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The Rush of Ember

August 29, 2010
By kohakus SILVER, Ajax, Other
kohakus SILVER, Ajax, Other
9 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Like stones, words are laborious and unforgiving, and the fitting of them together, like the fitting of stones, demands great patience and strength of purpose and particular skill."
-Edmund Morrison

A tiger perched inside my chest,
teeth bared,
claws out,
ready for the kill.

As I stood before the mirror naked, I looked:

My hair, a sheet of black sky;
Intangible rain clouds, drowning my mind.
My skin, a thin layer of snow;
Fragile as glass meant to be broken.
My eyes, dead meadows;
Deserted of life, no thoughts, no memories.
Just pain.

I didn’t like it,
I didn’t want it.

I wanted to be like all the other girls with
Seas of golden hair,
eyes that reflected the sky
and the skin of porcelain dolls.

Why can’t I just
be like them?

All the boys would like me.
All the girls would want to be me.
I would have friends.
My dad would come back.

The tiger in my chest clawed,
And licked
And bit
To get out.

But it couldn’t.

I watched my reflection silently.
Sunlight streamed through my
Dusted bedroom window and
Shined on my wet tears; shined on the truth.

I walked over to my bathroom,
Opened the cabinet,
And grabbed the razor.

My mouth rounded in a gasp as
a cold metal fang pierced through the flesh of my forearm;
A familiar friend.
A familiar pain.

The colour red stained the snow of my skin,
a blossoming rose in the wake of winter.
For a minute,
I was beautiful.
For a minute,
I was just like them.

But then the minute passed, the rush subsided, and all I was left with was

I’m Ember.


The author's comments:
Girls who think they're not good enough or perfect enough or white enough.

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This article has 4 comments.

on Sep. 6 2010 at 1:28 pm
woundedcondor GOLD, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
19 articles 0 photos 106 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you don't have something nice to say, don't say anything at all."

i absolutely most definitely LOVED ur poem. GREAT writing techniques the first 3 stanzas just made me never wanna stop reading. i feel like that all the time ALL my life i just wanted to fit in and be an average person i get frustrated sometimes and just ask "why why why cant i ever fit in even just one time" but oh well

on Sep. 1 2010 at 10:39 am
ramnapotter PLATINUM, Toronto, Other
26 articles 1 photo 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Write to be understood, speak to be heard, read to grow...”

A common concept , but portrayed so beautifully . Great job . (:

sam013 DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 31 2010 at 7:54 pm
sam013 DIAMOND, San Diego, California
63 articles 28 photos 33 comments
wow! this is really good! i love the powerful ending. i would love your feedback on my work, especially hiding me. thanks

cdemi12 BRONZE said...
on Aug. 31 2010 at 7:20 pm
cdemi12 BRONZE, Grayslake, Illinois
2 articles 7 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
“The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between lightning and a lightning bug.” --Mark Twain

I love your use of metaphors and imagery!! This poem has familiarity because we (teens) all have that moment when we want to be like everyone/someone else, so that made this poem personal to me. Beautiful work and keep it up! :D