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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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MarinaNicole said...
Jan. 5, 2010 at 10:12 pm:
I like the rhythm that the rhyming forms-- really nice. But I'm a little confused on the concept of the poem. That's just me though, the poem was awesome. Loved it.
 
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MatthewZ said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 8:03 pm:
nice! look at my poem too plz? http ://www.teenink .com /poetry/free_verse/article/156195/Airplanes/ rate and comment plz! thanks a million!
 
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Michael T. This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 6:30 pm:
This is really good I mean great! The title was a little awkword though
 
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Sr09 said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 3:11 pm:
Nice Poem ;) Very creative!
 
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kiwi12 said...
Jan. 3, 2010 at 3:37 pm:
It flows very well. I like it. It also reminds me a bit of Shel Silverstein.
swimming and flying.... all good stuff!
 
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CUTIC0314 said...
Dec. 30, 2009 at 10:37 pm:
i love this poem its so pretty.... whoever wrote this is a good poem writer
 
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jake2011 said...
Dec. 30, 2009 at 5:43 pm:
I thought the whole poem was excellent. Keep writing.
 
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averagejoe said...
Dec. 30, 2009 at 1:30 pm:
i liked how you started flying, it was really imaginative.
 
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forever casie said...
Dec. 30, 2009 at 12:15 pm:
I think this is very powerful great job.
 
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Ann_Hill789 said...
Dec. 29, 2009 at 8:49 pm:
i love it! i wish my stuff was HALF as good as this...
 
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sesababi said...
Dec. 29, 2009 at 3:04 pm:
Woooooow. this is absoultly amazing
 
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Ellie_Michelle said...
Dec. 27, 2009 at 8:19 pm:
That's really cool!
 
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LaughingAtBananas said...
Dec. 27, 2009 at 9:26 am:
WOW This is amazing! So inspiring
 
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fall_from_grace said...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 10:13 pm:
This is sooooo good! I want to read more!!!!!
 
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fall_from_grace said...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 10:06 pm:
You are remarkable. I really adore this poem. It's complex and figurative enough to make you reread it, but somehow communicative enough to express pure feeling.
 
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Ankit 0. said...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 2:48 am:
Man is born free but is in chains everywhere said Rosseau.
Your poem is right.
 
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life_of_a_leaf said...
Dec. 21, 2009 at 8:07 pm:
Very interesting....good use of figurative language.
 
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blondbunny1018 said...
Dec. 19, 2009 at 9:54 pm:
This is amazing. You;re really talented. It makes me sad, and I'm not sure why.
Its very good :]
 
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Holmes said...
Dec. 17, 2009 at 9:51 am:
I'd be interested to find out what you think of some of my work if you would.
 
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Holmes said...
Dec. 17, 2009 at 9:49 am:
I really like this poem. I've read it many times and it just keeps giving me an awesome feeling. That's a great mind you have there.
 
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