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Guilty Stains

July 15, 2010
By MakenaB_mjbc99 BRONZE, Brookline, Massachusetts
MakenaB_mjbc99 BRONZE, Brookline, Massachusetts
4 articles 1 photo 31 comments

Young Brown dashed to the crime scene as soon as he was called. He got to Café 5, the crime scene, and found the police gathered around the victim. Together with them was the famous Vancouver detective, Walter M. Morris, renowned not only for his crime solving capability but also for his great skill at investigating the private life of specific people. Morris was never found without his old, wooden smoking pipe.
Detective Anthony Brown found that the cold pale body on the floor was property of Thomas Raw, Café 5’s owner. Anthony crouched down to take a closer look at the body. All of a sudden, an ox strong grip took hold of Brown’s shoulder. The young man jumped up and found Morris an inch away of his eyes. He shook off a deep shiver rising up his spine. They greeted each other and went over to a corner to discuss the case.
The theory was as followed: one Tuesday night, Mr. Raw stayed up late working at his shop, cleaning the floor. Someone had surprised him from behind with the gift of a broken neck. His wife got worried and headed off to her love’s store where she found him sleeping on the ground, never to get up again.
Brown decided to go step by step. First, he would inspect the shop and interrogate his main suspect, Mrs. Raw. He got a sizzled cup of coffee and begun his tasks. He examined his crime scene, and was left open mouthed. Not even a clue of the murderer’s entrance. Perhaps, he would have more luck with Mrs. Raw.

As the detective got to the house he noticed a blood stain on the door handle. He got out a slick and shinny gun and hid it close, just in case. He rang the bell a few seconds. After a moment, a lady came out.
Her hair was short and made her look like a cherry with emerald eyes and ruby threads. She was dressed up like if she was going somewhere. The questions had begun as soon as possible.
Q: Did you love your husband?
A: Yes. The true question is … did he love me?
Q: What does that mean?
A: We had a small quarrel a few days ago at dinner, around two I think. He cut my hand with a sharp knife. Its blade did not cut deep into me. Then, I ran out to a hotel. I think he sent to look for me. A man started out for me. There, I lost a copy of Café 5 keys. Luckily, I have another.
Brown realized she was not the one. Mrs. Raw gave him a bill she had found. It was dirty. A dusty black smudge crawled over it. Brown put it safely into an evidence bag.

Brown’s eyes were back on the body. He looked at the injury and found the same black dusty smudge. Now, a smile was on every corner of his mouth. You could see his teeth plucked out. His eyes lit up like a match. He was then invited by Walter to a drink at a bar.
After some drinks, Walter headed off to the men’s toilet and left Anthony his crooked pipe. Anthony held it for him with pleasure. When Morris was back, Brown handed him his pipe. As he took his hand away he noticed a black dusty stain. Anthony’s eyes glowed. Morris made a frown when he understood what happened. Brown rushed out the bar and dashed into Café 5.
Anthony slightly opened the shop door and got near the body. He glared at the black dust on the neck of Mr. Raw. “Morris,” Brown whispered. He had been with the murderer all along! His new theory was that Raw had hired Morris to spy on his wife. He looked for her and got a copy of the shop keys. When the detective was not paid, he got into the shop and killed Raw!
All of the sudden a black shape came out of the dark with thunderous footsteps.
“You were looking for me?”

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This article has 495 comments.

grider said...
on Mar. 21 2011 at 12:29 pm
Excellent thriller! The title gets the point!

ferleb said...
on Mar. 14 2011 at 12:53 pm
Ok! As stories go both "Guilty Stains" and "Due Tomorrow" are great. regarding the playlists on youtube my favourite one is "Sketches Playlist"

miki said...
on Mar. 14 2011 at 12:51 pm
This thriller is :D! Regarding the playlists on youtube my choice is "Science by Makena Joy Binker-Cosen Productions". However my sister enjoyed more the playlist "Stories by Makena Joy Binker-Cosen Productions" more

Gigi said...
on Mar. 14 2011 at 12:48 pm
Agree with Gomes but prefer "Educational videos by Makena Joy Binker-Cosen Productions".

GOMES said...
on Mar. 14 2011 at 12:46 pm
Excelletn thriller! Just went through your playlists on youtube, good idea to group topics. Form me "Humor by Makena Joy Binker-Cosen Productions" is the best.

Carel said...
on Mar. 3 2011 at 2:07 pm
Perfect for a suspense movie! Loved it!

facundo said...
on Feb. 23 2011 at 12:29 pm
!!!!!!! :D GREAT :D !!!!!!!!!!!!!

Simpi said...
on Feb. 23 2011 at 12:28 pm
Hi "mjbc99" I liked both "Guilty Stains" & "Due Tomorrow" different angles, same touch of humor, just as in your videos! Big Hug!

JaiJai said...
on Feb. 23 2011 at 12:26 pm
Dear "mjbc99", very entertaining thriller. I also enjoyed your videos on "Makyschannel" very much"Humble Bee", "Thanks to Science", "Science is the answer" & "Science is the Key to the Answer" defiently show in 90 seconds the different angles of SCIENCE, "Bricks of Knowledge" absolutely conveys the message, "Greek Legacy" is fun and educational and "Play Back" has an elegant, clean and fresh sense of humor.

reyes said...
on Feb. 23 2011 at 12:23 pm
Excellent mystery :D !!!

on Feb. 9 2011 at 6:30 pm
MakenaB_mjbc99 BRONZE, Brookline, Massachusetts
4 articles 1 photo 31 comments
Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it!

on Feb. 5 2011 at 9:33 am
JelloAngel92 PLATINUM, Dundalk, Other
27 articles 18 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
You've got to have ink in the pen!

nice! nothing like a good mystery.. :O

melly said...
on Jan. 17 2011 at 6:55 am
Liked much, excellent work :D !

bbq124 said...
on Jan. 14 2011 at 7:29 am

nc ert said...
on Jan. 11 2011 at 9:28 am

maira said...
on Jan. 10 2011 at 9:19 am
Excellent piece!Congrats!

charly soyer said...
on Jan. 10 2011 at 8:08 am
that was good

yoni dep said...
on Jan. 9 2011 at 8:08 am

Emili said...
on Jan. 8 2011 at 6:21 pm
Well done kid!

stevie said...
on Jan. 8 2011 at 10:55 am
Wow! Just the thriller!