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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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*MAV* said...
Feb. 9, 2010 at 9:32 am
WOW i love it! check one of mine out:) http ://teenink .com /poetry/all/article/86463/The-Author/
 
abeatlesfan65 replied...
Feb. 9, 2010 at 8:16 pm
First, that depends on your point of view. Second, I read a few of your poems, and they're very good, but you're coming off as just a little arrogant.
 
Albert G. replied...
Feb. 10, 2010 at 7:27 am
oh there not bad at all though....maybe i came on a little to harsh so i apologize but are you a boy or girl
 
abeatlesfan65 replied...
Feb. 10, 2010 at 7:36 pm
Yeah, sorry... shouldn't have said anything. I was in kind of a bad mood. Usually I try to stick with the poem. I came off as harsh myself. Hopefully I didn't offend you too much...
 
Albert G. replied...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 8:52 am
its cool but are you a boy or girl
 
abeatlesfan65 replied...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 5:18 pm
son of my father
 
striker5 said...
Feb. 9, 2010 at 8:49 am
i can totally relate to that!! awesome poem, i love it! keep writing!!!!
 
ѕтоямιε.♥ said...
Feb. 8, 2010 at 3:52 pm
beautiful poem. i absolutely loved it. keep up the great work!! :)
 
nahb123 said...
Feb. 8, 2010 at 9:39 am
lol at the 'birdie' part :] but good.
 
roseann This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 4, 2010 at 5:26 pm
If I could describe the relationship with my mother and father... It would be almost exactly like this poem you wrote. It's cool that you could vent out your emotions on a piece off paper (or laptop) and share a piece of yourself to the world. Quana! (Thank you in Yu'pik)
 
Audrea15 said...
Feb. 4, 2010 at 4:45 pm
Takes a whole new prospective to growing up:) Great Work Keep Writing
 
DreamingWriter said...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 8:43 pm
love it... i can totally relate. This poem is amazing
 
Sara! said...
Feb. 2, 2010 at 8:42 am
wow! beautiful poem! keep on writing!
 
cheergal said...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 1:09 pm
I like how your words all flow togeather
 
skstorc said...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 12:44 pm
that says alot.
i can relate to that.
 
kasfhksajd said...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 11:52 am
it was intwresttubg
 
scbylvr said...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 9:36 am
i like this poem its kinda sad and boring
 
Your mom said...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 9:25 am
Awesome poem! I can clearly see the meaning within it. NICE! JIMBO OUT
 
LuLu95 said...
Jan. 30, 2010 at 8:21 pm
this is amazing- excellent job, i would be very honored if you would read some of my work
 
Lady! said...
Jan. 30, 2010 at 6:03 pm
I like it. At first the ending confused me but, when I read it again and looked deeper I understood it. Good job!
 
lostnhim said...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 7:18 pm
Good poem... I like the last part....
 
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