Remembering | Teen Ink


May 24, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

The Sun smiles and tells a story
that no one has heard before,
but it doesn't have to be hidden,
or forgotten anymore.

The sea, wind and sky
were together as a whole.
The mountains, plains and deserts
were all part of the same soul.

The fire, rain and snow
came with all their power.
The lightning and the thunder
became frozen before the hour.

The trees, bushes and grasses
All held their mighty stance.
The birds, flies and fishes
were all given the chance.

But the Earth was meant to change,
so the Sun had to too.
And she forgot all she'd seen
And all she had been through.

But when the wind blows just right,
and when the waves calm in the sea,
The Sun remembers the beauty
and she shares her memory.

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on Aug. 17 2009 at 1:44 am
Pink_Butterfly, FC, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Never say there is nothing beautiful in the world anymore. There is always something to make wonder in the shape of a tree, the trembling of a leaf."
- Albert Schweitzer.

Very Nice.

Lostinbooks said...
on Aug. 17 2009 at 12:33 am
Lostinbooks, Arcadia, California
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Wow I totally agree with Zero_Kiryu on this one! It sounds like it belongs in a song- very vivid with smooth rhythm. Nice work!

on Aug. 16 2009 at 11:35 pm
Electricity PLATINUM, Bradenton, Florida
30 articles 0 photos 271 comments
This is deep... I love your writing! You seem to have talent, and you should portray it more on teenink. You seem to be very, very popular! Great job, I'd love more!

on Aug. 15 2009 at 2:08 am
cutietothemax58 SILVER, Scottdale, Pennsylvania
7 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass. ~Anton Chekhov

There's nothing to writing. All you do is sit down at a typewriter and open a vein. ~Walter Wellesley "Red" Smith

hey Thanks for commenting my poem Affliction. You're a pretty good writer yourself. Your poetry flows nicely and you have such a good use of imagery. Great job.

on Aug. 14 2009 at 5:14 pm
Teenqueen BRONZE, Pune, Other
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments
hi...gud job..i liked ur poem..u did an awesome job. :)

n thnx 4 commenting on my poem..reeli appreciate it.

mandygale77 said...
on Aug. 14 2009 at 3:25 pm
That was really beautiful, I loved the end. Great poem! :)

Joanna said...
on Aug. 13 2009 at 10:58 pm
Joanna, St. Catharines, Other
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I just wanted to thank-you for commenting on my work. It means so much to me.

I really like this poem. Nature is just so beautiful and delicate, yet so tenacious. (Tenacious is a good word :D) I think you captured this perfectly in your poem. Wonderfully done, my friend.

Roisin GOLD said...
on Aug. 10 2009 at 1:19 am
Roisin GOLD, Peabody, Massachusetts
10 articles 5 photos 28 comments
Thankyou for your comment on mypoem! :)

This is a great poem!!!! You have amazing writing skills. Keep writing, your an inspration. :D

tor10jax GOLD said...
on Aug. 9 2009 at 4:00 am
tor10jax GOLD, Livingston, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 143 comments
Wow. I can't believe I got comments from a celebrity. :D

This poem is amazing. I like how your rhyming doesn't force you poem in a direction. I do that by accident sometimes. Good job!

on Aug. 8 2009 at 3:11 am
katiemiladie GOLD, Glendale, California
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Thank you so much for your amazingly sweet comments on my stories! I am honored that you asked me to read some of your material! This poem is amazing and clean cut. It's stunning. If you want some more private comments and collaboration from me just leave another comment on one of my stories and I can give you my email adress. Thanks again!

on Aug. 8 2009 at 2:05 am
Madison Craypo SILVER, Liberty Lake, Washington
9 articles 4 photos 5 comments
WOW. That was... shocking. The words just painted the picture so clearly in my mind. You have talent! :D

on Aug. 8 2009 at 2:03 am
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
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Zero_K DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 8 2009 at 1:10 am
Zero_K DIAMOND, Moosic, Pennsylvania
83 articles 0 photos 435 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's no fun if you're not insane, otherwise you grow up to be an accountant." -Moi

I love this poem. It's lyrical almost, like in those fantasies like The Lord of the Rings. I can imagine Thorrin Oakenshield singing this song. Thanks for all your comments. I like the idea of giving people 'space' to imagine, I never thought of it that way before. I love your writing.


Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Aug. 7 2009 at 11:06 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

this was absolutely beautiful! i loved it! keep writing!

April. BRONZE said...
on Aug. 7 2009 at 8:15 pm
April. BRONZE, Lake Charles, Louisiana
2 articles 1 photo 6 comments
I really love this. I love reading what you write. I enjoy knowing we think alike. :] Very, very good job.

amyxu said...
on Aug. 7 2009 at 7:05 pm
This is a dazzling work of art. I love the way you choose a meter and a rhyme scheme and stick with it. That's becoming a lost art nowadays. I also like the figurative and lyrical wording. Nice job :)

on Aug. 7 2009 at 5:07 pm
Lucy Scanlon BRONZE, Marietta, Pennsylvania
2 articles 0 photos 1 comment
This is really a great poem. I loved it. Thank you for the feedback on my poem "Dream".

on Aug. 7 2009 at 3:22 pm
tigeress3 PLATINUM, Dayton, Ohio
35 articles 0 photos 78 comments
Your rhyme scheme is perfect and the topic of the poem is unique and beautiful. Brava!

on Aug. 7 2009 at 3:07 pm
MadisonC. SILVER, Montgomery Village, Maryland
6 articles 7 photos 2 comments
This is an awesome piece of work. You have a great talent that you should NEVER give up on! Keep up the great work!

on Aug. 7 2009 at 11:56 am
Mandiella DIAMOND, Plaistow, New Hampshire
73 articles 58 photos 349 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't waste time. Start procrastinating now.

Awesome poem! Keep writing!