Kami's Greater Power

September 5, 2009
By Electricity PLATINUM, Bradenton, Florida
Electricity PLATINUM, Bradenton, Florida
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Enclosed by the pervading night
we traded vows of moral consciences
and then a sinister heart
spread its wings throught love

The fruit told me
that He is watching
and He makes the dreams come true
and the 'today' will turn to 'nothingness'

Why me? With a budding flower
that grows on hate
which lives in a world of 'paradise'

Into the pervading night
we traded vows of moral consciences
and then a sinister heart
spread its wings throught love

He won't let a helping hand
reach for my own broken treasure
with everything that is cruel from the past
and confused in the future
I will one day prevail an incandessing sky

Why me? With a budding flower
that grows on hate
which lives in a world of 'paradise'

He won't let a helping hand
reach for my own broken treasure
with everything that is cruel from the past
and confused in the future
I will one day prevail an incandessing sky


The author's comments:
Maybe He is trying to reach me, but I am to defiant and scared of what He might judge upon me?

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SoniC said...
on Nov. 9 2009 at 2:20 pm
wow, this is really good. I just wanted to say I like it.

NIkki_<3 said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 8:29 pm
I agree with Carnallace. It's an interesting way to express your thoughts on religion. Nice use of words, too.

on Sep. 19 2009 at 12:03 pm
Electricity PLATINUM, Bradenton, Florida
30 articles 0 photos 273 comments
thanks! I love feedback!

carnallace said...
on Sep. 18 2009 at 4:25 pm
carnallace, Dsf, Pennsylvania
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“Why me? With a budding flower

that grows on hate

which lives in a world of 'paradise'”

Beautiful! The use of quotations around paradise gave this piece an ambiguous feel and kept the perspective changing.

You touch or morals, doubt, and a desire to believe and then give it a symbol, an image, and a name.

I think everyone questions their faith in different ways. Your way just happens expose itself in a truly breathtaking way. :]

Really lovely piece!




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