Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Dezarae said...
May 20, 2014 at 11:48 pm
The emotion displayed here was relatable and very well written. 
catwithglasses replied...
Jun. 4, 2014 at 7:18 pm
This is a really great poem. Those last few lines really tie the whole thing together and are very touching. This is very well written. Great job!
PoeticPrincess said...
May 12, 2014 at 10:55 am
This is an amazing poem, it really touched my soul. Great Job!!!   If you guys have time please check out mine thanks!
LiveProgressing said...
May 10, 2014 at 10:15 am
I Feel sympathy with this poem and it's a great piece of work  
PoetryFromTheHeart said...
May 8, 2014 at 9:21 am
I LOVE THIS!!!! I feel like this myself sometimes and you were able to establish an amazing connection with me through this piece. Keep writing and great job!
ACkYeFirst said...
May 5, 2014 at 6:22 pm
I appreciate the intense emotion of this piece - really creates a connection between reader and work. Good job!
DragonQueenThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 2, 2014 at 6:06 pm
Love it! I really like the essence it gives. XD
oxford123 said...
Apr. 30, 2014 at 7:33 am
Glamorous piece of work!
Asfia said...
Apr. 28, 2014 at 4:17 pm
what happens in the end tell me please????
PoeticPrincess said...
Apr. 28, 2014 at 2:08 pm
Wow this was an amazing poem. Great job!
Lemons4Randi said...
Apr. 23, 2014 at 5:54 pm
A beautifully written piece. Love the idea of it. The whole poem comes together in the last few lines and I think i am in love with this poem. Keep it up
Hells_Will said...
Apr. 17, 2014 at 1:45 pm
this is amazing!!!!!!! i love it!! i know how it feels to be held back by your parents but its my mom not my dad i dont really know my dad but thats why i love it sssooo much!!!! (sorry about my bad gramer!!)
beanpole said...
Apr. 16, 2014 at 2:44 pm
wow you did a great job!
kyndreyah said...
Apr. 11, 2014 at 2:53 pm
You're a rude person. 
thenightowlwriter said...
Apr. 10, 2014 at 4:40 pm
Sad but beautiful, as poetry usually is.
C.S.Thompson said...
Apr. 9, 2014 at 9:23 pm
This was a very cool piece to read. I enjoyed the use of imagery. It was little sad, the ending but that's alright because it was symbolic. Nice work.
juliamolly said...
Apr. 7, 2014 at 9:42 pm
Wow. I thought this was beautifuly written and the flow was really spectacular. That said, I think if you elongated this more you would have much more room for an emotional connection with the audience. (Me being very close with my father) Love this piece though and happy writing! 
thatoneguythathateschool said...
Apr. 7, 2014 at 2:39 pm
Like really this is just horrible i threw up a little in my mouth 
thatoneguythathateschool said...
Apr. 7, 2014 at 2:29 pm
This is horrible
MilindaMiller said...
Apr. 5, 2014 at 11:59 am
This is beautiful, I loved it!
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