Daddy's Womb | Teen Ink
  1. Home
  2. Poetry
  3. Free Verse
  4. Daddy's Womb

Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

© Anonymous

Post a comment
Submit your own

Similar Articles

Previous Next
Poetry
Alone
By bitty09 SILVER
Claymont, Delaware
bitty09 SILVER, Claymont, Delaware
5 articles 0 photos 0 comments
View profile
Poetry
Whisper
By Loki(norsegod) DIAMOND
Sapello, New Mexico
Loki(norsegod) DIAMOND, Sapello, New Mexico
62 articles 0 photos 2 comments
View profile
Poetry
Combine
By BreLee SILVER
Sula, Montana
BreLee SILVER, Sula, Montana
7 articles 0 photos 0 comments
View profile
Poetry
Music in My Heart
By CarlyG GOLD
Emmaus, Pennsylvania
CarlyG GOLD, Emmaus, Pennsylvania
10 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never let the odds keep you from doing what you know in your heart you were meant to do." H. Jackson Brown Jr.

View profile
Poetry
i knew better than this
By LUCIA ARTEAGA BRONZE
MESA, Arizona
LUCIA ARTEAGA BRONZE, MESA, Arizona
2 articles 0 photos 7 comments
View profile
Poetry
You
By wordweaver96 PLATINUM
Winchester, Kentucky
wordweaver96 PLATINUM, Winchester, Kentucky
37 articles 2 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; It is not our abilities but our choices that show who we truly are. &quot;<br /> Albus Dumbledore<br /> <br /> <br /> See, we really DON&#039;T have anything to fear but fear itself!

View profile

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 2198 comments.

Tremendous said...
on Dec. 24 2011 at 10:06 pm
didn't see that coming. eloquently written. bravo!
AlexisTashe SILVER said...
on Dec. 24 2011 at 3:03 pm
AlexisTashe SILVER, Cheltenham, Maryland
9 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
&quot;You&#039;re Not Alive Unless You&#039;re Living&quot;

View profile
Beautiful.!
trainboy PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 23 2011 at 9:33 pm
trainboy PLATINUM, Washington, Virginia
40 articles 1 photo 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The higher we go, the better we shall hear the voice of Christ.&quot; Blessed Pier Giorgio Frassati<br /> &quot;You may be what ever You resolve to be.&quot; General &quot;Stonewall&quot; Jackson

View profile
Really, your going to respond with that type of comment?!
MeganRozalia BRONZE said...
on Dec. 22 2011 at 11:56 am
MeganRozalia BRONZE, N/a, New York
2 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;shoot for the moon. even if you miss, you&#039;ll land among the stars&quot;

View profile
cant we all just get along
PrimaDonna said...
on Dec. 21 2011 at 11:42 pm
I'm confused... How is this free verse?  I like the theme and the way that its written but it is rhyming and has a definite structure...
Schuyler BRONZE said...
on Dec. 21 2011 at 12:42 pm
Schuyler BRONZE, Bronx, New York
3 articles 0 photos 12 comments
View profile
I love the theme of your poem about an overprotected father that won't let his child go or grow up . I can relate to to this poem a lot because my dad is really overprotected as well.
justin95 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 21 2011 at 12:03 pm
justin95 BRONZE, Brigdeton, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 1 comment
View profile

i like it.(:

 

trainboy PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 20 2011 at 7:34 am
trainboy PLATINUM, Washington, Virginia
40 articles 1 photo 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The higher we go, the better we shall hear the voice of Christ.&quot; Blessed Pier Giorgio Frassati<br /> &quot;You may be what ever You resolve to be.&quot; General &quot;Stonewall&quot; Jackson

View profile
Really good poem!  I like your descriptions.  Keep writing!
eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 9:51 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments
View profile
Great poem! So provacative... I especially like the title.
Art_Trash said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 8:49 pm
Art_Trash, Frankfort, New York
0 articles 2 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Say what you think and think what you want. Because the ones who mind don&#039;t matter, and the ones who matter, don&#039;t mind.&quot; ~Dr.Suess<br /> &quot;Every artist was once an amateur.&quot;

View profile
In a nutshell, an overprotective dad
CJN0808 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 11:09 am
CJN0808 BRONZE, Katy, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Experience, that most brutal of teachers; but you learn, my God do you learn.&quot;<br /> <br /> <br /> -C.S. Lewis

View profile
Great poem! Check out my page and read my poetry, if you like please comment and/ or rate. I would really appreciate it :)
rescuetruck607 GOLD said...
on Dec. 17 2011 at 9:06 pm
rescuetruck607 GOLD, Bellmore, New York
13 articles 28 photos 6 comments
View profile
what a great poem keep up the good work!
ALR107 said...
on Dec. 16 2011 at 6:35 pm
ALR107, Boise, Idaho
0 articles 13 photos 28 comments
View profile
That is a great poem! Unique title...
yourmom08 SILVER said...
on Dec. 16 2011 at 12:11 pm
yourmom08 SILVER, Vernon, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;everyone will eventually hurt you, you just have to find the right person worth suffering for&quot;

View profile
its nice but i dont get it. whats it about?
Karles_Ivy PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 16 2011 at 11:24 am
Karles_Ivy PLATINUM, Sunnyside, Washington
23 articles 0 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sometimes the bully isn&rsquo;t the captain of the cheerleaders or the girl who for some reason has it out for only you; sometimes the worst bully of them all is you.- Karles_Ivy

View profile
Every time I read this, I fall in love with it again.! Great poem.! 
A_Voice_Made_to_Be_Heard said...
on Dec. 15 2011 at 8:28 pm
A_Voice_Made_to_Be_Heard, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
I can do all things through Christ who strenghtens me. (Philippians 4:13)

View profile
This was so touching. I love how you conveyed a serious message with a hopeful sounding and slightly upbeat voice. There's a naturall flow to the words too.
aaron13 said...
on Dec. 14 2011 at 10:06 am
thats a very touching poem
Leyna1997 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 13 2011 at 8:03 pm
Leyna1997 BRONZE, Crystal, Minnesota
3 articles 3 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
And I&#039;ll write you poetry,<br /> with the prettiest words that you ever did read,<br /> no i never write like that.<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> -Sick of Sarah

View profile
Well I clicked on your link and tried to see your stuff but couldn't. and im not trying to make a fight I'm just stating facts.
otherpoet SILVER said...
on Dec. 11 2011 at 6:45 pm
otherpoet SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
6 articles 9 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone.&quot; - Audrey Hepburn

View profile
I think this poem is wonderful. I agree with KatieAtkinson's interpretation. Your poem had a very serious meaning, but as i read it i felt the tempo was rather up-beat
subliminal96 GOLD said...
on Dec. 11 2011 at 4:25 pm
subliminal96 GOLD, Kent, Ohio
10 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I have no nation to fight for... my country is the earth and I am a citizen of the world.&quot;

View profile
Love this- I can feel the chain tightening as I type