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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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shaquillle said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 11:43 am
i like your poem keep writing poems they are realy good.
 
Khris R. said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 11:38 am
you're doining a great job keep it up and you will be as good as me
 
Khris R. replied...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 11:39 am
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JOHNYILOVEYOUSOMUCH replied...
Jan. 16, 2010 at 2:50 am
OMG UR REALLY TALENTED LIKE REALLY WOW DATS REALLY GOOD :D KEEP IT UP
 
yolo95 said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 11:36 am
this is good keep up the good work
 
Khris R. replied...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 11:40 am
HEY YOLO WHATS UP
 
~Snickers~ said...
Dec. 9, 2009 at 1:16 pm
No words can discribe it. All i can say is Wow; and even that doesn't add to it
 
pearl♥ said...
Dec. 7, 2009 at 12:28 pm
great message O_ keep up the good work!!
 
Marlene C. said...
Dec. 6, 2009 at 7:20 pm
This poem really is amazing! I can totally relate! Great Job! I can't wait to hear more!!
 
ChloeAills said...
Dec. 5, 2009 at 11:37 pm
One Word: "Talent" (:
 
StarWolf said...
Dec. 5, 2009 at 11:26 pm
Your writing is inspiring. It birngs me places i idn't know i could go! Keep writing. THis piece is genius!!
 
Emely J. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 4, 2009 at 5:59 pm
Wow! This is AMAZING! You should really consider a career with writing! Who knows:You could became the next Maya Angelou! LOL!
 
Nicole B. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 3, 2009 at 10:44 pm
This is really superb. Your comparison between the examples of freedom and the imagery of being captured was very - well, for lack of a better word - poetic. I felt like it reached out and stroked my cheek.
 
Sayummi said...
Dec. 2, 2009 at 5:33 pm
amazing writing......i love it!! keep writing ur very good
 
Holmes said...
Dec. 2, 2009 at 1:20 pm
really really good! i like it
 
Grahmmy said...
Dec. 1, 2009 at 10:49 pm
This is great, but I'm saddened that I can never seem to see mine commented on...
 
adeladesp said...
Dec. 1, 2009 at 3:12 pm
I absolutely love this.
 
Ann_Hill789 said...
Nov. 27, 2009 at 9:52 pm
Simply amazing! Keep writing, you're really good.
 
BreBreezy said...
Nov. 27, 2009 at 3:18 pm
your poem is very awesome....you should keepwriting
 
Moonbeam13 said...
Nov. 27, 2009 at 1:23 pm
Awesome poem!
 
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