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Remembering

May 24, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."


The Sun smiles and tells a story
that no one has heard before,
but it doesn't have to be hidden,
or forgotten anymore.

The sea, wind and sky
were together as a whole.
The mountains, plains and deserts
were all part of the same soul.

The fire, rain and snow
came with all their power.
The lightning and the thunder
became frozen before the hour.

The trees, bushes and grasses
All held their mighty stance.
The birds, flies and fishes
were all given the chance.

But the Earth was meant to change,
so the Sun had to too.
And she forgot all she'd seen
And all she had been through.

But when the wind blows just right,
and when the waves calm in the sea,
The Sun remembers the beauty
and she shares her memory.


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on Aug. 7 2009 at 3:34 am
RheaD.Ravenfinger BRONZE, Juneau, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
1 Corinthians 13:4-8

Thanks for commenting on my Dream Girl's Prayer. I really like this poem. It's beautiful and magical. If something that I read or watch enchants me, which what yours did, that is a VERY good sign. I loved it. It's beautiful, graceful, peaceful, beautiful, and you have a talent for poetry.

on Aug. 6 2009 at 8:54 pm
SmileyRiley PLATINUM, Tremont, Illinois
30 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You can be a victor without having victims and you can stand tall without standing on someone"

i really love it! its unique and different from anything ive ever read! great job and thanks for the comment!

on Aug. 5 2009 at 10:27 pm
pinksage33 BRONZE, Woodstock, New York
4 articles 1 photo 211 comments
I love the flow of this!!! keep up the good work.

on Aug. 5 2009 at 9:33 pm
bookhugger14 SILVER, Delta, Ohio
7 articles 1 photo 32 comments
oh and ps - please feel free to comment on my poetry too! i would love such an expert poet's opinion! thank you! ;)

on Aug. 5 2009 at 9:32 pm
bookhugger14 SILVER, Delta, Ohio
7 articles 1 photo 32 comments
omg this is AHmazing! please keep writing poetry! the rhyming scheme was excellent and the figurative language... wOw! good work :)

on Aug. 5 2009 at 7:47 pm
KaylaMariebabie SILVER, Marshalltown, Iowa
5 articles 2 photos 9 comments
this was awesome =)

Schubster said...
on Aug. 5 2009 at 4:24 pm
this was my favorite work of yours. Awesome job!

on Aug. 5 2009 at 3:41 pm
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

Seems like a lot of people have commented, but I just want to say that that was such a great poem! You really have a talent for writing poems!!! Keep wiritng, you'll probally be famous some day!! 5 stars!

on Aug. 5 2009 at 4:29 am
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
79 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

Wow! I love the way this poem flows, you did such a great job on the uniformity of the syllables and the rhyme scheme was perfect. My favorite part are the last two lines. Your personification is impeccable, this is REALLY a great piece! Keep it up! And thanks so much for the comment on "Love, Your Big Sis" I hope you will come check out some of my other work. Thanks again, and wonderful job!

on Aug. 5 2009 at 4:23 am
ultrabookworm BRONZE, Equestria, Kentucky
2 articles 0 photos 69 comments
I really love this poem!! Though the rhyming style is classic, your subject and the way the words work together is so original. Thanks for commenting on my poem "Regrets," by the way ;).

on Aug. 4 2009 at 11:00 pm
FlamableFyre DIAMOND, Spartanburg, South Carolina
93 articles 9 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't have ambitions or desires.
Being a poet isn't my ambition,
it's my way of being alone.
~ Fernando Pessoa ~

Absolutely beautiful. I loved it, it was fantastic. hey it's wildheart, and you commented on one of my poems. thanks, and i'm serious this is a work of art. i wish sooooooo much that i'd thought of it. it's amazing!!!!!! :):):):)

on Aug. 4 2009 at 10:31 pm
Dream-Junkie SILVER, Wahiawa, Hawaii
8 articles 5 photos 6 comments
This has be the greatest thing I've read in a long time. If definitely wins itself a spot in the book of greatest poems

on Aug. 4 2009 at 7:36 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

I really love this piece. Its so beautiful how you wrote about nature. Good job! Keep up the good work!

on Aug. 4 2009 at 5:39 pm
jay_jayy:D GOLD, Trussville, Alabama
14 articles 0 photos 30 comments
This is a beautiful poem. It makes me think about all the pretty places I've seen, and the way you've described it all is magical. Keep writing and thank you for the comment on my work :D

on Aug. 3 2009 at 7:21 pm
kiwi12 PLATINUM, Austin, Texas
28 articles 10 photos 365 comments
My favorite stanza is the last. Very pretty poem. Thanks for commenting on mine, too! Hope you read my other work for I will surely read yours.

on Aug. 1 2009 at 4:58 am
xlacrossex22 GOLD, Glenshaw, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I laugh, I love, I hope, I try, I hurt, I need, I fear, I cry. And I know you do the same things too, So we're really not that different, me and you.” ~Colin Raye~

Wow. This poem is great. The second stanza is definately my favorite. I really enjoyed reading this piece, and hope that you write more like it in the future. By the way, thanks for the feedback on "My People". You are truly an amazing writer yourself.


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