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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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fall_from_grace said...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 10:13 pm:
This is sooooo good! I want to read more!!!!!
 
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fall_from_grace said...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 10:06 pm:
You are remarkable. I really adore this poem. It's complex and figurative enough to make you reread it, but somehow communicative enough to express pure feeling.
 
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Ankit 0. said...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 2:48 am:
Man is born free but is in chains everywhere said Rosseau.
Your poem is right.
 
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life_of_a_leaf said...
Dec. 21, 2009 at 8:07 pm:
Very interesting....good use of figurative language.
 
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blondbunny1018 said...
Dec. 19, 2009 at 9:54 pm:
This is amazing. You;re really talented. It makes me sad, and I'm not sure why.
Its very good :]
 
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Holmes said...
Dec. 17, 2009 at 9:51 am:
I'd be interested to find out what you think of some of my work if you would.
 
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Holmes said...
Dec. 17, 2009 at 9:49 am:
I really like this poem. I've read it many times and it just keeps giving me an awesome feeling. That's a great mind you have there.
 
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Greenlamp said...
Dec. 16, 2009 at 3:35 pm:
it is wierd!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
pearl♥ replied...
Dec. 17, 2009 at 2:53 pm :
not weird...just different in a weird way lol!
 
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something said...
Dec. 16, 2009 at 3:15 pm:
?!cheese!?
 
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NewDreamer said...
Dec. 15, 2009 at 6:37 pm:
Wonderfully done. Loved it.
 
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M.A.C. said...
Dec. 15, 2009 at 4:49 pm:
amazing. write more.
 
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kristinas-writtings said...
Dec. 15, 2009 at 11:01 am:
I love this story. you have done an amazing job. keep writting please. words can't even begin to descirbe how good this is.
 
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StevImanary said...
Dec. 14, 2009 at 1:12 pm:
Your an amazing writer! That was awsome!
 
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vpitts3200 said...
Dec. 14, 2009 at 8:15 am:
this poem is very very good it reads as though you put lots of time and thought into it. Good job keep it up
 
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unicornlover said...
Dec. 14, 2009 at 7:06 am:
omg :) its amazing.
 
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Aubrey B. said...
Dec. 12, 2009 at 8:00 pm:
pure, thoughfull. keep up the good work, its amazing!
 
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lolsmileyface(= said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 7:13 pm:
l;oooooove this poem
im sorry can i ask but its bin like 3 mouths since i rote my poems and they havent bin aproved yet how long it took your poems to be approved
 
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DAIMON said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 5:59 pm:
There has been Romeo and Juliet...Edward and Bella...I give Darian and Clara in...
"RAZED EXPECTATIONS"
Wisps of smoke danced into the wintry air from my lips, creating ornate designs that could never be replicated. I carefully tilted the corners of my lips into a smile that I meant to be wry. Of course, it's difficult to articulate emotions that I can't feel, but I find that irony is relatively simple to demonstrate. I inhaled the toxic vapors of the cigarette... (more »)
 
Jayla163 replied...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 12:54 am :
now that just made me fall head over heels for that. very intense. keep writing i want to read more.
 
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