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Remembering

May 24, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."


The Sun smiles and tells a story
that no one has heard before,
but it doesn't have to be hidden,
or forgotten anymore.

The sea, wind and sky
were together as a whole.
The mountains, plains and deserts
were all part of the same soul.

The fire, rain and snow
came with all their power.
The lightning and the thunder
became frozen before the hour.

The trees, bushes and grasses
All held their mighty stance.
The birds, flies and fishes
were all given the chance.

But the Earth was meant to change,
so the Sun had to too.
And she forgot all she'd seen
And all she had been through.

But when the wind blows just right,
and when the waves calm in the sea,
The Sun remembers the beauty
and she shares her memory.


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on Sep. 17 2009 at 1:49 am
Olivia93 SILVER, Huntington Beach, California
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amazing! great job with the personification and imagery, it really brought the poem to life and engaged the reader :) thank you for commenting on my work, and i would love to hear more from you!

on Sep. 12 2009 at 9:20 pm
anotherromanctic PLATINUM, Wilmington, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"If it's not okay, then it's not over." - Anonymous

beautiful. (:

on Sep. 12 2009 at 7:56 pm
amusedsimpleton BRONZE, Winnemucca, Nevada
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This is so good! It paints a really beautiful picture in my mind. I can't wait to read the rest of your pieces. :D

on Sep. 7 2009 at 2:38 pm
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's a mountain on a beach"-Unknown
"Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It's remarkable how often those two traits coincide."-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

I love this too, I love your writing, it's truly amazing and you manage to capture atleast half the beauty of nature that most of us can't! Incredible.

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on Sep. 6 2009 at 5:09 pm
Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
This is certainly one of my favorites: "I will become even more undignified than this, and I will be humiliated in my own eyes." -2 Samuel 6:22

Um... I really don't know what to say. This was amazing. It paints a beautiful picture.... I wish I could say more but I'm pretty much in awe. Keep writing.

God bless,

...,

on Sep. 2 2009 at 4:43 pm
shelby_kat DIAMOND, Warren, Ohio
72 articles 3 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can sum up everything I've learned about life in three words; it goes on." -Robert Frost

**** ut sooo good! :D i saw that u read that one poem i wrote...well compared to u i ***** hahaha i gotta work on that, aannnyywayyy, YOUR AWESOME!!! KEEP ON WRITING! :D

on Aug. 29 2009 at 4:20 pm
kaseyparks PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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this is amazing!

on Aug. 27 2009 at 9:11 pm
forever_misguided GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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wow, thats amazing. ur very talented at making people picture exactly what you write. i would love it if i got some of your feedback on some of my contributions....

on Aug. 27 2009 at 3:17 am
Raid2bcool GOLD, Visalia, California
16 articles 2 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People may not be able to get to the top because of who they are.... but they ARE able to do what IS at the top."

omigoodness... this is so amazing... i love it =D this poem is so gorgeous.... keep up the awesome work

on Aug. 26 2009 at 8:02 pm
PinkPrincess GOLD, Wellington, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
I think therefore I am

this is a really remarkable poem. you have a great gift keep using it, good job!

on Aug. 25 2009 at 10:54 pm
Sunshine247 BRONZE, La Center, Washington
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Oh my goodness, I love it!!! :D It's beautiful!!! :D

on Aug. 25 2009 at 10:35 pm
Bookwormwriter SILVER, Centerville, Ohio
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i love it! the detail is amazing, i love the last stanza! you're a great writer! Keep writing

on Aug. 21 2009 at 3:55 am
kristent BRONZE, Culdesac, Idaho
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o my gosh this one's even better!!

on Aug. 20 2009 at 5:09 pm
ThereIsAlwaysHope GOLD, Belfast, Other
19 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
'Miles to go before I sleep'
- Robert Frost

this is amazing. absolutely amazing. exceptional writing. keep it up. (:

on Aug. 20 2009 at 12:52 am
lightbearer GOLD, North Bloomfield, Ohio
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AMAZING! i really like your style. wishing i could write something like that. check out some of my pieces.

on Aug. 19 2009 at 1:45 am
Dreamer123 SILVER, Oviedo, Florida
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this is incredible i love the way you described it its full of nature and yet mixed with life. i love it this is my fave. god bless you.

on Aug. 18 2009 at 4:33 pm
delizabethl PLATINUM, Linesville, Pennsylvania
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Beautiful. Beautiful and rhythmic.

on Aug. 17 2009 at 9:42 pm
kidlet612 PLATINUM, Sterling Heights, Michigan
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This is beautiful.so much is said, in so few words. overpowering, its phenominal

on Aug. 17 2009 at 5:48 pm
Ally-Baby BRONZE, Port Angeles, Washington
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I wanted to thank you for commenting my poem, it's a really important piece to me so thanks. And I'd also like to say that you're poem is beautiful and you did a great job.

on Aug. 17 2009 at 11:53 am
Winter-Razorblade BRONZE, Halifax, Other
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Wow... This is so beautiful =) Thanks for commenting on my poem! xoxox

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