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Before I Can Write a Song

November 2, 2010
By redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"


How do I convey you?

I don't know

Sometimes it's hard to rhyme my thoughts


How do I portray you?

What do I show?

These answers must be sought


Before I can write a song

Before the words and melody flow along

I need to know what I'll say

Then I'll write away

and throw myself in headlong

And as determined as I am today

it doesn't mean it won't take long

But I'll work hard to write you a song


This is a struggle

Paper vs. pen

but I know it can be fought


I'll have to juggle

it all over again

if I want to come out on top


Before I can write a song

Before the words and melody flow along

I need to know what I'll say

Then I'll write away

and throw myself in headlong

And as determined as I am today

it doesn't mean it won't take long

But I'll work hard to write you a song


I'll have a tough time

but won't give up

even if I'm diswrought


Suddenly the words will rhyme

I'll speed up

Only to get stuck in a knot


Before I can write a song

Before the words and melody flow along

I need to know what I'll say

Then I'll write away

and throw myself in headlong

And as determined as I am today

it doesn't mean it won't take long

But I'll work hard to write you a song


And when I'm about to quit

I'll see the end

and know my luck's changed a lot


I'll be so glad I made it

around the bend

I'll wonder why I was ever distraught


And I'll say to myself "Yay!"



And I'll say to myself "Yay!"


And I'll sing to myself

the song I wrote today



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on Jul. 10 2011 at 11:16 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

New work of mine just got posted. Please check it out! Thanks!

 


on Jun. 4 2011 at 2:47 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

I really love the very end of the song & most of the whole song...except "And I'll say to myself "yay!"". It just seems misplaced...But anyway...Good job! (:

on May. 19 2011 at 7:15 pm
Odessa_Sterling00 DIAMOND, No, Missouri
87 articles 108 photos 968 comments

Favorite Quote:
All gave some, some gave all. -War Veterans headstone.

Some parts, when I read it, it doesn't seem to flow very well.

on Nov. 26 2010 at 3:53 pm
Annalibelle BRONZE, Elmsford, New York
2 articles 0 photos 38 comments

I like the beginning verse, the rhythm flows very well, and it clearly sounds like it could be set to music. The meaning of the refrain is there, but I think the rhyming words seem a little bit unsophisticated. The rhythm still works, but it sounds almost kid-ish and too matchy. The verses are great and the song has development and a kind of plot which is good. “I’ll say to myself “yay!” is again, a little bit unsophisticated.  Maybe something Taylor swift-y like “And I’ll smile softly to myself. And I smile softly to myself”. It doesn’t have to rhyme and most song lyrics don’t. I.E. “ I was riding shotgun with my hair undone/In the front seat of his car/He's got a one-hand feel on the steering wheel/The other on my heart”

You have rhythm down very well and that’s the most important thing. The ending phrase is very perfect and creates a great mood. 


on Nov. 21 2010 at 2:44 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

I like the ending how it says "i'll sing to myself the song i wrote today." It was a good way to end writing a song about writing a song. C:

on Nov. 20 2010 at 3:30 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
7 articles 0 photos 431 comments

Favorite Quote:
Part of the J7X team. :)

I like the rhyming. :) Very good flow, and it's SO true!

Toto said...
on Nov. 20 2010 at 12:54 pm
very clever....will ring true with all the songwriters of the world!

on Nov. 16 2010 at 6:35 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Thank you! Let me know when you have contributed work and I'll check it out!

on Nov. 15 2010 at 2:25 pm
Halabella BRONZE, Longview, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\"Quote the raven nevermore . . .\\\"

I love this peom so much it is so sweet and awsome you have a real gift!


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