Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Apr. 2 2014 at 8:45 am
Jordan Meendering, Grandville, Michigan
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good poem, keep it up!

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on Apr. 2 2014 at 8:42 am
Daelyn, Grandville, Michigan
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This piece was amazing! I loved it! 

on Mar. 20 2014 at 9:59 pm
Juneza-Ann Borro SILVER, Iloilo, Other
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I like your poem it speaks in volumes and I know it is hard to find the right words to speak to your readers. Well done!

on Mar. 20 2014 at 3:53 pm
BrookeCherith BRONZE, East McKeesport, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die today

I could read this a thousand times and I don't think that I would be tired of it!  Well done!

on Mar. 16 2014 at 10:40 pm
LilithNyx BRONZE, Seneca, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"It takes a great deal of bravery to stand up to your enemies, but a great deal more to stand up to your friends"

Why are you confused? Perhaps I can help!

on Mar. 16 2014 at 10:39 pm
LilithNyx BRONZE, Seneca, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"It takes a great deal of bravery to stand up to your enemies, but a great deal more to stand up to your friends"

That was beautiful!

on Mar. 10 2014 at 8:52 pm
LifeLeader PLATINUM, Roanoke, Virginia
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Your poem is so amazing and I've read it over so many times! I can't believe that your poem has been able to maintain the one with the most comments for so many weeks! That is truly amazing!

on Mar. 2 2014 at 10:08 pm
ChristianS BRONZE, Shippenville, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"A fool flatters himself, a wise man flatters the fool." - Edward G. Bulwer-Lytton

Absolutly excellent! Love this peice! Well done!

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on Feb. 27 2014 at 7:47 pm
BTubz SILVER, Calgary, Other
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Poem was well done, but what really stands out to me is the title. So. Good.

on Feb. 24 2014 at 1:40 pm
kenzierenee36 BRONZE, Wallingford, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"I go to seek a great perhaps."

That last line though.... Ugh... Loved it... I wouldn't change a thing...

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OldGreg BRONZE, Destrehan, Louisiana
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Oops. Posted twice.

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on Feb. 18 2014 at 12:44 pm
OldGreg BRONZE, Destrehan, Louisiana
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Am I allowed to bo confused? Because I am.

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on Feb. 18 2014 at 12:43 pm
OldGreg BRONZE, Destrehan, Louisiana
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Am I allowed to be confused, because I am.

on Feb. 13 2014 at 6:42 pm
loveyoubby2018 BRONZE, Kennisaw, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
They will only care when you are gone. ~Marilyn Monroe

Wonderful poem! Just loved it!  

on Feb. 10 2014 at 6:04 pm
Ashlee_Renolds BRONZE, Linwood, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
"You Can't Get A Cup Of Tea Big Enough, Or A Book Long Enough To Suit Me.." - C.S. Lewis

Wow this is wonderful..I know u must get this a lot, but I can't help it what inspiered u to write this poem? I really luv it...R u writing any more poems?

on Feb. 9 2014 at 7:24 pm
francheskas SILVER, San Diego, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Either write something worth reading or do something worth writing." -Benjamin Franklin

about a week

on Feb. 6 2014 at 4:14 pm
AltheaRaine BRONZE, Fayette, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
Now these three remain: faith, hope, and love. But the greatest of these is love.
-1st Corinthians 13:13

That's deep. What inspired you?

on Feb. 6 2014 at 12:58 pm
EpilepticUnicorn BRONZE, Donaldson, Arkansas
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Beautiful poem. loved it

on Feb. 5 2014 at 10:52 pm
iz_teehee SILVER, Boxford, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Live in such a way that if anyone spoke badly of you, no one would believe it.

Should take a few days to a week

on Feb. 5 2014 at 11:11 am
DespondentPen SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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What a fantastic poem!  It really relays the idea of the father being too constricting.  However, I think that the rhyme is a bit forces in the two-line stanza when you mention the "birdie."  I am currently waiting to get my work approved.  Does anyone know how long this will take?


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