A Teenage Love Story 2

September 29, 2009
By JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
If you want to look young and Beautiful, stand next to ugly old people.
(love this, hilarious :)


It was a warm June night, the sun just a glimpse above the horizon, with a slight breeze, brushing lightly against my skin. I could feel my dark brown hair flowing with the direction of the wind as i went round and round on the carousel. I closed my eyes and listened to the soft carnival music in the background of people talking and laughing. Even with my eyes closed, I could still see the joyful faces of children, their eyes wide with excitement, their parents watching them carefully and happily. I smiled, capturing the moment. I made sure to mentally write down all the details in my head, so I could retell it exactly to my parents. It’s been nearly a week since I last seen them and would be another month or two until I would see them again, although before leaving they made me promise to call them whenever I wanted but at least, once a week. Their 20th anniversary was last week, so as my gift, I decided to go stay with my aunt in California for the summer. As my mind drifted to my home back in New Jersey, I felt the carousel slowly come to a stop. I gently opened my eyes and let out a happy sigh. I laughed as I struggled to get off my carousel horse. Feeling dizzy, I went to find a place to sit. As I sat down on a nearby bench, my eyes swept the carnival for a corndog stand. Aha. Spotting one, I started walking towards it. Halfway there, knowing I was supposed to call my aunt at 9:30, I decided to see what time it was. I looked down in my bag and began searching for my phone. Suddenly, I ran into someone. “Sorr-“, I looked up unexpectedly into the striking blue eyes of a drop dead gorgeous stranger. He looked about my age, if not a year older and was an inch taller than me. No words could even begin to describe him.
My heart pounding, I tried to catch my breath. Just when I thought he couldn’t get any hotter, Gorgeous Stranger smiled, making his eyes twinkle and my conclusion rip into shreds. Finally catching my breath again, I tried to speak again. “Sorry, I wasn’t watching where I was going, I….My…..Sorry” I stuttered. He laughed, and then smiled again. “Don’t be”, he said. Even the sound of his voice made my heart explode. He held out his hand. “I’m Jonah, by the way “I held out my hand, meeting his. My hand tingled. “Skyler’ I said back, matching his smile. “Do you live around here? I don’t think I’ve seen you around town before.” Deep breathes, deep breathes, I thought to myself. “N-No, I’m just visiting my Aunt for the summer. I live in New Jersey. What about you??” I asked. “I moved here about five years ago from Portland Oregon, so I’ve lived here for some time. How long are you staying with your aunt?” His eyes seemed to sink into mine; making it seem as though each thing I said really mattered. As if I really mattered. My heart fluttered as though it were a butterfly trying to escape. The odd, yet amazing thing was, that, even though it was breathe taking, I loved the feeling of excitement. I wanted to jump up and scream, as though a bubbly volcano had erupted. I could feel it building inside me, as his eyes continued to stare into mine. I loved the way he_oh, wait, he asked me a question. It was hard to concentrate on anything when I was staring at him. He was so beautiful, with th-C***, I was doing it again. Okay, Okay, answer the question, Skyler. “F-F-For the summer”, I said. Ahhhh! Why do I keep stuttering? He probably thinks I have a speaking disorder, I thought. He smiled again.” Cool, maybe we can hang out sometime. I could show you around town, if you’d like”, he said. Oh yes, Skyler would like, Skyler would like Very Much…. “Sure, that sounds like fun. When would y-“, I started to ask, but suddenly I was cut off. “Jonah! I’ve been looking all over for you pookie poo! “ I turned to see who rudely interrupted me, and saw a gorgeous blonde walking toward us with two almost as equally gorgeous girls, one taller, the other average height. The one who was taller was also blonde, but the average height one was a brunette. Judging by the way the gorgeous blonde was walking just slightly ahead of them, I could tell she was the leader of their group. And judging by the look she was giving me, I could tell she wasn’t too fond of me. Great, I already have someone who hates my guts. I sighed. Super. They all seemed to walk in unison, and as if they owned the place, like they were better than everyone else. Their eyes weren’t exactly friendly. As they got closer, I could see two guys with them, who seemed to trail the other two like puppies, obviously their boyfriends. I realized in disappointment that the leader didn’t seem to have one, but apparently wanted one, by the seducing look she was giving Jonah. My stomach turned. “Hey Tara. Hey Steph, hey Cammie. What’s up John, Caleb?” Jonah said to them all, giving me an apologetic look. So the leader was Tara, the two behind her were Steph and Cammie, and the guys were John and Caleb,I thought, hoping I could remember which is which. As they reached where we were standing, Tara went and stood by Jonah; very close, I might add, while the others sort of circled around. Tara wrapped her arms around Jonah. “Where have you been, we looked all over for you!” she said. She gave me a dirty look. “Who are you? C***. Someone call B**** 911. I smiled at my little snide comment, and was tempted to laugh when I saw that my little grin seemed to annoy Tara. Jonah, however, seemed to look amused again. With a deep breath, I told myself that I would remain neutral if anything should happen. At least for now, HeHe. “Hi, I’m Skyler. I’m visiting here from New Jersey for the summer.”Nice. I smiled to myself. Lets just hope I could stay calm for the rest of the night.


The author's comments:
This is the first part edited and the second part. There will be more to come :)

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on Nov. 7 2011 at 6:58 pm
selahoverrated GOLD, Mt Sidney, Virginia
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pretty good

on Nov. 7 2011 at 2:35 pm
abedengo-called-benny BRONZE, Valley View, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Someday you'll be old enough to read fairytales again.

-C.S. Lewis

The funniest moment was about the "speaking disorder."  As someone who stutters, I find it hilarious the way people tip-toe around the impediment.  Great story... Love the names.

on Nov. 7 2011 at 9:33 am
Nicole-Leigh SILVER, Lawrencebrug, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Heart. Confidence. Desire." - Rion Best

Super cute! Loved it! Keep writing for this story. I really liked it! It's someting that is typical, but originall at the same time.

on Nov. 7 2011 at 8:35 am
THIS IS INNAPROPRIATE. THERE ARE BAD WORDS!!!!!!!!!!!1

on Nov. 6 2011 at 7:38 am
LifesIllusion BRONZE, Cicero, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't let your fears slow you down. Instead, chase them down and beat them."

I reallly enjoyed this story! can you keep going? its really good! Keep writing!

on Oct. 16 2011 at 5:00 pm
Imperfectlife SILVER, Rochester, New York
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It's very detailed and funny, I want to hear more!

 


on Oct. 16 2011 at 3:19 pm
ThePeaceDaisy BRONZE, Albany, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“Laundry is the only thing that should be separated by color.” - Unknown
I will change this every week!

My name's Tara...but I'm nice! Lol nice job, by the way!

on Sep. 24 2011 at 5:18 pm
Rainbowmadhatter, Reno, Nevada
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azing..and i understand the bi t chi ness too..been there..had ot deal with that..all so good

there wasnt to much detail so it wasnt overlaoded but it was enouh do i could beome Skylar..

pplease write part two..pplase


on Sep. 24 2011 at 3:31 pm
Laura_Oliver GOLD, Manchester, Connecticut
12 articles 2 photos 122 comments
Spectacular job! You have my eternal respect. One thing, though: I don't know if this was intentional or not, but you should have spaced the paragraphs properly (no offense, really). Otherwise this is pure perfection. Plus, I would really appreciate it if you could check out some of my work and leave some feedback.

on Sep. 14 2011 at 2:57 pm
writinggirl20 PLATINUM, Marksville, Louisiana
37 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
What I say only comes straight from my mind, i do not judge. (a quote by me)

please post the rest its good and i wish i was talented as u!!!

 


StarStrukk said...
on Sep. 2 2011 at 12:41 pm
one word for you... INCREDIBLE

pink pompom said...
on Aug. 15 2011 at 5:49 pm
yeah, dont apologize...who cares about the paragraphs? you're a wicked awesome writer!!

pink pompom said...
on Aug. 15 2011 at 5:45 pm
yayyy, i love it!! i write a lil romance too, but you are by far my superior in  a) humor b) description and c) about everything else...:) SOOO good! Smiles. the writing rocks!!! I will see you on the shelf of my library someday.

on Aug. 11 2011 at 5:33 pm
Free_One PLATINUM, ????, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"I am not invincible or unstoppable, but I stay strong because it is the only way to survive in this world."

wow that was amazing! ur an awesome writer!!!! if anyone had time could you check out my new story called Terror out of this world: The whole story

on Aug. 3 2011 at 7:48 am
SimplyRachel PLATINUM, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery and today is a gift, that's why we call it the present."
~Unknown
"Things change, friends leave, and life doesn't stop for anybody."
~Stepgen Chbosky

I really like this. You are an amzing writer!:) This has so much details and power behind it. It makes me wish that something like that would happen to me

Ellimee said...
on Jul. 21 2011 at 12:06 pm
A couple run-on sentences blend too much in the second paragraph. But romance is your writing ability! Seriously! Your description makes ME feel like I'm in love, and I'm horrible when it comes to romance! Keep it going!

eMiLyP GOLD said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 5:06 pm
eMiLyP GOLD, Jeannette, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Life is short; speak your mind, say what ya wanna say, and do what ya wanna do (as long as you don't get caught!).

I understand what you're saying. : )

on Jul. 20 2011 at 4:30 pm
destined_for_fame BRONZE, Privet Drive, California
4 articles 3 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Shoot for the moon, because even if you miss you'll land among the stars."

I just find it a little boring and predictable, that's all.

eMiLyP GOLD said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 9:49 am
eMiLyP GOLD, Jeannette, Pennsylvania
13 articles 6 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is short; speak your mind, say what ya wanna say, and do what ya wanna do (as long as you don't get caught!).

It may be cliche, but it's more relatable that way. I loved it. : )

on Jun. 30 2011 at 1:03 pm
Kat4ever333 GOLD, Orange, California
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Favorite Quote:
I make dark things beautiful and beautiful things dark!
-Kerli I.L.U

i want more!its so good


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