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Dear God

July 8, 2014
By Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski


Dear God,

I'm sorry I hid you under the floorboards
next to the CD's my mom don't
approve of,
and for painting you red because red
was in — not because it's
the color of the words you spoke. I'm sorry
for letting your name slip from
my tongue
next to the words "faggot" and "Hell" —
I'm sorry I used you
as an excuse for
hate.
And most of all, I'm sorry that whenever
I pray,
it's in the school cafeteria and not
by my bedside,
because I'm not praying for your ears,
but theirs.


The author's comments:
One of the more straightforward pieces I've written.

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on Jul. 19 2014 at 1:06 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

wow thank u

on Jul. 18 2014 at 2:38 am
TargonTheDragon GOLD, Ofallon, Missouri
15 articles 16 photos 292 comments

Favorite Quote:
First dentistry was painless.
Then bicycles were chainless,
Carriages were horseless,
And many laws enforceless.

Next cookery was fireless,
Telegraphy was wireless,
Cigars were nicotineless,
And coffee caffeineless.

Soon oranges were seedless,
The putting green was weedless,
The college boy was hatless,
The proper diet fatless.

New motor roads are dustless,
The latest steel is rustless,
Our tennis courts are sodless,
Our new religion — godless.

You never cease to amaze me Jade:)

on Jul. 18 2014 at 12:12 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

thank you:)

JRaye PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 17 2014 at 12:21 pm
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
43 articles 10 photos 527 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you."

"Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, 'I just don't care.'?"

I haven't been the most religious myself lately, so this really did open my eyes. :) I liked it a lot

on Jul. 16 2014 at 10:08 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

means a lot :)

on Jul. 16 2014 at 10:07 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Wow, thank you. I'm shocked this poem is getting this kind of feedback. It was written mostly for myself, but I'm glad so many can relate to it.

Longlegs GOLD said...
on Jul. 16 2014 at 4:52 pm
Longlegs GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
16 articles 0 photos 84 comments
Relatably incredible. Great message. Magnificent use of words.

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 16 2014 at 4:25 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I think this poem relates mostly to "religious" people, not solely, but mostly. I can easily relate to this poem on just about every point you made. Honestly, I can't describe how meaningful this is to read for me. 5/5

on Jul. 16 2014 at 2:39 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thank you so much!!

aarshi said...
on Jul. 16 2014 at 1:39 pm
so relatable

on Jul. 16 2014 at 1:30 pm
theSunfloweredCrow PLATINUM, Green Bay, Wisconsin
47 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Can't keep my eyes from the circling sky,
Tongue-tied and twisted
Just an earth-bound misfit, I"
~Pink Floyd

"Now is blessed
The rest
remembered "

~Jim Morrison

This is increincredible. It's so honest and raw and the last line was perfect. I love all the emotion you put into it. It's amzing. I hope this gets pulished because you deserve it. Keep writng and best wishes. :)

on Jul. 16 2014 at 2:01 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

I'm glad you liked it! That means a lot to me. Have a great day :)

on Jul. 16 2014 at 12:52 am
heyhannah93 GOLD, Jackson, Tennessee
10 articles 2 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Trust your heart if the seas catch fire. Live by love though the stars walk backward. -EE Cummings

I love this poem. The whole time I was reading, I was agreeing. You should know that this brought tears to my eyes because it accurately describes my life also. Yet, He is still good. Amen.


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