Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

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So I read this a few times, and then I forgot about it for awhile. In that time I worked on a sketch of a dragon. The dragon was thin, and the bone showed through the scales, along with that, he was wingless. I drew a collar around his neck, and a chain that had been tied around a large stone; as it was connected to the core of the planet. The last I saw of the dragon was his eyes, staring up at the only sky he'd ever see. After about another month, I re read the poem. The last part of the poem struck me as something that could have happened to the dragon, and being the wimp I was, I started crying.

on Jun. 16 2015 at 9:41 pm
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I'm re-reading the last two lines, over and over again, trying to decided whether it is a good thing or a bad thing? I'm not sure... This is a fantastic poem that I read often - Great job! It holds so much in so few words! This is talent.

on Jun. 11 2015 at 12:58 pm
I wish I had a father :)

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would anybody be willing to look at one of my submissions It's my first spoken word piece and I would like as much feedback as possible. Thanks!

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I comment on this piece maybe a year ago and it is still number one in the most discussed. That's a true sign of a good poem. Looking forward to reading more of your work Carl H

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Wow! This poem paints such a perfect picture of childhood!

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love this poem!

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There is a lot of symbolism in this piece. Really great work, Keep it up!

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Go check out mine!

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on May. 12 2015 at 3:17 pm
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i have a native American side to me so when i feel things deeply n strong i get empathy chills idk how to explain it just that this poem was heart touching

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