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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Mar. 29 2010 at 10:57 am
THATS WHY WE BE COMMENTING ON THIS. TO GET OUT COMMENTS OUT TO THE TEENINK WRITING WORLD. SO DON'T TELL ME TO KEEP THEM TO MYSELF. I'LL BE LETTING YOU KNOW WHAT MY COMMENTS ARE.

Ramzan SILVER said...
on Mar. 29 2010 at 9:56 am
Ramzan SILVER, Loveland, Ohio
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Wonderful poem. The end hints at more, and is just a little bit haunting. Great job!

on Mar. 28 2010 at 8:18 pm
Caroline Klidonas SILVER, York, Pennsylvania
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The ending is uncomfortable but gives the entire poem meaning and a reason for being written. I love how it all leads up to that. Nice work.

on Mar. 27 2010 at 9:59 pm
Shivanie BRONZE, Manhattan, New York
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Favorite Quote:
expect the unexpected

THIS IZ REALLY NICE LUV IT

keyoka SILVER said...
on Mar. 27 2010 at 7:55 pm
keyoka SILVER, Mckinney, Texas
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I saw a lot of meenie/random posts here...

I actually really liked the poem...alot. It's beautiful.

I thought it was written very well and the person that wrote it is very talented and should keep writing


on Mar. 26 2010 at 5:23 pm
deathismyfavoritewordbutmygreatestfear SILVER, Collinsville, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
Without you my life was like a starless night

nice. I used to ♥ runescape 2.....then I grew up.....(no offense) but I do like this poem. If you looks through the lines, you see the story behind it. People who dont c this, obviously don't have an iner persepective.

P.S. could you guys check out my stories and poems and everything. i dont have many things up, but id really like some comments so that I could improve. Thank you :)


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on Mar. 26 2010 at 10:53 am
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on Mar. 26 2010 at 10:51 am
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on Mar. 26 2010 at 10:50 am
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on Mar. 26 2010 at 10:48 am
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Luc Avilles said...
on Mar. 26 2010 at 10:48 am
Hey Marlone! It's me Luc, lol at history class next period, and oh, this article sucks

on Mar. 26 2010 at 10:46 am
thats word to mah red flag

on Mar. 25 2010 at 4:18 pm
xxificouldfallxx PLATINUM, Southampton, Pennsylvania
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oh my this is..eery. but good.

on Mar. 25 2010 at 12:09 pm
I thought the peom was not good at all. It was very whiny and almost seemed like he was attacking his dad.

Just Alex said...
on Mar. 25 2010 at 12:08 pm
This poem was depressing and i felt pretty bad.

on Mar. 25 2010 at 12:02 pm
Please keep your comments to yourself. Thank you.

McBillJones3 said...
on Mar. 25 2010 at 11:58 am
This poem was depressing

Mizgusie said...
on Mar. 25 2010 at 11:52 am
I like the poem. I think that you should focus on capitilization more often.

on Mar. 25 2010 at 11:49 am
I love runescape, but I love this poem more.