dissolve into pink crystals
on the pinnacle of my tongue.

they fall like tickled icicles
puncturing the walls
of my abdomen.

still I consume
the addicting substance,
permitting my body
to slowly commit suicide.

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on Mar. 15 2012 at 9:55 am
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Wow- cotton candy seemed like such a simple thing- I love the use of larger words! Super descriptive- I love it!

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on Feb. 26 2012 at 9:56 am
I will never think of cotton candy the same way again.

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on Feb. 24 2012 at 3:27 pm
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Dude I love it!! I hope you don't mind- I have a collection of my favorite poems and I'd love to add this one!! (Cited, of course :)

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on Jan. 21 2012 at 11:59 am
I love how you picked somthing as simple as cotton candy and used such powerful words that made cotton candy seem like some type of god!

on Jan. 13 2012 at 10:17 pm
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i loved this great way to put cotton candy into use!

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on Jan. 9 2012 at 5:59 pm
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Good poem! Evokes feelings like it should.

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on Dec. 18 2011 at 11:41 pm
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I like the twist in this poem. Although I'm wondering if it's a bit melodramatic? Anyway, great poem :)

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Very good, i doubt many people look at it like that, a whole new perspective and a good one. Thank you


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on Nov. 26 2011 at 8:47 pm
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