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January 13, 2013
By Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski


a dress among the thorns, lying
atop the petals, strewn
from cliffs below the sprawling sky
and white under the moon.



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on Feb. 16 2013 at 1:13 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thank you! The title is actually part of the poem.

on Feb. 16 2013 at 12:39 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

  You were smart not to capitalize anything here. I can tell you paid a lot of attention to your structure.

on Feb. 4 2013 at 8:31 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thank you! That means a lot:)

on Feb. 4 2013 at 7:27 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 860 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Simply spectacular! Your word choice, spacing, lines, emphasis, and all of the above were perfect! Your metaphors are strong and you have an impeccable sense of place in your writing, if you know what I mean. Fantastic job.

on Feb. 3 2013 at 10:21 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thanks for the feedback, especially on such a short poem:)

schuy PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 3 2013 at 1:53 am
schuy PLATINUM, Chatham, Virginia
33 articles 4 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stop acting so small. You are the universe in ecstatic motion." ~Rumi

I love this. So simple, yet you choose the perfect words to make this very complex and powerful!


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