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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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Joboe13 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 22 2013 at 9:17 pm
Joboe13 BRONZE, Plymouth, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Live as if you were to die tomorrow. Learn as if you were to live forever.<br /> -Mahatma Gandhi

This poem is amazing!!! It's really deep, and it really makes you think. You are an amazing poet, keep up the good work!

Miley Cyrus said...
on Dec. 18 2013 at 2:46 pm
I liked it it was pretty cool I don't understand the the name it doesn't make sense to me. It woud be cool if you culd clarify what you ment

on Dec. 13 2013 at 8:32 am
Briipeaaa BRONZE, Lewiston, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Of all the words of tongue and pen, the saddest are these &#039; It might have been,&#039;&quot;. ~ Whittier

Might I say, you have impeccible talent. I wish I could write like you.

on Dec. 9 2013 at 10:50 am
MichealMulkey SILVER, Easley, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;The thing about music is that, when it hits you, you feel no pain&quot;<br /> -Bob Marley

Hey, my names Micheal Mulkey. Im a young writer from Easley, SC and It'd be really appreciated if someone could view my articles. Thank you!

on Dec. 6 2013 at 10:39 am
broken123456789 SILVER, Glendale, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
only you can do what your mind is set to

this was very touching becuase it helped me undersatand to never give up  

on Dec. 5 2013 at 7:11 pm
gabbymigdalski, Wiilmington, Delaware
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This poem caught my attention right away. The way it rhymes and how all the words almost fit into place pulled me right in. I love how in the poem the kid wanted to try everything. He wanted to learn how to fly and swim and he never stop trying until the end. I think this is a great poem and is probably  on my list for top 10 poems I have ever read. 

mady.neal GOLD said...
on Dec. 4 2013 at 8:26 am
mady.neal GOLD, Monrovia, Indiana
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I think that this was a really good poem!  The transition from see to sky was really elegant and you did well!  the only advice that I would give is to be careful to capitalize what needs to be (your I's).  Great job though!  

on Dec. 3 2013 at 10:26 am
Lullabymidnight BRONZE, Ailey, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Life&#039;s not about waiting out the storm, But learning how to dance in the rain.

The poem was great! I really love the symbolism!  

on Dec. 1 2013 at 8:43 pm
BrinaJo2018 GOLD, Memphis, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Wit beyond measure is man&#039;s greatest treasure. -Rowena Ravenclaw

I really liked the poem. I loved how you ended it with the dad being the ultimate reason the son couldn't leave and try to reach his goal. Over-all, a great poem with really good rhymes.  

on Dec. 1 2013 at 5:09 am
SweetDarkness PLATINUM, Merced, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;After rain comes a rainbow.&quot;<br /> &quot;All we can do is hope for a better tomorrow.&quot;<br /> &quot;An eye for an eye will make the whole world blind.&quot; -Gandhi<br /> &quot;an illusion can only last so long before it gives up its secrets.&quot;

this is a very well constructed poem, i like it a lot. Kepp it up, you're great.

on Nov. 29 2013 at 10:59 pm
IAndThisMystery, Newark, Delaware
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Wow, this is an intense poem! I find it really interesting that the i's are lowercase but words like "The Sea" are capitalized--maybe a stylistic choice related to the speaker's innocence and the sea's power/vastness? Like everyone else, I'm intrigued but a little confused about the ending -- will someone reply and tell me what you think it's implying?

on Nov. 27 2013 at 3:40 pm
LostInThoughts BRONZE, Heath Springs, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;People haven&#039;t always been there for me, but music always has!!&quot; -Taylor Swift

Really really deep. Little confusing, but an amazing poem. Great Job! :)

on Nov. 27 2013 at 4:16 am
TheDolphin ELITE, Iloilo, Other
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the poem left me dumbfounded! it is really great!

alicebabe said...
on Nov. 20 2013 at 3:09 pm
alicebabe, Oak Grove, Louisiana
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This poem was really good!  

on Nov. 19 2013 at 5:30 pm
horsehugger30252 SILVER, McDonough, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
There is only one way to avoid criticism: do nothing, say nothing, and be nothing. -Aristotle

It has a deep meaning to it, I understand that, but am still a bit confused about the ending. Brilliant and creative rhymes though!

on Nov. 17 2013 at 1:49 pm
BriannaMendoza BRONZE, Keller, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Is it better to be hated for who you are, than to be loved for something your not?

Three words: I loved it!

dinks PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 16 2013 at 2:50 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;and kisses are a better faith than freedom&quot;

the end really got me, great poem!

on Nov. 11 2013 at 8:25 pm
This poem reminded me a lot of the Greek myth about Icarus. :)

on Nov. 10 2013 at 1:30 pm
gowiththefl0 SILVER, Passau, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;It is not in the stars to hold our destiny but in ourselves&quot;<br /> -William Shakespeare

I like how this poem demonstrates the deep love as well as duty of a father for his son.

Madie2k BRONZE said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 6:25 pm
Madie2k BRONZE, Topeka, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Don&#039;t the best of them bleed it out. While the rest of them Peter out.&quot; -Foo Fighters

Check your grammar but I loved the poem!