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Cotton Candy MAG

October 25, 2008
By freedomfighter97 BRONZE, Lake Ann, Michigan
freedomfighter97 BRONZE, Lake Ann, Michigan
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puffs of sweet fiberglass
dissolve into pink crystals
on the pinnacle of my tongue.

they fall like tickled icicles
puncturing the walls
of my abdomen.

still I consume
the addicting substance,
permitting my body
to slowly commit suicide.



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on Aug. 30 2011 at 9:45 am
nathanielmcd BRONZE, Punta Gorda, Florida
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Hey, um are you actually talking about cotton candy? or are you just talking about fiberglass? I honesly did not even know that people even ate fiberglass.

on Aug. 16 2011 at 5:06 pm
Lola_Black GOLD, Harrison, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"I've always been famous. It's just everybody's just now finding out." --Lady Gaga

Sweet! I love how you turned cotton candy into a metaphor for drugs (fiber glass does look like cotton candy, doesn't it?) Brilliantly writen! (and if you don't mind, please read some of my poems! Thanks)

on Aug. 8 2011 at 7:34 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Interesting take on cotton candy, cool poem.

Can someone look at my attempts at poetry ("the violinist" and "for what have all these people died",) rate, and comment, please. I need the feedback.


on Aug. 8 2011 at 4:36 pm
EnigmaticBeing PLATINUM, Santa Barbara, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Be careful what you set your heart upon - for it will surely be yours.'
James A. Baldwin

I love how you turned cotton candy into a metaphor. This poem was beautifully executed. Well done.

i<3m said...
on Aug. 8 2011 at 4:32 pm
tat drug comment was stupied and the poem was nice butt i was a little confuesd

DeepCee SILVER said...
on Aug. 8 2011 at 1:57 pm
DeepCee SILVER, Bloomington, Indiana
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this is a beautiful poem.

on Aug. 8 2011 at 11:39 am
Vacilator BRONZE, Merritt Island, Florida
4 articles 2 photos 96 comments

Favorite Quote:
No cup of tea is large enough, or book long enough, to suit me.
-C.S. Lewis

I second this comment.  This is an awesome poem!

on Aug. 8 2011 at 9:55 am
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Great job! Please comment on mine! and I will comment on yours!Comment on mine guys!!!!!!!

on Jul. 29 2011 at 8:44 pm
peacedream3r SILVER, Middletown, Pennsylvania
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This poem is really deep and feels like its talking about a lot more than cotton candy! I love how discriptive it is!

on Jul. 17 2011 at 9:33 pm
TheLemonadeCrusade SILVER, Huntersville, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Imagination is more important than knowledge. For knowledge is limited to all we now know and understand, while imagination embraces the whole world, and all there ever will be to know and understand"

i like how it goes so in depth and inludes so much detail for something simple as cotton candy(:

on Jul. 17 2011 at 5:28 pm
Laura_Oliver GOLD, Manchester, Connecticut
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Somebody likes cotton candy! (^_^)

If you have time, check out my other free verse poem, "True Colors", and leave feedback!


on Jun. 25 2011 at 6:01 pm
introducingshelby GOLD, San Diego, California
15 articles 1 photo 139 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People change so you can learn to let go, things go wrong so you can appreciate them when they go right, and things fall apart so better things can fall together."
-Marilyn Monroe

Mm, I can see why this is top rated..

renni SILVER said...
on Jun. 25 2011 at 12:00 pm
renni SILVER, Crete, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Sometimes, that girl who seems so strong, who never lets what people say bother her, who smiles and laughs with her friends all the time, is really the girl who, deep down, is falling to pieces.

great job :D loved it

RyanAD GOLD said...
on Jun. 3 2011 at 8:58 pm
RyanAD GOLD, Grandville, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Any one who ever gave his best, never regretted it."

great job! although its not long i was guessing what it meant untill the last stanza.

on Jun. 3 2011 at 5:43 pm
Everlasting-Poet SILVER, Jacksonville, North Carolina
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it was really good at first i actually thought you was talking about cotton candy but good poem i loved it

on Jun. 3 2011 at 1:19 pm
writingmagic26 BRONZE, Eureka, Missouri
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really discriptive!  I love your use of adjectives!!

on Jun. 3 2011 at 7:54 am
K.M.S.Shear BRONZE, Cherokee, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"Some people think writing is a waist of their time. For me it’s a way to draw an image of myself through the painting of words."

well done

 


on Jun. 3 2011 at 7:13 am
myLovelyFather GOLD, Grand Rapids, Michigan
17 articles 0 photos 55 comments

Favorite Quote:
And that's the thing about the future. It's unknown, unknowable, but before you know it, you're there.

Ha! Cotton candy-ish. I like that. This poem  is schweeeeeeeeet!

on May. 12 2011 at 4:12 pm
Music-Tricks-Love SILVER, New York, New York
7 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your braver than you believe, stronger than you seem, and smarter than you think.

This was a wonderful peice. I love the way that you made it all sound so peaceful and cotton candy-ish

on May. 12 2011 at 12:27 pm
Luv this website for teens i can look up any poetry


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