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Remembering

May 24, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."


The Sun smiles and tells a story
that no one has heard before,
but it doesn't have to be hidden,
or forgotten anymore.

The sea, wind and sky
were together as a whole.
The mountains, plains and deserts
were all part of the same soul.

The fire, rain and snow
came with all their power.
The lightning and the thunder
became frozen before the hour.

The trees, bushes and grasses
All held their mighty stance.
The birds, flies and fishes
were all given the chance.

But the Earth was meant to change,
so the Sun had to too.
And she forgot all she'd seen
And all she had been through.

But when the wind blows just right,
and when the waves calm in the sea,
The Sun remembers the beauty
and she shares her memory.


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Bobbi PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 14 2010 at 8:37 pm
Bobbi PLATINUM, Terry, Mississippi
39 articles 1 photo 46 comments
WOW that is just beautiful. i love the rhyme scheme and imagery with in it... AMAZING!!

on Feb. 14 2010 at 7:37 pm
Elizabeth-Martin PLATINUM, Georgetown, Massachusetts
21 articles 1 photo 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives me a reason to cry, I'll show life that I have 1000 reasons to smile.

wow, that was so amazing! i loved it so much! and thankyou for commenting on my poem "Don't Anymore". =)

on Jan. 23 2010 at 4:02 pm
VampiericRain GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
12 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
Would you like a side of epic with that fail?

Wow. I really like how you had every other line rhyming. I stink at it.

SydLeigh GOLD said...
on Jan. 15 2010 at 2:49 pm
SydLeigh GOLD, Clermont, Florida
15 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is what happens to you while you're busy making other plans.

Hey!! I'm sorry It took so long to comment.

This Is my FAVORITE poem out of the ones you have written already.

Keep writing!!!

I just wanted to say that I am so thankful that you commented on My Poem.

It ment alot to me because your the only one who has to far and you had such nice things to say.

so thank you.

=)

on Jan. 11 2010 at 11:43 am
vickilovesu0227 SILVER, Bellefonte, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is giving someone the power to break your heart, but trusting them not to."

This poem is amazing. You have so much talent. Stick with it!

LIKEwhoaa GOLD said...
on Dec. 8 2009 at 8:15 pm
LIKEwhoaa GOLD, Carrollton, Texas
13 articles 0 photos 126 comments

Favorite Quote:
The important thing is this: To be able at any moment to sacrifice what we are for what we could become.
-Charles DuBois

i like this :) its cute how everything is so strong and my favorite line is "The trees, bushes and grasses all held their mighty stance."

Because ive never ever thought of bushes as mighty before :)

GREAT GREAT GREAT job

<3

on Nov. 28 2009 at 5:02 pm
lovebegins PLATINUM, Las Vegas, Nevada
23 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons make iced tea because you make your own paths in life not fallowing behind others, true love never dies, don't give up on your dreams, if you shoot for the moon and miss don't worry because you'll land among the stars.

this really good and i enjoyed itt you have a talent at writing stick to it.

on Nov. 28 2009 at 8:33 am
munkyman95 GOLD, Medway, Other
18 articles 1 photo 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
I will become, what I know I am' Michael Jordan

very nicee liked the rhyme and rhythm, and personification of sun was really intresting :)

on Nov. 8 2009 at 7:33 pm
cheyenneduhon PLATINUM, Lumberton, Texas
31 articles 0 photos 144 comments
I love this!!

Angelalala said...
on Nov. 8 2009 at 2:11 pm
Angelalala, Gilbert, Arizona
0 articles 4 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
I won't be a rock star. I will be a legend.
-Freddie Mercury

I really really like this. It reminds of mythology type stuff. Nicely done :-]

Abbyy GOLD said...
on Oct. 31 2009 at 9:02 am
Abbyy GOLD, Shanghai, Other
12 articles 1 photo 22 comments
Thanks for commenting! I really like how you rhymed the 2nd and 4th lines of each stanza. It flows really well that way :)

on Oct. 28 2009 at 6:58 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Thanx for commenting on my poem:) Your comments are always so pleasant n nice to read:) Your poems are great too;)

on Oct. 27 2009 at 5:33 pm
hannahbee7 DIAMOND, Boca Raton, Florida
67 articles 1 photo 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You know you’re a writer if your friend tells you a heartbreaking story and your first reaction is – wow, that would make an incredible plot for a novel. You know you’re a smart writer if you manage to keep that reaction to yourself."

Woah I love this you're very talented

Tybalt SILVER said...
on Oct. 25 2009 at 2:51 pm
Tybalt SILVER, Coral Springs, Florida
5 articles 0 photos 32 comments
That really nice. I can tell you like nature. By the way, thank you for your feedback. 5 stars!

iThink BRONZE said...
on Oct. 9 2009 at 4:49 pm
iThink BRONZE, Fayetteville, Arkansas
4 articles 0 photos 5 comments
Thanks for the feedback - albeit a while back. This is really good! I like the personification of the elements and it sounds kinda like a fairy tale/myth. It's cool.

Luminosa said...
on Oct. 4 2009 at 3:00 pm
I absolutely adore it! I've never read the elements personified all at once before. Lovely, keep writing. P.S Thank you for my feedback on 'Caged' as well =]

on Oct. 4 2009 at 10:37 am
icguf615 BRONZE, Mission Viejo, California
4 articles 0 photos 35 comments
that is really good it has a nice ring i like the message

on Oct. 2 2009 at 9:27 pm
Sealboy12 SILVER, South Bound Brook, New Jersey
5 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you're tired your wrong"-From my high school band director

This was so awesome! And your comment ment a lot. Thanks! The poem was beautiful. Your way of making the elements seem animate was awesome. Great job.

on Oct. 2 2009 at 8:57 pm
MarilynMonroe BRONZE, Fayetteville, Arkansas
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments
This is really good! It seemed to me very fable-ish like the stories of how the opossum go tits tale or why the spider spins its web. Thank you also for what you said about one of my poems!

E.Lee GOLD said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 10:18 am
E.Lee GOLD, Akron, Ohio
15 articles 0 photos 168 comments
this is really good! :D i like it


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