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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Mar. 1 2018 at 1:23 pm
MaddieGrizz SILVER, Lake Isabella, California
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Favorite Quote:
Even though I walk through the darkest valley I will fear no evil. Psalm 23:4, For I know the plans I have for you declares the Lord. Plans to prosper you, not harm you plans to give you hope and a future. Jeremiah 29:11

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on Mar. 1 2018 at 1:22 pm
MaddieGrizz SILVER, Lake Isabella, California
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Favorite Quote:
Even though I walk through the darkest valley I will fear no evil. Psalm 23:4, For I know the plans I have for you declares the Lord. Plans to prosper you, not harm you plans to give you hope and a future. Jeremiah 29:11

AMAZING POEM!!! The only thing that I would recommend is correcting some simple grammar.

on Feb. 24 2018 at 8:05 pm
SmartPanda13 GOLD, Hebron, Kentucky
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I don't understand the message but it's a beautiful poem

on Feb. 23 2018 at 10:51 am
tycasey32 SILVER, Monticello, Illinois
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Very great I can relate a lot to this poem but I don't get the title.

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“We write to taste life twice, in the moment and in retrospect.”
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Oh my god. People who understand the chaining properties of not having a parent are beautiful and empathetic. People who understand the chaining properties of having a parent are beautiful, empathetic and wise.

on Feb. 16 2018 at 12:08 pm
KurdiG PLATINUM, Douglasville, Georgia
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Marvelous poem with sad features.

on Feb. 8 2018 at 2:23 pm
ahmontgomery PLATINUM, Eminence, Kentucky
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Great poem, but I don't get the title

it was sad but honest. good job

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on Jan. 16 2018 at 3:18 pm
Maliq BRONZE, Sacramento, California
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Favorite Quote:
"When them situations came I came out like a champ, when it was pouring down raining I came out of it damp..."

it was fun to read and the twist at the end caught me off guard.

on Jan. 16 2018 at 3:12 pm
yungnserg916 BRONZE, Sacramento, California
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very good details,the twist at the end was off guard but it was a fun read

on Jan. 16 2018 at 2:56 pm
Phl.RamilJr BRONZE, Sacramento, California
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Favorite Quote:
You miss 100% of the shot you don't take

i like the twist in the end because it caught me off guard and i did not expect that.

on Jan. 16 2018 at 2:03 pm
CaprisunBrisk BRONZE, Sacramento, California
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it was sad but honest. good job

i love this !

on Jan. 1 2018 at 9:55 pm
lost_and_free GOLD, Rancho Mirage, California
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Favorite Quote:
"'But man is not made for defeat... A man can be destroyed, but not defeated.'" - Ernest Hemingway (The Old Man and the Sea)

Beautiful. Sad and truthful. And soulful.

on Dec. 20 2017 at 3:32 pm
BookWerm SILVER, Orem, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Hello, boys." - Crowley, Supernatural

Everyone is saying they love the twist ending. I don't get what the twist is.

This is beautiful :)

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Fantastic poem,very nice

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on Nov. 23 2017 at 12:38 pm
kristenjwang SILVER, NY, New York
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ah, a fellow Staten Islander! This is beautiful!