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Take my Heart and Break It

October 11, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."


Take my broken heart,
and rip it from my chest.
Steal away my soul,
and finally put me to rest.

I dreamt about you day and night,
and I wanted you to be mine.
You watched me in my hardest days,
and sometimes you watched me shine.

Every time I saw you,
my heart would skip a beat.
Every time you said my name,
I would spring out of my seat.

I loved you with my heart and soul.
I loved you year after year.
But something always kept us apart:
our confusion, our chances, our fear.

But now there is no hope for us,
we are doomed to be apart.
Maybe I won't feel the pain
if you completely break my heart.


The author's comments:
Most of the time relationships grow from the innocence of a best friend. This is my poem explaining how it feels to realize that. This is also to express the awful truth when you discover that you can never be together.

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x0x0xJ SILVER said...
on Jul. 13 2010 at 12:47 am
x0x0xJ SILVER, Wood Dale, Illinois
7 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sometimes the thoughts in my head get bored and go for a stroll out through my mouth. This is rarely a good thing.

This is a really good poem.
I like it a lot.

 


on Jun. 28 2010 at 1:50 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

yoiu killed the rhyming scheme captain,very nice. here we go captain, here we go. I swear you're a natural captain. you're a natural.

on Jun. 25 2010 at 12:47 am
BlossomAstro2, Burien, Washington
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont cry beacause its over smile because it happened:)- Dr. Suess

This was such a good poem. Your a great writer and i can really relate!

on Jun. 18 2010 at 11:35 am
ShenelleCrystal SILVER, M, New York
7 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out dance in the rain cherish the memories ignore the pain love + learn forget and forgive because remember you only have [one life to live] ♥

That was good .

 

Please come and check out my poems [comment or rate] Thank u


on Jun. 15 2010 at 2:56 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Wow this was really great, very nice rhyming.  I especially loved the meaning to it.

Btw, anyone who sees this, will you check out and comment on my work?


kandace BRONZE said...
on Jun. 10 2010 at 12:48 pm
kandace BRONZE, Winn, Michigan
4 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont have one havnt found the perfect one yet

i think this is the best work ive read so far wow its amazing u shld check out mine

REMi93 GOLD said...
on Jun. 7 2010 at 10:59 pm
REMi93 GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love Never Fails

I love this! It's awesomeness and I completely relate to how you feel. It is beautifully written. Good job!

on Jun. 3 2010 at 2:06 pm
RosyOptimism DIAMOND, Coronado, California
72 articles 31 photos 57 comments
Hey, I really liked this poem. It was very well written and simple to read yet the meaning was very deep. Please check some of my work.

Ambo123 BRONZE said...
on May. 29 2010 at 11:19 pm
Ambo123 BRONZE, Hillsboro, Oregon
4 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Two musicians playing together, there is nothing more beautiful.
-John Frusicante

I really like this.

Very nice job!


TNT25 SILVER said...
on May. 24 2010 at 3:30 pm
TNT25 SILVER, Johnstown, Ohio
9 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Pain is just weakness leaving the body"

Really good. i think its easily relateable. great job

on May. 19 2010 at 2:44 pm
once_a_redhead SILVER, Lady Lake, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love is somethin' we all feel even if we don't know that we do!!"

me to feel it the pain and the tears!!! oh and i love your name(mexicanshorty) it should be mine!!!;):)

great job on the writing dreamer believer!!!


Meru21 GOLD said...
on May. 17 2010 at 11:54 pm
Meru21 GOLD, Desert Hot Springs, California
17 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I could be any part of you,
I'd be your tears;
To be conceived in your heart,
Born in your eyes,
Live on your cheeks,
And die on your lips."

I really liked this. I mean, who can't relate to that?? It's got a nice flow to it and you did a wonderful job expressing what needed to be said without going overboard. Great job!!

on May. 17 2010 at 11:36 am
GreenLover SILVER, Anaheim, California
5 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
Time is but a number

wow  this is really nice loved a lot. i can relate to. i feel you. keep it up. if you dont mind could you take a look at my sonnet "My Child,My Son" i really appreciate it thanx :)

on May. 15 2010 at 9:32 am
celloizmylife PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
27 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
Around here, however, we don't look backwards for very long.
We keep moving forward, opening up new doors and doing new things, because we're curious.....And curiosity keeps leading us down new paths.
-Walt Disney

oh my goodness, I loved it! my favorite line was definitely the last.

on May. 14 2010 at 11:13 am
MeXiCaNsHoRtY BRONZE, East Chicago, Indiana
2 articles 0 photos 4 comments
Wow, this is amazing i can really relate to this. i acually a little tear..keep up the good work and keep your head up high never look down!

on May. 12 2010 at 3:51 pm
VampiericRain GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
12 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
Would you like a side of epic with that fail?

Oh my gosh. This is so sad and...and...amazing. I nearly cried when I read it. Im going through the same thing (sorta) and it really stinks. :( I love it. Five stars! :) I would really appreciate it if you would read and rate some of my writings? That would be amazing if you did. :) Thank you!

on May. 11 2010 at 4:59 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

i want to say THANK YOU  to everyone who has commented on this piece (and my other work if you have). (: your support is encouraging me to keep writing (even through the heartbreaks!) you guys are truly amazing :) thanks so much again :)

<3/dreamer (:


on May. 11 2010 at 4:30 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

this is one of the best. and I'm sure these people on teenink can relate to it-its not like anybody believes in love anymore. 5 stars captain.

on May. 11 2010 at 3:14 pm
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
28 articles 4 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing songs is super intimate. It's a bit like getting naked"~ Gwen Stefani

I don't think you need my opinion, but I relate to this in everyway and am making it one of my favorites! It's just so full of feeling......:)

on May. 9 2010 at 8:00 pm
inspire.identity. PLATINUM, Ajax, Other
23 articles 8 photos 98 comments
This is amazing !