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Looking Through a Fighters Eyes

November 22, 2011
By dbk1098 PLATINUM, Rockville, Maryland
dbk1098 PLATINUM, Rockville, Maryland
20 articles 0 photos 41 comments

It’s you and me now
Just the two of us
Working against the world

Fighting
With fists held high
Against an outside force

The treacherous walls
Begin to cave in

I close my eyes tight and say,
“Tell me when its over.”

And I think back…

All the hardships,
The struggles
We’ve endured
The pain
The hurt
Nothing can come close
To loosing what I love the most
Loosing the one that I would
Without hesitation
Give my heart to
Beating like a drum

And j ust when
My ocean blue eyes shut
They forcibly open
Again
A moment’s reaction

I am not giving up


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sarah98 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 24 2013 at 8:31 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
1 article 0 photos 406 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

this piece is kind of mysterious, and i love the strength at the end.

on Jul. 14 2013 at 7:49 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

Hi again dbk! all i can say is you've outdid yourself again your an incredible writer. I love your emotion throught this work and i love how its like your close to losing the battle, the fight and you get up and fight back vs. the surrenderig and staying down i think this is really good overall, and i hope to read more from you 5/5 stars yet again :3

on Jul. 2 2013 at 6:54 pm
UniquePerspective SILVER, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
7 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The most pathetic thing in the world is to see, and yet have no vision." - Hellen Keller
“Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind.” - Dr. Seuss (Theodore Giesel)

Love the feeling! It's actually *losing but other than that a fantastic piece!

on Jun. 27 2013 at 8:45 pm
BalladOfMonaLisa PLATINUM, Na, Other
24 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love and to be loved; to hurt and to be hurt. These are the ideals that make up humanity. ~Me (Lisa)

This is awesome! I really like it!! (: It is very meaningful... I love how you formatted it.

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jun. 26 2013 at 5:14 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Wow, this is amazing! I love the hopefulness and sincerity in this and how the reader can tell all of the heart you put into it. Well done; I also love the imagery and beautiful metaphors you strategically placed .Ur a talented writer!

necci SILVER said...
on Jun. 25 2013 at 11:06 pm
necci SILVER, Denver, Colorado
8 articles 0 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
-Women are many things to humans, but the one thing they are not is dominated by men.
-If a single act of hate can do so much damage, what can a single act of kindness do?

Amazing, you litterally put yourself into your poem, however watch out for spelling and grammer, the keyboard is a tricky device  

Zach_M said...
on Jun. 12 2013 at 11:45 pm
Very interesting; I love the ray of hope that you leave towards the end of your article. "I am not giving up," I love that. It shows that you have the heart and the determination to never let go; to never give up no matter what comes your way. I love how you stretch the past and make it apart of your determination to keep fighting. Wonderful job.

on Jun. 12 2013 at 11:33 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Really cool! I like the ending especially XD

on Jun. 7 2013 at 7:43 pm
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD, No Where, Florida
10 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If it weren’t for the coffee, I’d have no identifiable personality whatsoever.” –David Letterman

I liked this a lot. I found a small spelling error ("losing" instead of "loosing"). I like the desperate fighting instinct that overcomes the narrator in the end. :D Great job!

on Dec. 26 2012 at 8:47 pm
country-cutey GOLD, St.croix Falls, Wisconsin
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont say it if you dont mean it because i might actually belive it

this was really awsome i loved it alot, keep up on the great work!

on Jan. 2 2012 at 7:03 pm
NightGoddess17 PLATINUM, New City, New York
34 articles 0 photos 63 comments
this is pure beauty. a work of art. great job! :)

on Dec. 21 2011 at 4:06 pm
Tbug1997 PLATINUM, Bloomsburg, Pennsylvania
29 articles 1 photo 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
When in doubt... Blame it on your siblings
when life gives you skittles throw them at random people and yell FEEL THE RAINBOW

i feel a lot emotion when i read this i like it alot

Cams05 said...
on Dec. 20 2011 at 7:51 pm
Cams05, Santa Marta, Other
0 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For you I was born, for you I have life, for you am I now dying." -García Marquez Of love and other demons (Garcilaso de la Vega)

"If we live a life in fear, I’ll wait a thousand years just to see you smile again"-Muse, Resistance

"I am never giving up"...beautiful...congratulations. 

on Dec. 17 2011 at 2:45 pm
youngspeare BRONZE, Nairobi, Other
1 article 0 photos 273 comments

Favorite Quote:
We wouldn't ask a rose that grew from the concrete for having damaged petals; in turn we'd all celebrate its tenacity, we'd all love tz will to reach the sun well we are the roses n these are my damaged petals don't ask me why thank God and ask me how

Nicely written :) You've got talent! Keep posting (: 
Check out my poem "Ghosts of the Past" and rate/comment? Please*! 

izyfizy GOLD said...
on Dec. 12 2011 at 7:57 pm
izyfizy GOLD, Alameda, California
16 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
You all laugh because I'm different,
I laugh because you're all the same.
- Anonymous

i LOVE this! Great Job!!! :D

on Dec. 12 2011 at 7:47 pm
Prometheus PLATINUM, East Aurora, New York
29 articles 0 photos 109 comments
Fantastic poetry.  Your voice is filled with power and conviction.

on Dec. 12 2011 at 7:37 pm
Emma.H.96 DIAMOND, Kalamazoo, Michigan
65 articles 0 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
You own everything that happened to you. Tell your stories. If people wanted you to write warmly about them, they should've behaved better. -Anne Lamott, from Bird by Bird: Some Instructions on Writing and Life.

My first reaction is wow, i can tell there is so much emotion behind this, i love the almost nochalant pattern of this, it rolls off the tongue. I can definetly relate :)