A Teenage Love Story 2

September 29, 2009
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It was a warm June night, the sun just a glimpse above the horizon, with a slight breeze, brushing lightly against my skin. I could feel my dark brown hair flowing with the direction of the wind as i went round and round on the carousel. I closed my eyes and listened to the soft carnival music in the background of people talking and laughing. Even with my eyes closed, I could still see the joyful faces of children, their eyes wide with excitement, their parents watching them carefully and happily. I smiled, capturing the moment. I made sure to mentally write down all the details in my head, so I could retell it exactly to my parents. It’s been nearly a week since I last seen them and would be another month or two until I would see them again, although before leaving they made me promise to call them whenever I wanted but at least, once a week. Their 20th anniversary was last week, so as my gift, I decided to go stay with my aunt in California for the summer. As my mind drifted to my home back in New Jersey, I felt the carousel slowly come to a stop. I gently opened my eyes and let out a happy sigh. I laughed as I struggled to get off my carousel horse. Feeling dizzy, I went to find a place to sit. As I sat down on a nearby bench, my eyes swept the carnival for a corndog stand. Aha. Spotting one, I started walking towards it. Halfway there, knowing I was supposed to call my aunt at 9:30, I decided to see what time it was. I looked down in my bag and began searching for my phone. Suddenly, I ran into someone. “Sorr-“, I looked up unexpectedly into the striking blue eyes of a drop dead gorgeous stranger. He looked about my age, if not a year older and was an inch taller than me. No words could even begin to describe him.
My heart pounding, I tried to catch my breath. Just when I thought he couldn’t get any hotter, Gorgeous Stranger smiled, making his eyes twinkle and my conclusion rip into shreds. Finally catching my breath again, I tried to speak again. “Sorry, I wasn’t watching where I was going, I….My…..Sorry” I stuttered. He laughed, and then smiled again. “Don’t be”, he said. Even the sound of his voice made my heart explode. He held out his hand. “I’m Jonah, by the way “I held out my hand, meeting his. My hand tingled. “Skyler’ I said back, matching his smile. “Do you live around here? I don’t think I’ve seen you around town before.” Deep breathes, deep breathes, I thought to myself. “N-No, I’m just visiting my Aunt for the summer. I live in New Jersey. What about you??” I asked. “I moved here about five years ago from Portland Oregon, so I’ve lived here for some time. How long are you staying with your aunt?” His eyes seemed to sink into mine; making it seem as though each thing I said really mattered. As if I really mattered. My heart fluttered as though it were a butterfly trying to escape. The odd, yet amazing thing was, that, even though it was breathe taking, I loved the feeling of excitement. I wanted to jump up and scream, as though a bubbly volcano had erupted. I could feel it building inside me, as his eyes continued to stare into mine. I loved the way he_oh, wait, he asked me a question. It was hard to concentrate on anything when I was staring at him. He was so beautiful, with th-C***, I was doing it again. Okay, Okay, answer the question, Skyler. “F-F-For the summer”, I said. Ahhhh! Why do I keep stuttering? He probably thinks I have a speaking disorder, I thought. He smiled again.” Cool, maybe we can hang out sometime. I could show you around town, if you’d like”, he said. Oh yes, Skyler would like, Skyler would like Very Much…. “Sure, that sounds like fun. When would y-“, I started to ask, but suddenly I was cut off. “Jonah! I’ve been looking all over for you pookie poo! “ I turned to see who rudely interrupted me, and saw a gorgeous blonde walking toward us with two almost as equally gorgeous girls, one taller, the other average height. The one who was taller was also blonde, but the average height one was a brunette. Judging by the way the gorgeous blonde was walking just slightly ahead of them, I could tell she was the leader of their group. And judging by the look she was giving me, I could tell she wasn’t too fond of me. Great, I already have someone who hates my guts. I sighed. Super. They all seemed to walk in unison, and as if they owned the place, like they were better than everyone else. Their eyes weren’t exactly friendly. As they got closer, I could see two guys with them, who seemed to trail the other two like puppies, obviously their boyfriends. I realized in disappointment that the leader didn’t seem to have one, but apparently wanted one, by the seducing look she was giving Jonah. My stomach turned. “Hey Tara. Hey Steph, hey Cammie. What’s up John, Caleb?” Jonah said to them all, giving me an apologetic look. So the leader was Tara, the two behind her were Steph and Cammie, and the guys were John and Caleb,I thought, hoping I could remember which is which. As they reached where we were standing, Tara went and stood by Jonah; very close, I might add, while the others sort of circled around. Tara wrapped her arms around Jonah. “Where have you been, we looked all over for you!” she said. She gave me a dirty look. “Who are you? C***. Someone call B**** 911. I smiled at my little snide comment, and was tempted to laugh when I saw that my little grin seemed to annoy Tara. Jonah, however, seemed to look amused again. With a deep breath, I told myself that I would remain neutral if anything should happen. At least for now, HeHe. “Hi, I’m Skyler. I’m visiting here from New Jersey for the summer.”Nice. I smiled to myself. Lets just hope I could stay calm for the rest of the night.

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Chimercy said...
Jan. 18 at 9:53 pm
Can u please complete this story? It is not complete yet and it is getting more interesting.... Arhn
adventuregirl24331 said...
Sept. 6, 2016 at 10:34 am
will there be a part 2 ??
Raja said...
May 6, 2016 at 4:18 am
Very nice, if permission given, i love to do short movie.
Raja said...
May 6, 2016 at 4:18 am
Very nice, if permission given, i love to do short movie.
CianaBThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 27, 2016 at 5:13 pm
I really liked this story, I just wish you had separated it into paragraphs.
M.Awan said...
Dec. 16, 2015 at 3:26 am
Good work but its too short...
Aiasha said...
Sept. 29, 2015 at 10:22 am
Nice one short and swt but it could be more better
Srl102 said...
Jul. 29, 2015 at 12:24 pm
That was the best report ever
Roxxy said...
May 23, 2015 at 1:53 pm
love this.... very moving
shaoni666 said...
Feb. 6, 2015 at 3:48 am
Waiting for the next part
Kazuya replied...
May 7, 2015 at 7:00 pm
This really helped me, thanks, I can really relate, you have some serious talent though: )
skysky2230 said...
Oct. 2, 2012 at 11:42 am
My name is Skyler!!! XD Hahaha!!! I like this story, can't wait until part three!!!
foreverHope said...
Sept. 10, 2012 at 5:20 pm
Its the perfect love story. I like how Skyler embarises herself but Jonah doesn't even care. Really sweet!!!
MGRobinson said...
Apr. 9, 2012 at 6:13 pm
good start but sounds ALOT like the last song. Several gramatical errors but it still shows great promise
Madu_Bala replied...
Sept. 11, 2012 at 5:50 am
that's what I thought too, but the writing style is perfect!
Lindsey31 said...
Apr. 9, 2012 at 3:41 pm
Paragraphs would help a LOT, like Samantha S. said. There were also a lot of puncuation errors that made me lose my place at times.
Samantha S. said...
Mar. 18, 2012 at 1:52 am
I really think paragraphs would help. But other than that its perfect!
porkybutt This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 1, 2012 at 4:13 pm

I'm not sure why this was voted as one of the top pieces of the week. First off, the mechanics need some serious work; the author frequently switched between tenses, making it confusing for the reader to follow, and made many spelling and grammar errors. There are also no paragraphs. As for content, it was not very original; it sounds like just another teenage love story, as the author has so aptly named it.

However, the author did a good job of leading the reader along. The story... (more »)

NoMercy666 replied...
Oct. 24, 2012 at 9:53 am
THANK YOU, finally, someone else knows the use of the comment option.
Come on replied...
May 28, 2015 at 7:28 pm
Nice grammar there.
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